Should I continue... or not?

[lustn4sis]

I've had all these fantasies about my little sister in my head for years and years and I finally wrote something out and posted my very first story on lit back in December - "I Lust My Sister Meridian" (http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=343452). I ended up writing two additional chapters to it and positioning the story so that many more chapters are possible.

Each of the 3 stories is rated now at above 4.5 so I know they're half-decent which is cool, and I love getting feedback on them, but the thing is though, once I got the fantasy of my little sister written down, my drive has significantly decreased. I feel like what's the point in continuing. Does anyone else feel that way when writing, like "what am doing this for?"

What motivates you to write? Should I keep writing the rest of the story? What do you all think?

And last but not least, what did you think of the story?

Ch2 - http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=347664
Ch3 - http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=351159

 

[litchipking]

Welcome lustn

I read your first Meridian story. I’ve got to say first of all that I’m not a big fuck-my-sister fan but I did like your story. Good flow and great action. The tickling / teasing was my favorite part and I thought it was a smart way for the brother to “innocently” cop a feel.

I did think it all happened too quickly though. If he was going to be there alone with her for two weeks then a little more tease, close encounters, and innuendo would have been fun to play with. They went from nothing to him masturbating while smelling her panties to tongue kissing to watching her masturbate to fondling to fucking in about, what was it, an hour or two? Both of them came at least twice and she finishes the story by saying that she’s ready to go again.

I had a hard time believing all of the sex dialogue. "You're eating me so good! Oh my God, here I cum!!!" I must be doing it wrong because she has never said that to me. Your story also had a few too many exclamation marks. This sentence alone had enough for the whole story.

"Nobody has ever licked my pussy before," - "Mmm... you fit perfectly," she groaned. "I've always fantasized that you'd be my first." Either she’s lying or you’re lying – there’s no fucking way this girl is a virgin.

Overall I do like your writing, despite the bit of criticism I mentioned. Really, it’s a good story.

*****

What are you writing for? Well, you have to answer that. It sounds like you had a story running around in your head for a long time. Did writing it down help or hurt? Do you wish you had kept your fantasy bottled up just for you or are you glad you shared it?

What motivates me to write? Personally, I love writing, just as I love reading. I, too, have had stories running through my head for years and have just recently decided to write a few down.

For me, writing is like building a piece of furniture or growing a garden. It’s the time and the work, the thought and the care. It’s looking at your finished product and feeling a small sense of pride; knowing that you created something. Maybe that something is not very good, but it’s yours and it’s unique.

It’s having your words touch someone. It’s finding the right turn of a phrase or the clever metaphor. It’s describing a place or situation that your reader has never experienced before and making them feel like they are there. It’s describing something so familiar and finding the words that make your reader think, “Yeah, that’s it”.

I chose erotic fiction because it has no boundaries, nothing is off-limits. Sex can be romantic and sweet and raw and dirty. It can make you feel powerful. It can make you feel vulnerable.

I chose Literotica because I thought it was the most professional of the sites I had visited. I love that there are Writer’s Resources and Volunteer Editors. More than anything, I love the instant feedback from readers and writers – just like you’re getting right now.

Wow, that’s a big pile of shit. But hey, you asked.

Happy writing,

Chip

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Should I keep writing the rest of the story? What do you all think?

And last but not least, what did you think of the story?

Well, my only real observation is there really isn't much of a plot for you to advance.

 

[lustn4sis]

Thanks for the comments - exactly what I would expect feedback to be. While comments such as "dude, your story was fucking awesome," or "man, you suck," have their place, they really do nothing to help to advance your writing skills.

I really just want some objective criticism of my writing. I'm surprised that after over 100 views of this thread, only 2 people have responded. To be honest, the lack of feedback, either positive or negative, is probably my main demotivator. The fantasies are in my head, they're mine, and I can play them for myself any time I want. I share them, because I wonder if maybe others share similar thoughts as me. I want to hear what those thoughts are. Does my story do anything for you? Maybe it could if I told it better somehow.

I'd like to get an overall sense if the story is worth continuing. You're right that there's really no plot to advance, but take it for what it was meant to be, (hopefully) creative and stimulating, sexual fantasy of a 20 year old perverted male. Do your fantasies have amazing plots? The only other thing I have to say about that is at least the story is original. After reading the same scenarios over and over so many times on lit, I'm trying my best to make the story different and new as much as possible.

As far as where to take the story, there's plenty of relationships to explore, plenty of secrets to reveal. My approach was to tell how one guy's forbidden fantasies come to life. How he comes to realize that his secret taboo desires that he's kept hidden from everyone turn out to be something he shares in common with many of his family members. Is that interesting to people? Can any of you relate to him, had similar feelings as him? Do people want to hear more? Am I wasting my time? Blah, blah, blah...