Hello Tayis. The broiling conflicting emotions of the thre main characters in yourstory are truly intense and well written. There is some clearer grammar and editing to be done in onlya coupleof places, the dialogue wher "Novak demands she announce her servitude totheAryan and onership o him. The gist is very cear though and the moties emotionaly drien. I, Quesla, The Blind Witch am very anxious for more of th story. Love Light: Qusla.
Talyis Bagley: Talons ofthe DarkHert
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TalyisBagley
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Hello Quesla,
It just stumbled across this board and found your wonderful note. Thank you for reading my series. There is much more to come for Novak, Talyis, and Gareth - I have been working and mulling over chapters 5-8 for two weeks now.
To All of the readers of "The Talons of a Dark Heart"
Thank you for reading my series. And being forgiving- it is my first story that I have shared with people. Also thank you for your comments so much. I value them all. The publishing has caught up with the writing. LOL. I have been working and mulling over the next 3 chapters over the last 2 weeks (now nursing a broken heart that I dont want to spill into the plot so much) and hope to submit soon, soon, soon.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=423142