Feedback for a rejected poem

[MickNasty]

Would anybody care to read a poem that I wrote about death and a serial killer then provide me with some honest feedback?

The subject matter can't be posted as a submission, and I can only assume that those reading this board would feel the same - that I shouldn't post it for general consumption.

It isn't gory, just a bit insane. Trying to crawl into the mind of a psychopath was an odd thing to do.

So, unless the consensus is just to post the damn thing here, send me a note and I'll fire it back.

Thanks
Mick.

 

[DocktorWu]

Odd and Timely

MickNasty,

I just submitted a poem entitled "Therapy For Serial Killer". Now I wonder if they will post it.

It seems customary to post poems you want a comment on in here. There is a thread for critique called "not for the thin skinned" so if you can take blunt but sensitive opinion post it there. Although if it's a play by play of a obscene act against a person be prepared to have it deleted. You have the right to expression but the responsibility to make sure that it is not assault. There are plenty of helpful people here. You may want to contact one of the moderators, they are listed at the upper left of forum header.
But if the Grand Poobah's rejected the submission, its a safe bet it crossed some line.

Keep writing anyway, perhaps try a metaphor to express the action in your poem.

 

[MickNasty]

MickNasty,

I just submitted a poem entitled "Therapy For Serial Killer". Now I wonder if they will post it.

It seems customary to post poems you want a comment on in here. There is a thread for critique called "not for the thin skinned" so if you can take blunt but sensitive opinion post it there. Although if it's a play by play of a obscene act against a person be prepared to have it deleted. You have the right to expression but the responsibility to make sure that it is not assault. There are plenty of helpful people here. You may want to contact one of the moderators, they are listed at the upper left of forum header.
But if the Grand Poobah's rejected the submission, its a safe bet it crossed some line.

Keep writing anyway, perhaps try a metaphor to express the action in your poem.

I don't have a problem with blunt criticism, so I may post to that thread. The issue was that I was trying to get into the mind of a serial killer so the poem centered on killing - or "snuff" as the rejection quoted. And, I should add that I only use the term "rejection" simply because that was how it was stated to me. I take no offense nor insult to the word in this context.

I like your idea though - I'll post it to "not for the thin skinned" and let the mods decide whether or not it deserves to live... serial poets as it were.