Summer With My Stepsisters

[mememe621]

After a really productive January with this story and some work in Feb., I seem to have hit a wall. I've gone back and made a few changes to earlier threads, including totally redoing thread 3.1 (hope GoodBoy enjoys it more this time around!).

I'm hoping to keep tweaking and even continuing the story (thinking about taking a digression to explore the women at the bookstore where Mike's working--really unsure where I want to take things with the twins), but I wanted to invite/request involvement from any of the authors on this site.

Got criticism or feedback or general thoughts on stuff you like or don't like about the story? Great. I'm always happy to hear feedback.

Got a thread or threads that you want to contribute? Excellent. I think my preference is still for branching threads instead of just continuing the last one, but if you're excited about continuing the last one, I'm sure not going to stop you!

And I'm happy to contribute threads in return to your stories, if that's cool with you.

SWMS is here: http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/5233

Thanks!
M.

 

[Torg]

I like the story, and the sister kicking him out of the room was interesting. I look forward to more.

 

[mememe621]

haha, I look forward to more too! But for now I'm taking a bit of a break from writing new threads for that story--I'm working on a couple of threads for Dorm Life. Just submitted the first one now.

 

[Torg]

Approved and everything.

P.S. Have I mentioned how much I want a threesome with my avatar babes? At least, some alone time with the one on the left?

 

[Dr. Tentakelliebe]

Critique

Very well done all around, (at least as far i have read), keep it up.

 

[mememe621]

2 sweet new threads by Torg, "They all keep doing what they're doing" (35.2) and "A reward for learning your lessons" (40.2) for all of our enjoyment!

(Will approve the 2nd thread as soon as I get a chance)

 

[mememe621]

After some writer's block, finally added two new threads of my own, "First there's a strange noise to investigate" (http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.page/81939/) and its child "Marisa and her big dildo" (http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.page/81944/81939).

Over the coming days I'll be opening up the story some more, adding in a few new characters to spice things up.

Feedback and contributions still welcome and encouraged!

 

[mememe621]

Today's the kick off of Chapter 4: It's Off to Work (http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.page/81991/).

We're leaving the apartment and the stepsisters behind for a bit to check out Mike's bookstore. Any guesses what he'll find there?

 

[quickd]

I love this series. More with the stepsisters!!! Don't forget them. This is a great one. Starts slow but that just makes it worth the wait! :-D Looking forward to more!

 

[mememe621]

Thanks, quickd, and your contribution is excellent. I've just approved it and everything. I especially like the idea of Traci plotting a foursome, it fits in well with how she got turned on by Mike and Jessica together earlier.

I hope you'll continue to write for the story!

 

[Dr. Tentakelliebe]

Well beyond the average, well done, keep up the work, it is good practice. I won't be surprised to find you publish, though perhaps in a different genre, or not.

 

[gizmoo69]

I've added a thread, but just after submitting it I suddenly thought that I would like to split it into two separate threads, after the point where Marisa says "You're disgusting!"

I will do this if/when you approve the thread.

By the way, great story. It's managed to drag me out an extended hiatus from CHYOO. Keep it up!

 

[mememe621]

I'm back after a CHYOO hiatus of a few days, and thanks all for the feedback, and Torg and gizmoo69 for the threads! I've just approved them all, and added a new one of mine to keep the Mike-at-the-bookstore storyline going. Hopefully I'll keep adding threads to that all week.

Glad to hear people are enjoying this story! I hope we can keep doing cool things with it.

 

[mememe621]

I've added a thread, but just after submitting it I suddenly thought that I would like to split it into two separate threads, after the point where Marisa says "You're disgusting!"

I will do this if/when you approve the thread.

Oh, and splitting it makes sense to me if you want to give the option of a different reaction from Mike (though I think the anger is a good in-character reaction from Mike, I'm trying to leave him struggling between being too submissive most of the time and then sticking up for himself too much when he's provoked, like he just can't find a happy medium.)

 

[gizmoo69]

I'm trying to leave him struggling between being too submissive most of the time and then sticking up for himself too much when he's provoked, like he just can't find a happy medium.

I figured that was the kind of character that Mike was, and maybe just a tad confused. I just thought it would be good to allow others to put their input into the thread, rather than being too directive.

I'm not sure if it's because my meddling needs approval, but I'm having trouble splitting the thread up. It seems like I can't remove the paragraphs in the original thread. Hey ho, I will try later.

 

[mememe621]

Thank you Torg, for adding "Jessie takes what she wants," (http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.page/117425/76695) a great new thread in a story that's been dormant for a long time.

Anyone else interested in adding a thread or two? I love it when people add to something I've written. The story starts here (http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/5233).