Tips on writing a foursome?

[EmilyMiller]

She stroked through her golden hair. Her blue eyes reflected her own, a deep blue ocean in a deep blue ocean. She lowered herself on the lips, feeling a wave of passion as the tongue touched the centre of her being. At the same time woman C kissed her perky breasts, having the same size as her name would suggest. Confusingly, all women could be called woman C, she reflected.

Woman A looked at the above and was shocked at the confusion of the writer, who couldn't put together a few sentences without getting a writers block. B looked shocked as well, though it was hard to tell if that was because of the wonderful taste of pussy. How was it so difficult to write a few sentences of FFF without breaking your head on how to separate each individually? The part of near identical women hardly featured in it!

Just like the sex they were having now, maybe it would be best to leave it to a woman. They'll write that hot mess of male fantasy better than anyone else. Right...?


(Incidentally, I've been thinking about a contest where male and female fantasies are written by the opposite sex. Could be interesting to see how the opposite sex views the other's 'prototype' fantasy.)

If you are interested, my FFF ‘triplets’ scene is in the archly meta Once Upon a Time… A Fantasy.

But for fourth wall breaking and the author being an integral part of the story, my zenith was, Signifying Nothing. Closely followed by Unconventional.

 

[MrPixel]

Intentional

Sí.

 

[Husky_Embrace]

If you are interested, my FFF ‘triplets’ scene is in the archly meta Once Upon a Time… A Fantasy.

But for fourth wall breaking and the author being an integral part of the story, my zenith was, Signifying Nothing. Closely followed by Unconventional.

A story for everything. Amazing.

 

[karina_jayde]

Focus on the emotions and sensations, not a play-by-play of what each person is doing. Embrace the chaos, use flowery language to emphasize the flow of pleasure and bodies intermingling, rather than specific details.

Limit the POV to one character if possible, to keep things focused.

 

[LezNymphoLuvsFeet]

Hey all you guys, I want to extend a heartfelt thanks to all of you! Really, when starting this thread I never expected such dedicated responses and input! I'm humbled that you've taken your time to share your writing experiences, especially with a total newbie like me, it means a lot and will definitely have a considerable impact on how I will write the story! Again, huge thanks! I wish I could give each of you a big hug!!

Now, at the risk of derailing my own thread, there's another aspect of the story idea that I would appreciate your thoughts on: the writing about celebrities aspect. I've come to understand that some, but not all, write some kind of disclaimer to the effect that "this is a fictional story, no harm intended to any real persons", etc. I've googled, but haven't found any concrete information about celebrities having sued authors of sex stories.
So my question is, is that even a thing, or is the risk of getting sued more theory than practice? If it does happen in practice, does a disclaimer have any actual legal bearing?

 

[Bamagan]

Hey all you guys, I want to extend a heartfelt thanks to all of you! Really, when starting this thread I never expected such dedicated responses and input! I'm humbled that you've taken your time to share your writing experiences, especially with a total newbie like me, it means a lot and will definitely have a considerable impact on how I will write the story! Again, huge thanks! I wish I could give each of you a big hug!!

Now, at the risk of derailing my own thread, there's another aspect of the story idea that I would appreciate your thoughts on: the writing about celebrities aspect. I've come to understand that some, but not all, write some kind of disclaimer to the effect that "this is a fictional story, no harm intended to any real persons", etc. I've googled, but haven't found any concrete information about celebrities having sued authors of sex stories.
So my question is, is that even a thing, or is the risk of getting sued more theory than practice? If it does happen in practice, does a disclaimer have any actual legal bearing?

I have never heard of anyone here getting sued, but in the event that a celebrity chose to do so, they would stand a reasonably good chance of satisfying a judge that the content of an erotic story is defamatory, regardless of any disclaimers, and could therefore win a claim against the author and possibly the site. That might conceivably happen if your story went viral and attracted a lot of attention, or somehow made you a lot of money, but otherwise it's unlikely to seem worthwhile for the celebrity to pay a lawyer to pursue the matter.

 

[AlinaX]

It’s difficult to write celebrities. You have to ask: why? what benefit is there to the story? (how would the celebrities react if they read it?)

 

[LezNymphoLuvsFeet]

It’s difficult to write celebrities. You have to ask: why? what benefit is there to the story? (how would the celebrities react if they read it?)

Actually, I got the idea when realising that publishing images with "illustrated stories" here is cumbersome to say the least (understandably, given all the potential legal implications, but still).

Leaving stuff to the reader's imagination has it's merits, but personally I want the readers of my stories to know what the main characters look like, and a picture would spare me and the reader detailed descriptions of their faces, body composition, etc. So, writing about celebrities does that trick, since either the reader already knows what they look like, or they can look it up.

My story would explicitly take place in another world in the multiverse, where a lot is different from our universe, maybe in that universe they're not necessarily celebrities (haven't made up my mind yet), only their names and what they look like would be the same as here.

How the celebrities would react if they read it is a great question, although impossible to find out, unless they have publicly stated that they won't tolerate any sex stories about them, it would be anybody's guess. I'd hope the story would turn them on (maybe even jill off to it) but realistically the reaction could be anything from that to them getting really pissed off.

 

[AlinaX]

You could have a virtual world where people can choose who they look like. There’s a bar round the corner where everyone looks like Scarlet Johansson, and it’s not unusual to see Lucy making out with Black Widow.

 

[LezNymphoLuvsFeet]

You could have a virtual world where people can choose who they look like. There’s a bar round the corner where everyone looks like Scarlet Johansson, and it’s not unusual to see Lucy making out with Black Widow.

Intriguing idea!
(Side note: Scarlett Johansson having sex with herself, incredibly hot!!)

 

[Husky_Embrace]

You could have a virtual world where people can choose who they look like. There’s a bar round the corner where everyone looks like Scarlet Johansson, and it’s not unusual to see Lucy making out with Black Widow.

I've written 80% of a story where someone gets to test a VR world. Together with AI and brain stimuli she can experience it, not just see it. She is a bird! And a cat! It is a wonderful experience. The inventor gives her free reign for the rest of the day to try out whatever she wants. All she needs to do is add in the DNA of some animals he collected and the AI will make a life-like experience that human brains can understand.

She can't resist using the coffee cup of the guy to experience how a guy touches himself. A flagrant misuse of the technology, and a big privacy concern. She just can't help it.

Having experienced it and feeling the shame of a lifetime she turns off the lights and writes down the security concern that someone "could" abuse it this way.

Not much later she's back, too curious for her own good. She puts in her own DNA, and goes in to experience herself as a guy...

VR has many options to do what you want. I think it's valid, though personally I would avoid celebrities.

Actually, I got the idea when realising that publishing images with "illustrated stories" here is cumbersome to say the least (understandably, given all the potential legal implications, but still).

I'm not sure what the policy is on links, but maybe just link to a picture?

Though again, I would avoid celebrities. You're taking their (public) image and make them do stuff they might not agree with. It is not unlike that I generate a picture of you doing something you don't like. Voting for someone you hate, getting locked up, or having sex with someone in certain positions you would never do. You're taking something of their image without consent.

I understand that many people have sexual thoughts and desires for public figures, but it's best kept in a private setting where it can't harm them.

There are no restrictions on celebrities that I know of though.

 

[Rob_Royale]

What works for me is to tell it from one person's POV.
Make that woman the newest to that sort of sex. So the reader is experiencing her excitement, her amazement and her attraction to the women in the foursome. Describe her current coupling with one of the ladies and then after that's established, shift her view to watching the other two women in their coupling. The voyeurism coupled with what her lover is doing to her sends her arousal into the stratosphere and things progress until all three women are making love to her. Make her the center of attention for whatever reason.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Part of the special thrill for this or any group of more than three is the voyeuristic element.

One can use this to advantage, with A and B taking a break and maybe just fondling each other while the focus shifts to the other couple.

Edit on second thought. Threesomes are complicated; foursomes get complicated enough that this is one of the few circumstances that I (card-carrying panther) write a bit of a who’s-doing-what-to-whom plot or script.

 

[Areala-chan]

Remember that all of your participants are completely different people with different personalities, libidos, and levels of athleticism, sensitivity, and stamina. You don't need to have all of them performing with the others at the same time. Attentions can waver. You'll get struck by a sudden idea to do X, so you do, and the dynamics shift subtly. Someone with a higher libido may demand more attention from everyone to make sure they're satisfied. Someone else may need to take a short break after her climax, or may feel completely satisfied but still in a giving mood. After a bit of poking around and testing the waters, two of them might split off because they're more sexually compatible or in sync with each other, leaving the other two to fumble around a bit. Touch is an incredibly important sense during sex, and a woman who is fully in the moment can luxuriate in the feeling of hands and fingers and tongues in a lot more places than the main three. Laying against one person and having them hold you while another pays attention to your wants is an incredibly intimate feeling. Someone with a more voyeuristic bent might take the greatest pleasure in watching the others play while she gets herself off. Someone else might only be comfortable in a dominant position with a strap-on, and won't give oral but is happy to receive. Someone might be uncomfortable with certain parts of her body being seen or touched, even if they're completely naked and willing to give the whole thing a shot, and that can alter the group dynamic as well.

There is a lot that goes into a four-some, physically, mentally, and emotionally. As long as you put in the work of helping the reader understand how everyone is feeling along with what everyone is doing, you can get a fuck-ton of mileage out of a lesbian foursome. Give everyone different boundaries, different levels of inhibition, and different personalities, and I think you'll come away with something both scorchingly hot and realistic.

 

[LezNymphoLuvsFeet]

Though again, I would avoid celebrities. You're taking their (public) image and make them do stuff they might not agree with. It is not unlike that I generate a picture of you doing something you don't like. Voting for someone you hate, getting locked up, or having sex with someone in certain positions you would never do. You're taking something of their image without consent.

I understand that many people have sexual thoughts and desires for public figures, but it's best kept in a private setting where it can't harm them.

Valid points. At the same time, is this an either-or case? Maybe I could still get the benefit of their well-known appearances if I specify in the story that it's not actually the celebrities (not in this or any parallel universe) but clones of them, or explaining that the story takes place in a fantasy world where, e.g. the character "Rashelle" looks exactly like actress Rachel Hilson?

 

[AlinaX]

The number of non-celebrity stories I’ve read where the main female character is the spitting image of Angelina Jolie…

How come we never read:

… I dived beneath her skirt and breathed in that heady aroma that so many love. Her exquisite cunt smelled exactly like Gwynneth Paltrow’s pussy…

 

[iwatchus]

I've written 80% of a story where someone gets to test a VR world.

It is diverting this thread, but you should read @EmilyMiller story that significantly touches on this. It is called something like Through the Glass. It might trigger some ideas for you. It was the story she posted in her thread about author's best stories. For my taste, it is probably at the top of the list for sitewide best stories. YMMV

 

[EmilyMiller]

It is diverting this thread, but you should read @EmilyMiller story that significantly touches on this. It is called something like Through the Glass. It might trigger some ideas for you. It was the story she posted in her thread about author's best stories. For my taste, it is probably at the top of the list for sitewide best stories. YMMV

That’s super kind of you to say, and it’s called Through the Watching Glass.

 

[EmilyMiller]

It is diverting this thread, but you should read @EmilyMiller story that significantly touches on this. It is called something like Through the Glass. It might trigger some ideas for you. It was the story she posted in her thread about author's best stories. For my taste, it is probably at the top of the list for sitewide best stories. YMMV

Sorry to make a big deal about this, but I don’t ever recall anyone saying something like that about one of my stories in public. I really, really appreciate it. Thank you!

 

[TheRedChamber]

You know that bit in The Return of the King where the Rihirrim horsemen finally turn up to the final battle and charge into the frey, the camera remaining fixed behind them as they charge through the chaotic battlefield past a thousand different skirmishes.

You should do that, only it's a husand and wife turning up for their first swingers' orgy.

Well, maybe not, but I thought it was a nice way of illustrating how keeping a single PoV can help make sense of situations that could otherwise be messy.