Working on a sequel

[Goodalphamale]

Hey, I'm Heath, also known as Goodalphamale. A year ago, I published a story titled "Under the Castle." At the time, it received a lot of criticism for its grammar and other issues, but many readers enjoyed the concept. The story follows a young man who gets kicked out by his foster father for having an affair with his wife. It explores the struggles he faces afterward, ultimately leading him to meet the lord's mother and begin another affair.

Now that a year has passed since I published it, I'm considering writing a sequel. I would appreciate your suggestions and feedback, as I want to create a story that improves upon the first part in every way.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Now that a year has passed since I published it, I'm considering writing a sequel. I would appreciate your suggestions and feedback, as I want to create a story that improves upon the first part in every way.

Best advice is to write what you want to write. Writing by committee ends up in a bit of a mess, because none of us have the same vision you do. What ideas do you have for a sequel?

 

[Goodalphamale]

Best advice is to write what you want to write. Writing by committee ends up in a bit of a mess, because none of us have the same vision you do. What ideas do you have for a sequel?

If you read the story, then you may know about the dungeon and the secret room under the castle. I'm planning to bring one more character into it or make Agatha take the action out of the secret room into the castle's main floor.

 

[grey228]

I'd recommend going back to your first story as you write your second, correct the mistakes you find, and maybe do a little ret-conning / rewriting if needed, and submit both.

Word-smithing - like erosion - is a slow and steady process.

 

[Frivolous]

Heath - hope you don't mind this criticism. Please pardon me if this irks you in any way.

Any chance you might fix a spelling error or two? For instance:

The guards then took Peter to a hall were lord Henry was having a serious conversation with his fellow nobles.

were -> where

also mastrubating -> masturbating

Punctuation could use some work, too, with commas before or after quotation marks, etc.

I wish the story Under the Castle ended after a climax (pun intended) rather than halfway there.

 

[Goodalphamale]

Heath - hope you don't mind this criticism. Please pardon me if this irks you in any way.

Any chance you might fix a spelling error or two? For instance:

The guards then took Peter to a hall were lord Henry was having a serious conversation with his fellow nobles.

were -> where

also mastrubating -> masturbating

Punctuation could use some work, too, with commas before or after quotation marks, etc.

I wish the story Under the Castle ended after a climax (pun intended) rather than halfway there.

Thank you buddy, the problem is English is not my first language and the ideas I have cannot be written in my native language, because English is good for introducing anything new, literally anything. So I'll try my best to learn and develop my English so I can finally finish my stories.

 

[Gamblnluck]

I think you will find that if you pull your story and edit it, you will lose the comments and original scoring. Sometimes it is better to just march on. Up to you of course. Just like your story's orientation. Personally, being a US citizen, I get nothing out of stories with lords and nobles. A smart woman taking over one more gullible is more 'relatable'.

 

[Audiflex]

Hey, I'm Heath, also known as Goodalphamale. A year ago, I published a story titled "Under the Castle." At the time, it received a lot of criticism for its grammar and other issues, but many readers enjoyed the concept. The story follows a young man who gets kicked out by his foster father for having an affair with his wife. It explores the struggles he faces afterward, ultimately leading him to meet the lord's mother and begin another affair.

Now that a year has passed since I published it, I'm considering writing a sequel. I would appreciate your suggestions and feedback, as I want to create a story that improves upon the first part in every way.

Hey Heath! It’s awesome that you’re revisiting *Under the Castle* for a sequel, sounds like the concept really resonated with readers. For the sequel, maybe focus on deepening the characters’ motivations and relationships, and tighten up the grammar and pacing this time around. A fresh edit or beta reader could help polish it up, too. Excited to see where you take the story next!