JackLuis
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I posted a new story and anxiously awaited the cheers from an appreciative group of readers. It took three days for all three chapters to get put up and while it was getting reads, and scores (poor but almost respectable.), there are no comments at all.
Desperate, I posted a request for feed back in the Story Feedback forum. I wanted to see if my first female MC was believable. I guess if you can't write Female VP, you're SOL for selling stories, so I was more than a little anxious.
Anyway, two women responded and to my chagrin neither liked it or apparently read to the third page. While I'm not "Wonderful", I think I do well enough to be worth finishing a Chapter? From the comments I see that the readers seem to have a different sense of pacing, or?
In two Lit pages I cover five scenes and about three hours story time, yet I got comments on the length of the conversation in the setup yet that conversation took about 4-5 paragraphs, with more breaks for dialog. Real time maybe forty seconds, I don't see much I could remove and make the points that needed to be made to fill in the story?
My question is as we are writing and it can take up to several hours to dream it up, our readers might have a whole different time sense, if they are putting the kids down for a nap, they might not feel the pace of the story, or they might be impatient for "The Good Parts".
Perhaps Lit conditions a reader to expect the "good parts" in the first 500 words? Placing a complex character in a situation where they can be diddled takes more than 500 words, if it is not just "I kikked down..."
Massad Ayoob, a gun writer talks about when you are in a gunfight, time seems to slow down, don't remember the term but I have felt the same thing, but not in a gunfight.
Can the reverse happen, when you read a story and the words just seem to drag and you'd swear grass grows quicker that this plot! Is it the author or the reader who is out of synch?
Or is it that the two women who were generous enough to read and comment were expecting Slam, Bam, "What's your name?"
The more I write the less I understand.
Desperate, I posted a request for feed back in the Story Feedback forum. I wanted to see if my first female MC was believable. I guess if you can't write Female VP, you're SOL for selling stories, so I was more than a little anxious.
Anyway, two women responded and to my chagrin neither liked it or apparently read to the third page. While I'm not "Wonderful", I think I do well enough to be worth finishing a Chapter? From the comments I see that the readers seem to have a different sense of pacing, or?
In two Lit pages I cover five scenes and about three hours story time, yet I got comments on the length of the conversation in the setup yet that conversation took about 4-5 paragraphs, with more breaks for dialog. Real time maybe forty seconds, I don't see much I could remove and make the points that needed to be made to fill in the story?
My question is as we are writing and it can take up to several hours to dream it up, our readers might have a whole different time sense, if they are putting the kids down for a nap, they might not feel the pace of the story, or they might be impatient for "The Good Parts".
Perhaps Lit conditions a reader to expect the "good parts" in the first 500 words? Placing a complex character in a situation where they can be diddled takes more than 500 words, if it is not just "I kikked down..."
Massad Ayoob, a gun writer talks about when you are in a gunfight, time seems to slow down, don't remember the term but I have felt the same thing, but not in a gunfight.
Can the reverse happen, when you read a story and the words just seem to drag and you'd swear grass grows quicker that this plot! Is it the author or the reader who is out of synch?
Or is it that the two women who were generous enough to read and comment were expecting Slam, Bam, "What's your name?"
The more I write the less I understand.
