Please review 1st draft

[FloridaCouple]

forget it. feelings hurt. going to cry now.

 

[The_Fractal_King]

First, some background: I'm Mike and my wife's name is Cindy. We've been married for approximately 10 years. Cindy is 5'7", blonde, 135 pounds, a set of beautiful legs, and firm 36 C cup breasts. I am 5'6", good build, and not very endowed. My cock measures 6" when hard. My cock size is the reason why Cindy has lovers outside our marriage.

People just come on here, see what reviewers say never to do and do it intentionally don't they?

Anyway:
Grammar could be better.
There's no real plot and stroke stories generally don't need reviewing.
The dialogue was stilted to the point of distraction.
Also, I had no idea what the hell was going on.

 

[The_Fractal_King]

forget it. feelings hurt. going to cry now.

Um . . . sorry? People have been told worse thing you know.

 

[sr71plt]

Um . . . sorry? People have been told worse thing you know.

I could see your point. I can't quite understand how people come here for comment who haven't already checked out the types of things reviewers pick out to comment on. The paragraph you cite (the rest of it was deleted before I got a look) is a classic example of what reviewers jump on here.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I could see your point. I can't quite understand how people come here for comment who haven't already checked out the types of things reviewers pick out to comment on. The paragraph you cite (the rest of it was deleted before I got a look) is a classic example of what reviewers jump on here.

Typically, they come in her expecting us to be sooooo nice and complimentary. So what's the good in that?

"Great piece of writing" doesn't help anyone

 

[starrkers]

forget it. feelings hurt. going to cry now.

Don't seek feedback if you don't want the truth.

 

[where]

forget it. feelings hurt. going to cry now.

People just come on here, see what reviewers say never to do and do it intentionally don't they?

Anyway:
Grammar could be better.
There's no real plot and stroke stories generally don't need reviewing.
The dialogue was stilted to the point of distraction.
Also, I had no idea what the hell was going on.

But that was mild feedback!

And since when is a 6 inch cock too small?