Thoughts of fantasy

[gauchecritic]

I'm in the middle of a story and the female protag. is lying in the bathtub soaking. She begins to masturbate and fantasises about a lover.

When I indicate thought I use italics. If I go with this it means there is going to be two or three paragraphs of italics as she thinks about a scenario that will excite her.

Then he'll say "Hey honey that's a mighty fine pair you got there" and I'll just blush and simper while he ogles my cleavage.

I'll look down and see that he has a hard on and just brush the back of my hand across his jeans and say "Well I'm glad you like 'em"

Yes? No? Too much italics or italics are fine as long as you can see where they end?

 

[neonlyte]

It works for me. I know some don't like the use of italics, I view them as a necessity to distinguish a sub-section within the scene.

 

[rgraham666]

That doesn't seem to be difficult to read.

If it was more I'd break it up with some action, and descriptions of her emotions.

My $0.02.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I don't see a problem with doing it that way. The readability is fine. I do it differently, but I'm different about most things

 

[cloudy]

For whatever it's worth, I usually put thoughts in italics, too.

 

[tickledkitty]

I do that too. The story I co-wrote with Marsh has quite a bit of that, which we put in italics. Nobody complained.

 

[cantdog]

Yes. ..

 

[Stella_Omega]

You know what I like? The future tense.

 

[cloudy]

You know what I like? The future tense.

. .

 

[AvoidingRealWork]

You know what I like? The future tense.

I think I'll do one, just for fun.

 

[gauchecritic]

You know what I like? The future tense.

Never thought of that. Expectation. Anticipation. I like it.

Unfortunately I've now got into the mechanics of masturbation, what is used, how she came to find out about it.

May be a while before I can get to the fantasy itself.

 

[Stella_Omega]

Never thought of that. Expectation. Anticipation. I like it.

Unfortunately I've now got into the mechanics of masturbation, what is used, how she came to find out about it.

May be a while before I can get to the fantasy itself.

It's all good!