Hey all,
I've got three stories waiting to be edited, and I'm hoping someone will be interested in taking a look! I think they're fantastic, but almost everything can be improved with feedback. I'm mostly looking for impact, but basic grammar and structure is always valuable. I've got Vista, so I would suggest a txt file exchange or email, as a friend had difficulties opening my Word doc. Your call, though.
Topics include: Watersports (urine play), BDSM, control, loving relationships.
To make this even more tantalizing of an advert, the stories are based on actual events in my sexual exploits. *saucy wink* You can have all three chapters, or just one at a time.
I will say that I sent a request through the volunteer request system, but haven't heard back yet. I waited the 72 hours and then followed up to see if the editor was still interested, per the instructions. No love yet, but as I didn't specify a time frame, that may be a factor. I would love to have a response within the week so I can get a feel for how my writing style is taken. My goal is to become a frequent contributor and high-mark author on this site!
Here's a sample:
"My body started to react, especially when I struggled and he pushed more forcefully on my head. I imagined what he must be seeing. My body curled up alongside his, most of my face hidden by my hair, my mouth pressed against his body. A little more of the urine streamed out of my mouth in spite of myself. But he didn’t stop to let me lick it up. I felt the sticky residue settle around my cheeks. "
I've got three stories waiting to be edited, and I'm hoping someone will be interested in taking a look! I think they're fantastic, but almost everything can be improved with feedback. I'm mostly looking for impact, but basic grammar and structure is always valuable. I've got Vista, so I would suggest a txt file exchange or email, as a friend had difficulties opening my Word doc. Your call, though.
Topics include: Watersports (urine play), BDSM, control, loving relationships.
To make this even more tantalizing of an advert, the stories are based on actual events in my sexual exploits. *saucy wink* You can have all three chapters, or just one at a time.
I will say that I sent a request through the volunteer request system, but haven't heard back yet. I waited the 72 hours and then followed up to see if the editor was still interested, per the instructions. No love yet, but as I didn't specify a time frame, that may be a factor. I would love to have a response within the week so I can get a feel for how my writing style is taken. My goal is to become a frequent contributor and high-mark author on this site!
Here's a sample:
"My body started to react, especially when I struggled and he pushed more forcefully on my head. I imagined what he must be seeing. My body curled up alongside his, most of my face hidden by my hair, my mouth pressed against his body. A little more of the urine streamed out of my mouth in spite of myself. But he didn’t stop to let me lick it up. I felt the sticky residue settle around my cheeks. "
