Is there a story here?

fifty5

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last night my wife and I were away from home in an hotel.

My wife had a nightmare - filling the car with diesel and the filling station guy was shutting up. Eventually, the tank was full and the filling ststion was closed. The guy implied that the only way she could pay was with sexual favours...

Meanwhile, I'd fancied the girl who'd been our waitress at dinner: slim, with sexy arms. My fantasy was inviting her to 'party' with us when the restaurant closed.

In a strange bed, I slept and woke, slept and woke, slept and woke.

I built my fantasy each time I woke...

The girl (an east European immigrant) had accepted my invitation and come to our room.

I'd greeted her with a kiss that made the terms of the invitation clear.

At each awakening, my fantasy progressed...

First she came and sat on the bed, accepting a glass of the brandy I'd taken with us (hotel booze is too expensive).

Next time she kissed my wife - while I loosened her top.

Then she turned to me while my wife caressed her and I felt her breasts, then unfastened her trousers.

The next time I woke, I cupped her sex in my hand and found her snatch wet, while my wife nuzzled her neck.

The next time I woke, I told her I was a blood-donor, so was 'clean' - and had had a vasectomy, so couldn't make her pregnant, and asked if I could penetrate her and come inside her ... and she agreed.

The last time I woke, i fingered her until she came, then she licked my wife to climax and I fucked her till I came too.

My question is which story to write for the best reader response, my wife's nightmare or my fantasy, or both? So far, since it's mine, the latter currently has most detail, but I could filll in the gaps in either or both.

Opinions please...
 
I can definitely see some potential here. Either with just the threesome story, perhaps with a prelude of the wife having to "pay off" the gas station attendant while you keep watch outside the car. ;)

Or, maybe as two different scenarios, with you seducing the waitress and your wife being coerced by the gas station attendant, then meeting up later to share stories.

Or, maybe the gas station attendant is the husband of the waitress, and is one of those controlling types who sees no problem with coercing another woman into sex, but once he discovers that you and your wife have had a little fun with his, he decides that's not fair . . . .
 
Hey there, slyc one. :kiss:

So, about the story thing...What if both the husband and the wife are having their respective dreams at the same time, but you never let on that they're dreaming. Just kind of go back and forth between the two stories, and then they wake up doing each other in the hotel room bed.
 
Hey there, slyc one. :kiss:

So, about the story thing...What if both the husband and the wife are having their respective dreams at the same time, but you never let on that they're dreaming. Just kind of go back and forth between the two stories, and then they wake up doing each other in the hotel room bed.
Noooo! No "Just a dream after all" endings, I beg yoou! if these are dreams, say so-- it's not going to change the hotness quotient.

Otherwise, I kinda like telling both stories simultaneously, switching every couple of paragraphs or so, and having them link together somewhere.


or maybe not...:eek:
 
Noooo! No "Just a dream after all" endings, I beg yoou! if these are dreams, say so-- it's not going to change the hotness quotient.

Otherwise, I kinda like telling both stories simultaneously, switching every couple of paragraphs or so, and having them link together somewhere.


or maybe not...:eek:

Well, I was thinking of boring old married folks not really into each other anymore. Then finding out there's still something there, you know? Spice things up.
 
Noooo! No "Just a dream after all" endings, I beg yoou! if these are dreams, say so-- it's not going to change the hotness quotient.

Yup. The story where 'it's all a dream' or 'it was her husband really and really she knew it all along' endings are dull; they always break the impact of a story. As with others I can't see why these plots are mutually exclusive - diner on the edge of the filling station forecourt, end of the day both premises closing up, husband in the diner getting it on with the waitress, and, at the moment of climax looks out through the windows to see his wife being taken by the filling station attendant...?
 
As with others I can't see why these plots are mutually exclusive
I do see that potential, but it isn't something I could write because of the emotions in real life. For me it was just something pleasant to think about while I dropped off to sleep ... again. For the lass, it was a nightmare leading towards rape. Blending the two together would make me feel awful - as if I were committing rape.

Maybe after time has gone by and memory of the emotions has faded away, but not yet. Seeing those suggestions and analysing my reaction to them - that even altering the story of her nightmare so that both scenarios were consensual wouldn't be enough yet - means that I can now answer my own question.

Thanks everyone for helping me see that.
 
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