Crash course on writing needed.

[liclaclalaclilaclalac]

I wrote a short story featuring the original creations of a popular Japanese's video game artist. She frequently draws stories with these character in various sexual situations and they have no concrete lore. They're just OCs she uses a random. I greatly desired to write a story involving them, one involving a husband and wife couple, the wife enjoying watching her husband have encounters with other women. Some anonymous users of another forum I frequent brought up the idea of commissioning art for the story and releasing it. So I decided to shoot my shot and sent off a request for art from the artist herself, despite her commissions being closed, or the permission to have art commissioned. I honestly did not expect a reply, but she replied the very next morning, which was around 11PM Japan time, and not only did she give me the go-ahead to use her characters, she also wants to read the finished work. So now I've been consuming various youtubes videos on proper writing and I spent the 24 hours eagerly awaiting mod approval to request pointers here. My request is simple, I'd like a crash course on 1st person writing and a few recommendations on stories if possible. I've never been this nervous, it's like meeting an idol and I really don't want to let them down.

 

[iwatchus]

This thread ran a little over a month ago where many writers made suggestions: writing advice

 

[EmilyMiller]

Notwithstanding what @iwatchus says, I’m not sure a crash course in writing exists, unless what you want is a car crash as a result. If this story is important to you, then maybe try to write a few others as practice first. That’s the only sort of crash course that I think will be productive.

 

[ElectricBlue]

What advice can one give? You become the narrator of the story and describe the events as if they were happening to you. I did this, she did that, and they did sexy things to each other.

Probably more important is to determine whether you write in present tense (not really recommended for a novice writer, as it can become clumsy really quickly, and it becomes exhausting to read because it's all now, now, now). Better to write in past tense, because you can slow down, take time to breath.

You've certainly given yourself a challenge. I'd have got a few stories under my belt first, then approached the illustrator. Doing it the other way around puts you under more pressure, because you'll need to not only get the basics right, find your own natural voice as a writer, learn how to edit etc, but also to come up with a story worth illustrating. Good luck!

 

[Rob_Royale]

As writers we learn by reading, and then by doing.
My advice is to leave the big project alone for a while and write something simpler.
Write about the last conversation you had with your significant other. Describe the location, the mood, how you felt during the talk, and of course the dialog. Then add the sex.

 

[TheWritingGroup]

You could write up to three paragraphs and post them here for comments. (The forum rules don't allow posting longer story pieces here, because that would be a way to dodge moderation for full stories.)

I thought, going into fiction writing, that I'd be a third-person-only plotter. Turns out I'm about 60% a first-person pantser. Who knew?

--Annie

 

[liclaclalaclilaclalac]

Hey thanks for the post so far. I'll check out that thread. Any recommended first person erotica? I'll be real here, I've not used a real forum in a decade, so I've forgotten how these things work.

I honestly did not think in a million years the artist would even respond to me, so I dug my own grave by shooting my shot, I was blown away she had time in her busy schedule to respond to an absolute nobody like me.

I'll admit as well, I flunked English twice. Selfishly, I am happy there is a language difference between the artist and I, so I can worry a little less. I'm "cleaning" up my rough rough draft and I'll post the first paragraph here in a bit for harsh judgment. The artist is likely going to machine translate to Japanese, So I am debating how complex I should word things.

 

[EmilyMiller]

Any recommended first person erotica?

You’ll need to be more specific about genre.

 

[liclaclalaclilaclalac]

You’ll need to be more specific about genre.

Literally anything erotic from an FPV. I am brand new to this.

 

[Jonnymc]

Well cheating mild story is a great idea, everyone has a fantastic fantasy to the idea everyone will relate and I will say the mind is easy to write a storyline for the topic cause it's very erotic

 

[Jonnymc]

What advice can one give? You become the narrator of the story and describe the events as if they were happening to you. I did this, she did that, and they did sexy things to each other.

Probably more important is to determine whether you write in present tense (not really recommended for a novice writer, as it can become clumsy really quickly, and it becomes exhausting to read because it's all now, now, now). Better to write in past tense, because you can slow down, take time to breath.

You've certainly given yourself a challenge. I'd have got a few stories under my belt first, then approached the illustrator. Doing it the other way around puts you under more pressure, because you'll need to not only get the basics right, find your own natural voice as a writer, learn how to edit etc, but also to come up with a story worth illustrating. Good luck!

That's great advice , wow sounds like you have fun with your writing skills

 

[Cagivagurl]

Creating a story from nothing but thoughts is amazingly fulfilling, but!!!!!!
I'm not sure there is a plug in... No download on becoming a literary genius.
You learn by doing. It's like learning guitar. You can't learn until you pick it up and start playing.
Yes, there are lessons in tuning, and chord progressions... The truth is, you learn as you go.
My advice is... Start... There's plenty of adages about the first step being the hardest...
You will very quickly find out if you like it... If you don't like it, you're in trouble...
I'm no expert, but I do think you need to at least dip your toe in the water...

Cagivagurl

 

[iwatchus]

Literally anything erotic from an FPV. I am brand new to this.

I think the first 39 stories of mine are all FPV, covering ten categories, so there is a range. I am not sure how good they all are, but some are not terrible.

 

[TheWritingGroup]

Hey thanks for the post so far. I'll check out that thread. Any recommended first person erotica?

My story "Pranked"!

Mostly because it was my first long story and I was very much still learning. (Still am!). It has lots of flaws. You can see where I did stupid things and avoid them in your own work. I switch between three viewpoints, four if you count me speaking as myself at the end.

Sequel is done. I'm in the final review, should be submitted this week.

--Annie

 

[lovecraft68]

You're better off reading stories along the lines of what you want and working at it yourself.

I truly believe writing and story telling can't be taught.

 

[liclaclalaclilaclalac]

All right, so here are literally the first three paragraphs I have seriously written in around 15 years. A little more back story. The characters I am writing about have sparse concrete lore. Some themes prevail throughout all of the her various pictures and manga.
1. N-Chan is the dominate in the relationship
2. They are both bisexual, but N-Chan leans far more towards lesbian.
3. Despite all the sexual encounters the artist depicts, nothing is canon.

The theme of my story is a husband has a wife with a humiliation and husband sharing fetish, she sets up rendezvous with women. N-Chan is interested in doing neglect play with her girlfriend and wants to have a romantic date culminating in a sexual encounter while bullying her girlfriend. The owner of the characters in question was fine with my idea. Here I go.


I’m anxious about this. Takane set up a double, first time ever, fine, but a mystery girl. It has me nervous. Why a date, why this extra, why the surprise? I like the simple stuff. Meet at a hotel, set up cameras, then get the deed done, happy wife and happy me. The trust in my wife is tested, the weeks of pushing us together, encouraging the late-night chats, then a date, all while the girlfriend, M-chan, remained an unknown. I worried. Had she gotten some new kink?

My thoughts focus on N-Chan, cute face, soft body, pale skin, albino she said, blue eyes, almost platinum hair, and an impressive chest for her petite body. Weeks of chatting, sharing ideas, and discussing boundaries still fresh in my mind. She was playful and talkative. My phone filled with the pictures she constantly takes, outfits for the day, meals, clouds, neighborhood cats, friends, birds, anything and everything. Her humor, from morbid to nonsensical. Her relationship with her girlfriend, sexually exploring each other while remaining undefined. A bewildering existence. I feel a pang of guilt towards all the men she's likely turned down all these years. Should I be happier about this? No, this is just part of a play and I'll do what I need to

Across the street, people start pouring out of the station exit. My eyes focused. Can I spot her in this crowd? Should I DM her? I spot her, a short white dress draped around a ghostly white body; she stands out from the crowd. She spots me, towering over my peers, and gives an energetic, cheerful wave as she walks over, trailed closely by another girl.

 

[WaxPhilosophic]

Check your local university or community college for continuing education (or non-degree seeking) writing courses. The feedback you get from someone who knows the craft can be invaluable.

 

[Euphony]

Notwithstanding what @iwatchus says, I’m not sure a crash course in writing exists, unless what you want is a car crash as a result. If this story is important to you, then maybe try to write a few others as practice first. That’s the only sort of crash course that I think will be productive.

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Once there was this perv who's

Prose was such an accident since he slept his way through grade school

But when he finally came back

His drafts turned from red marks all over into bright white

He said that it was from when

He'd Grammar Girl'd himself soooooooo hard

Mmm mmm mmm mmm

 

[EmilyMiller]

albino she said, blue eyes

Albinos have pink eyes.

 

[liclaclalaclilaclalac]

Albinos have pink eyes.

Yes, but the artist will frequently depict her with Blue and her partner will have Red eyes, then dark brown eyes. She is really loose with this.

 

[Statius]

You could write up to three paragraphs and post them here for comments. (The forum rules don't allow posting longer story pieces here, because that would be a way to dodge moderation for full stories.)

I thought, going into fiction writing, that I'd be a third-person-only plotter. Turns out I'm about 60% a first-person pantser. Who knew?

--Annie

Same! Just not as good as you are!

 

[Statius]

All kinds of good advice and insight here. Write other things that are not so important but have elements of what you really want to do. That's what I'm doing. Every story I write is practice, not just for the next one, but for THE STORY that I really want to write, the one that truly matters that has to be right.