Hunted and its sequel

[furrybert]

Hi Everyone,

I wrote a story last year called Hunted, which got some good feedback. It's about an English woman who gets captured by a Serbian soldier, and the soldier will do just about anything to get her to tell him why she's there ;-)

Here is the link to it if anyone would like to take a look (please note, this is in the non consensual section):
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=223792

I've now written a (sortof) sequel. Although the male lead Sasha is the same, the female Suzanne is a little younger and more naive. Here's the link to that one, too:
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=260764

Feedback would be very much appreciated for either story!

Cheers

 

[SweetErika]

I enjoy many NC/Reluctance stories, but had to stop on page 2 of "Hunted" when it started describing hardcore rape. I draw the line when a character isn't enjoying the act at all, and this story went well beyond that. Until that point, it was pretty good, but I was looking forward to it continuing on the reluctance path and was sorely disappointed when it turned very violent.

Do people of sound mind actually get off on descriptions of truly hurting another? I know that sounds bad, but I just can't imagine anyone with an ounce of empathy getting aroused by a description of a beating or brutal rape.

From a technical aspect, watch repeat words, as I noticed words like 'moaned' and 'entirely' were used over and over again, sometimes in the same paragraph.

 

[wudelfin]

feedback

Hunted was good, a very twisted love story. the second was a pale comparison. I would love to see what happens.

 

[theredmuse0]

Furrybert, this has to be my all time favorite story I have read on here. And I find it to be extremely hard to even find stories such as yours.

All in all, please keep writing!

 

[Darkniciad]

*Doing his best Altered Beast impression* Rise from your grave!



I think you might be better served to utilize the author's feedback form or to PM ( which may send an email alert, depending upon how the author has configured settings )

The author only has four posts, and the most recent was six years ago.

However, the most recent activity shows "yesterday", so the author is still active on Literotica.

 

[Cruel2BKind]

I enjoy many NC/Reluctance stories, but had to stop on page 2 of "Hunted" when it started describing hardcore rape. I draw the line when a character isn't enjoying the act at all, and this story went well beyond that. Until that point, it was pretty good, but I was looking forward to it continuing on the reluctance path and was sorely disappointed when it turned very violent.

Do people of sound mind actually get off on descriptions of truly hurting another? I know that sounds bad, but I just can't imagine anyone with an ounce of empathy getting aroused by a description of a beating or brutal rape.

From a technical aspect, watch repeat words, as I noticed words like 'moaned' and 'entirely' were used over and over again, sometimes in the same paragraph.

Trying not to be pushy... but if you like reluctance, then you should try mine. I hear that it's very sweet for a noncon story, and when I wrote it I tried to put it in first time, but they switched it to noncon
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-slave-girl-2

 

[Etaski]

*Doing his best Altered Beast impression* Rise from your grave!

Lol! Oh my god, I remember playing that game in the arcade with my brothers...

I think you might be better served to utilize the author's feedback form or to PM ( which may send an email alert, depending upon how the author has configured settings )

The author only has four posts, and the most recent was six years ago.

However, the most recent activity shows "yesterday", so the author is still active on Literotica.

I like a good bit of critical thought in the morning.

 

[furrybert]

Hi there, sorry I don't come to the boards often so didn't see this. My stories have been pulled from Literotica (hopefully temporarily, this was a misunderstanding where a reader thought I had plagiarised my story as I also published through excessica and amazon under a separate pen name.)

Hopefully they will be reinstated, although the mess could have been avoided if Literotica checked their facts before they acted. They had Hunted published here in 2005 and amazon had it since 2008, so even if they did believe the story was published by two separate people then they should have accused the Amazon writer of plagiarism.

Anyway, I just wanted to say thanks for the kind words and I hope to be back on Literotica as normal shortly