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JoshuaGlynn

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Hey folks

The next chapter of Night Eternal is up.

Two best friends, Ryan and Coby, have known each other since just after they were born. One night after a wild night at the club, Coby goes missing, and is eventually presumed dead. Well they are half right, as Coby becomes tangled up in the mafia, among other things, and is trapped by obligation he never wanted. Now all that Coby wants is to get back to Ryan. If only his two thousand year old Vampire boss would let him…

In this chapter, Family Business, Coby learns about the new job he has been training for. He still has some things to learn though, and he meets a new friend, gets a new place to live, and throws a private party.

This chapter is a bit bisexual, where the others have been gay, but they are much more then stroke material. I write stories that happen to have sex in them, not he other way around.

I would love to hear what you think about it, and would love to receive any feedback or critizism that you have on my story.

Here is a link to this chapter
Night Eternal Chapter 3: Family Business

Or if you would like to check out the story from the beginning:
Night Eternal Prologue: A Thief in the Night

Thanks for your time,
Joshua
 
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Well, none of this is my cup of tea, personally, but let me post a reply to try and get you some publicity. Good luck! :)
 
Well, none of this is my cup of tea, personally, but let me post a reply to try and get you some publicity. Good luck! :)

Thanks for the effort CW... I tend to get good ratings, and a lot of "Awesome" and "Cool can't wait for the next chapter" But I find it hard to get any real feedback...

I know it is the genre that I write in, and there are not many GLBT folks that frequent the feedback section. sigh...

Thanks anyway

Josh
 
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