Looking for an editor, story about a May/December fling

[mschievous63]

Hi everyone. I've contacted one volunteer editor, but would like a few pairs of eyes to help me with a story. It would be my first lit submission, so any grammatical advice or critiques on flow or description would be appreciated.

Basically, it is a story about a wealthy older woman who seduces a naive boytoy (18 of course). She uses her status and money to sweep him off his feet and dazzle him, but really she just uses him to satisfy her own selfish desires and to have as bragging rights to her friends.

A warning: there isn't much nuts and bolts sex in my story (or at least the first part). I am more interested on whether the teasing lead-up and atmosphere is effective.

I would appreciate a male perspective. Thank you!

 

[orvette1]

I'll help

Hello,
I'll help you if you wouild like. I have done editing in the past and enjoy it. E mail me at someone@somewhere.com

 

[_Lynn_]

You might want to take your e-mail address out--they aren't allowed.
Use PM to pass that info along.

 

[Dragonlipz]

I'd be more than happy to provide some

insight and perspective into your story.

 

[sadsack2008]

Hi everyone. I've contacted one volunteer editor, but would like a few pairs of eyes to help me with a story. It would be my first lit submission, so any grammatical advice or critiques on flow or description would be appreciated.

Basically, it is a story about a wealthy older woman who seduces a naive boytoy (18 of course). She uses her status and money to sweep him off his feet and dazzle him, but really she just uses him to satisfy her own selfish desires and to have as bragging rights to her friends.

A warning: there isn't much nuts and bolts sex in my story (or at least the first part). I am more interested on whether the teasing lead-up and atmosphere is effective.

I would appreciate a male perspective. Thank you!

would be more than happy to oblige ..am on yahoo someone@somewhere.co.uk