New Story/Questions about comments

[ericahope]

My second story was posted today. I'd love it if people would take a look and leave me any feedback or comments they see fit. I'm interested in constructive criticism. Is it well written? Does the plot hold together enough? Does it turn you on? The story is called "One Small Step".

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=844010&page=submissions

I've also revamped my previous story - Rocky Mountain Summers - to make changes that others have suggested. You can either leave me feedback here, on the story comment section itself, or by email through the forum Lit provides. I'll take it by any method! (no, no...not that. Get your mind out of the gutter!)

Again, thanks to my editors!

Also, I have a question about comments people leave, or maybe it's more of a complaint. So far, two people have left public comments on the story. They didn't appear to like it, but their criticism had nothing to do with the writing, plot, characters, eroticism, etc. It seemed they were more critical of the actions of either me, the author, or my character in the story. They both seem irritated that the characters in the story, particularly my husband and I, decided to engage in "relations" with other married couples. It's almost as if they want to make a moral judgment on the characters, which just seems strange to me in many ways. I'm not saying I would do this in real life; I say up front it's pure fantasy. I have no intent whatsoever to have sex outside of marriage. I actually do think it's morally wrong, but we all have fantasies. I'm just writing about one, not acting it out. I just don't get what they're so upset about... Does anyone have a clue about this? Should I just ignore them?

Thanks so much!

Erica

 

[bb_peaks]

I haven't read your story yet (I will later this evening) but I glanced at your comments. They look like some that you would receive in the loving wives category. You learn to take these just with a grain of salt. Most of them—although I have no idea why they come here on an erotic site in the first place—only want to see plain jane vanilla sex and if you stray from that, wanna tear you a newe one. Just take it at and don't worry about them.
The first time I posted into loving wives i couldn't understand why such hatred from the comments. Anonymous at that. I've learned to take it as ignorant folk who are only looking to provoke you. If they truly thought it was wrong, they shouldn't be reading it in the first place. Pot meet kettle.
I look forward to your story and will write more for you later.

 

[bb_peaks]

I finally had a chance to read your story and I really loved it. Youd did have a couple of wrong words in it: I didn't take notes while reading, I believe one was a were and should have been where and you had news when it should have been new.

The only other minor thing I have is when you use quotes, the period or comma comes before the end quote. ." or ,"

 

[ericahope]

I finally had a chance to read your story and I really loved it. Youd did have a couple of wrong words in it: I didn't take notes while reading, I believe one was a were and should have been where and you had news when it should have been new.

The only other minor thing I have is when you use quotes, the period or comma comes before the end quote. ." or ,"

Thanks for taking a look at my story bb I appreciate it. I sent you a message back.

Erica

 

[daus42]

Love your stories Erica...I'm no critic but I know what turns me on and the One Small Step story is very realistic. Thanks for sharing it- you should do another chapter or two.

 

[ericahope]

Love your stories Erica...I'm no critic but I know what turns me on and the One Small Step story is very realistic. Thanks for sharing it- you should do another chapter or two.

Thanks! I appreciate your response and I'm pondering a second chapter, but we'll see I'm glad it turned you on!

Erica