A Stranger Fantasy?

[ba2plus]

How hot would it be if a group of robbers were to break into your house in the middle of the night and They find you sound asleep on your bed. As your body is facing the fan, they stand at awe as your silky smooth dress presses and wraps around your erect nipples that all of them stand there in a trance like state which you have left them in. Suddenly, without a word being said. two of them hold your hands above your head and as you slowly open your eyes you find a black masked man on top of you and with a knife pressed against your clit that even the slightest movement is going to make you press yourself against the edge. Your heart beat raises and your eye widens. He puts his hand on your mouth and slowly whispers in a deep voice... "Make one sound-and I'll make sure it's the last thing your throat ever dares to whisper" He slowly takes a candle by your desk and slowly drips them on to your clit. But all you can do is hold your breath long enough so that you don't make a sound. You can feel the hot melted wax being poured on your clit and it mixing with the juices your body uncontrollably makes...



I need help with this. I know this is very basic and there is a lot more work to be done. The shift in dynamics is bad and there is a lot more tonality that is to be added. But please do give suggestions.

 

[desire30]

why is she dress?

 

[desire30]

or what is she dressed in

 

[ba2plus]

or what is she dressed in

I was thinking, light coloured satin night wear so that they see it when the dress presses against her body and the nipples are seen?

 

[desire30]

it is a robbery by strangers or someone known to her? how many robbers?? her age?

 

[ba2plus]

it is a robbery by strangers or someone known to her? how many robbers?? her age

Well I am thinking of robbery by strangers? And I don't want to specify the age, cause I want the story to be targeted at women, where they can imagine it first hand?

 

[desire30]

good idea,, for me I can imagine I am kind of newly married in a new house , husband must travel a lot on order of his boss..

 

[ba2plus]

good idea,, for me I can imagine I am kind of newly married in a new house , husband must travel a lot on order of his boss..

Exactly, I don't want it to confine anyone or leave anyone out. They have to have the freedom to feel it through? Regardless of the age ? Does that make sense?

 

[desire30]

it sure does!!!!!!

 

[ba2plus]

it sure does!!!!!!

Yupp

 

[ba2plus]

I had an ex who loved this exact fantasy... either he/they force themselves on her, or, while still half dozing, they tie her up.

Do you have any inputs to the same?

 

[Britva415]

takes a candle by your desk and slowly drips them on to your clit

That sounds like it would be way too much for anyone who isn't already acclimatized to that level of intensity of wax play. Remaining soundless would be impossible, because the victim would experience an existential fear unless they already knew from experience that their clit is not being literally mutilated via burning. Because that's what it would feel like, to the un-initiated, especially with zero warm-up. Tolerating and enjoying hot wax on the clit would require quite a long on-ramp. It's not an exciting first move.

This doesn't sound like it would be hot to women who have fantasies about being overpowered by a stranger. It sounds like it could be hot to someone who has fantasies about perpetrating abuse and torture.

Is that who you're aiming for, here?

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

Um, No.

 

[NuclearFairy]

I'm gonna say what I said last time an extremely similar story idea popped up, too much too soon, dial it back and work up to the knife play and wax play on the clit.

 

[Nellie60]

How hot would it be if a group of robbers were to break into your house in the middle of the night and They find you sound asleep on your bed. As your body is facing the fan, they stand at awe as your silky smooth dress presses and wraps around your erect nipples that all of them stand there in a trance like state which you have left them in. Suddenly, without a word being said. two of them hold your hands above your head and as you slowly open your eyes you find a black masked man on top of you and with a knife pressed against your clit that even the slightest movement is going to make you press yourself against the edge. Your heart beat raises and your eye widens. He puts his hand on your mouth and slowly whispers in a deep voice... "Make one sound-and I'll make sure it's the last thing your throat ever dares to whisper" He slowly takes a candle by your desk and slowly drips them on to your clit. But all you can do is hold your breath long enough so that you don't make a sound. You can feel the hot melted wax being poured on your clit and it mixing with the juices your body uncontrollably makes...



I need help with this. I know this is very basic and there is a lot more work to be done. The shift in dynamics is bad and there is a lot more tonality that is to be added. But please do give suggestions.

Probably a bit dramatic with the hot wax thing.

I often have fantasies anout an ex being forcibly stripped by strangers and they ended up performing various acts on her after groping her naked body.

 

[MikeXIrons]

I had an ex who loved this exact fantasy... either he/they force themselves on her, or, while still half dozing, they tie her up.

I always liked the idea of her waking up and hearing someone in the house. As he enters the room, she pretends to be fast asleep in hopes he will just sneak out quietly to avoid getting caught instead of panicking and hurting her. But, instead, he stands there in the room and quietly walks to the side of the bed. Then he pulls the sheets back gently to get a better look at her naked body. She can feel his leering eyes on her even as she tries to keep her breathing calm. She can feel hot breath on her neck and face as he leans close. She continues to hope if she pretends to be asleep, he won't hurt her. She hears a zipper and then the wet sound of him masturbating. She feels him touch her hair. Then a barely perceptible light touch on a nipple. At first it's so light she's not sure if it's her imagination. Since she doesn't wake up, his touch becomes bolder, gently exploring her whole body. Again it's so light she's not sure if it's her imagination or if he's really touching her clit. She struggles to control her breathing - from the fear, but also now from the lust that's building as her body betrays her. She's trying to decide when she should pretend to wake up and push him away... or is that too dangerous? Will he hurt her if she does so?

 

[ba2plus]

I had an ex who loved this exact fantasy... either he/they force themselves on her, or, while still half dozing, they tie her up.

I always liked the idea of her waking up and hearing someone in the house. As he enters the room, she pretends to be fast asleep in hopes he will just sneak out quietly to avoid getting caught instead of panicking and hurting her. But, instead, he stands there in the room and quietly walks to the side of the bed. Then he pulls the sheets back gently to get a better look at her naked body. She can feel his leering eyes on her even as she tries to keep her breathing calm. She can feel hot breath on her neck and face as he leans close. She continues to hope if she pretends to be asleep, he won't hurt her. She hears a zipper and then the wet sound of him masturbating. She feels him touch her hair. Then a barely perceptible light touch on a nipple. At first it's so light she's not sure if it's her imagination. Since she doesn't wake up, his touch becomes bolder, gently exploring her whole body. Again it's so light she's not sure if it's her imagination or if he's really touching her clit. She struggles to control her breathing - from the fear, but also now from the lust that's building as her body betrays her. She's trying to decide when she should pretend to wake up and push him away... or is that too dangerous? Will he hurt her if she does so?

I like how you are wording it so its slowly building up the anticipation factor. nicee