Advice and coaching request

[voluptuary_manque]

Hi again,
I've got a darker story but I don't think it's ready for posting and would like a couple of other authors to look at it via PM or email. I need to know if it's in the right category or needs to be somewhere else. Is there enough sex or should I add a fourway at the end? Is the ending an ending or just a place I stopped? Oh yeah, and have I caught all the typos?!

 

[StephenThorn]

Hi again,
I've got a darker story but I don't think it's ready for posting and would like a couple of other authors to look at it via PM or email. I need to know if it's in the right category or needs to be somewhere else. Is there enough sex or should I add a fourway at the end? Is the ending an ending or just a place I stopped? Oh yeah, and have I caught all the typos?!

I'd be willing to review your "darker story" for you, give you my opinion and proofread it for you. Please send it to my email at stephenthornsinbox(at)yahoo.com .

 

[voluptuary_manque]

Thank-you, Stephen. I will send the current version this evening. That makes four reviewers with Varian, MJL and RockHard88. Many heads make light work. Perhaps mine will come on .