Tanka Poem

[NivKay]

In the cyclone swirl,
You cried for lost nights, for peace,
But peace came not, nor
Had I listened, but onward
I plunged into your abyss

 

[Annelih]

In the cyclone swirl,
You cried for lost nights, for peace,
But peace came not, nor
Had I listened, but onward
I plunged into your abyss

This is an erotic tanka, but why does it sound so sad...?

 

[Annelih]

Through the gloom we went,
Through bramble and bush and loam,
And reaching the place,
We sank knee-deep in darkness,
You opened, blossomed, craving.

Oh I loved this one! Eroticism is darkness...so true!

 

[NivKay]

This is an erotic tanka, but why does it sound so sad...?

I think I might be in that kind of mood...

 

[Candy_Kane54]

When I found out that
Candy Kane's are for lickin'
I needed to know how
They tasted. Maybe chicken?
A mystery for certain.

 

[WCSGarland]

There's confusion here,
It's not chicken, it's an owl,
fer sure, that's saying,
It takes three licks to get to,
center of a tootsie pop.

 

[Candy_Kane54]

Can you imagine
A time when thing are better?
Now is not that time.
Do you ever wish for when
You could start over again?

 

[UsuallyPresent]

Kurgan built his sword -
Candy Kane's are for licking,
His "Of course you are!"
A deep, rough, throat-cut grumble -
Patiently working the parts
Into a sharp, head-reaping whole.

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

said flirtatiously,
Candy Kane's are for lickin'
My boldness pays off--
soon her tasty treat is mine
Christmas is about giving

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

I tried to write that so can be interpreted in multiple ways -- hope I succeeded...

 

[WCSGarland]

I tried to write that so can be interpreted in multiple ways -- hope I succeeded...

Given my perverted mind... it's difficult to interpret it mundanely... just sayin'

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

Given my perverted mind... it's difficult to interpret it mundanely... just sayin'

whatever could you mean, Sir?

 

[WCSGarland]

whatever could you mean, Sir?

um... took me a while to think of tasty treat as a candy cane for a Christmas treat

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

now we just need to know how @Candy_Kane54 interprets it -- my prestige is on the line!

 

[UsuallyPresent]

Five syllables first,
Followed by seven more,
The pattern repeats,
Five then seven more again,
Only to break at the end
With a pair of sevens left

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

Five syllables first,
Followed by seven more,
The pattern repeats,
Five then seven more again,
Only to break at the end
With a pair of sevens left

close...very close... it's actually a Haiku with 2 extra lines of 7 -- so, 5-7-5-7-7. still...in trying to come up with a punishment, I noticed you are from rural New York -- I'm guessing like near Woodstock... so good chance it was the magical weed that clouded your mind. You're forgiven!

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

Oh, but @UsuallyPresent welcome aboard! would you like us to give you a Tanka tribute?

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

it's a long tradition... which we are pretty religious about up-keeping

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

contribute a line which we will then all incorporate... or I'll pick one

 

[UsuallyPresent]

Hrmm, how about this for the 3rd line of the tanka -

"Jocelyn wanted" (punctuation as desired/needed)

 

[Jocelyn_Nicole_Sawyer]

well, it's really supposed to be more about you... but okay, I'll play along

 

[AlinaX]

I don't count kisses
for each is a syllable
Jocelyn wanted
like a line of four, or six
yearning for its completion

 

[WCSGarland]

You must pass a test,
To show poetic mettle,
Jocelyn wanted,
Doth the Tanka Maid decree,
Go! UsuallyPresent.

 

[Candy_Kane54]

Considering that
A little stimulation is
Necessary, a
Dildo seems to fit the bill.
You may think differently.

 

[NivKay]

Art is to the soul
Like dew to the pasture, but
Jocelyn, well, she
Wanted what most can’t offer -
The very blood in all hearts