Why is this a good story?

[Dual_Triode]

It's kind of an odd request for feedback, I guess, but I'm perplexed. In just one week, my second submission, Life Imitates Art, has had over 18,000 views, earned a 4.07 rating, and a coveted yellow E from the lit editors. I've also received over a dozen personal feedback messages with actual email addresses. I seem to have struck a chord with some readers. I'm at a loss to explain why, exactly.

Perhaps a bit of background might help. This submission was an experiment in writing style. I didn't sit down at the computer and write the story. Rather, I narrated the story into a voice recorder and later transcribed it to text. There was some cleanup work, of course, but the cadence, prose, and story line originated with the spoken words.

One feedback message I received called the writing conceptual. I'm not quite sure what they meant by that. There is a bit of recursion present: the author telling a story about being an author... Maybe they were referring to the way I tied art and life together.

I couldn't be more pleased with the unexpected response I've gotten. A rating of 4 is quite fair, but an Editor's Choice tag is surprising. Even my first submission has ridden on this story's coattails and edged into the Hot zone.

So, If anyone wants to comment on what works in this story, or what doesn't work, I'd be grateful. I'm starting to form ideas about my writing voice, hoping to avoid mistakes and capitalize on successes.

Peace.

 

[LaRocha]

It's kind of an odd request for feedback, I guess, but I'm perplexed. In just one week, my second submission, Life Imitates Art, has had over 18,000 views, earned a 4.07 rating, and a coveted yellow E from the lit editors. I've also received over a dozen personal feedback messages with actual email addresses. I seem to have struck a chord with some readers. I'm at a loss to explain why, exactly...

The chord you struck was Gmaj7. the reader n editor here like storiez bout fuking. I red it, I gave it five, it good story, it will be "H" for 'hot' in week or two. Gode Jobe, you keep write story about fuking and you get more positive re-in-force-ment.


addendenumunum: I red the first line of "Bryan sat at the Plaza bar staring into his scotch whiskey." Didn't like, didn't finis, too long. I like story bout fuking.

 

[Dual_Triode]

I'm partial to Emin7, lol. I appreciate a good "wham bam thank you ma'am" story myself, once in a while. I think there may be more going on than gratuitous sex, however. My story had less graphic sex than others I've read, maybe more eroticism.

The Bryan Whiting story was a romantic novella, so it started out slowly, on purpose. If I had opened with "Bryan rolled Jenny over and took her in the ass," there would have been nowhere left to go. Not very romantic, either.