Edditing assistance/Beta reading resquest: Girthy story with a Halloween mistaken identity theme

[frisky-leo]

I'm hoping to find some simple editing assistance (basic word flow, continuity, etc.) with a new story, involving a costumed mistaken identity that I've been stroking for a while. My previous editor has had life get busy, and understandably must limit extra work.

Quick generalization: a couple are meeting at a costume party but arriving at different times, each thinks they found the other, but mistakes were made.
There are three separate spicy scenes, which helps explain the engorged word count... ~52k. *gasp* Should I break it apart or keep it as one?

I have a bit of my writing here already, all stand-alone stories. Check them out to see my writing style if you're curious.
If anyone is interested in helping me with this new story, comment or pm.

Thanks

 

[TheLobster]

Should I break it apart or keep it as one?

Note that if you want to submit this work to the Halloween contest, you need to keep it as a single submission. Internal chapters are fine (and at 52k, frankly necessary) but it’s gotta be one Literotica story in the end.

 

[jsmiam]

Girthy?

And then spellcheck changed what I typed to Goethe, which sounds like an intriguing combination for a story.

 

[frisky-leo]

Note that if you want to submit this work to the Halloween contest, you need to keep it as a single submission. Internal chapters are fine (and at 52k, frankly necessary) but it’s gotta be one Literotica story in the end.

I thought it would probably have to stay together for the contest. The word count surprised me when I first checked it towards the end of the story. I've not created a Lit story this long before.

It kind of naturally separates into a prelude, interaction 1, interaction 2, and interaction 3. Do you think a 4 chapter interior breakdown would be enough?

 

[frisky-leo]

Girthy?

And then spellcheck changed what I typed to Goethe, which sounds like an intriguing combination for a story.

Spellcheck played with me as well. I just try to think of it as a little drunk gnome, trying his best to be helpful.

 

[dirk2024]

I'm hoping to find some simple editing assistance (basic word flow, continuity, etc.) with a new story, involving a costumed mistaken identity that I've been stroking for a while. My previous editor has had life get busy, and understandably must limit extra work.

Quick generalization: a couple are meeting at a costume party but arriving at different times, each thinks they found the other, but mistakes were made.
There are three separate spicy scenes, which helps explain the engorged word count... ~52k. *gasp* Should I break it apart or keep it as one?

I have a bit of my writing here already, all stand-alone stories. Check them out to see my writing style if you're curious.
If anyone is interested in helping me with this new story, comment or pm.

Thanks

I read Sasquatched a few weeks ago and I did enjoy it!

However, 52k is too large a project for me to take on. Sorry.

 

[frisky-leo]

I read Sasquatched a few weeks ago and I did enjoy it!

However, 52k is too large a project for me to take on. Sorry.

I'm glad you enjoyed my story! Thanks for letting me know.

I understand this new one is a beast, I must have fed it after midnight.

 

[frisky-leo]

Looking at the natural breaks in the story flow, I can separate it into 4 word blocks of approx. {6.5k} {10.5k} {13k} {22k}. Spicy scenes in all but the first block, with lots of action in the final block. Blind opinions welcome too; Do y'all think that is enough separation, or should I thin down the activity in the final block to shrink the overall word count? I could pull some of the juicy bits out to save for another story...

 

[jsmiam]

If you put all that work into it, one possibility is keep parts one and two. Publish just that for the contest. AFTER the contest is over publish the rest and make it a series.

Rules against series apply to during the contest. Honor that. But dosing other things after, when the contest is no longer going on is ok and I believe people do it all the time.

 

[frisky-leo]

If you put all that work into it, one possibility is keep parts one and two. Publish just that for the contest. AFTER the contest is over publish the rest and make it a series.

Rules against series apply to during the contest. Honor that. But dosing other things after, when the contest is no longer going on is ok and I believe people do it all the time.

That is tempting, and I have looked over the story with that in mind, but I can't find a place that I could break it and it still flow.
Part one sets the location, parts 2 and 3 are separate viewpoints that lead to 4. I may just trim it some, and let it be a Halloween beast of a story.