Gentlemen's club chapter 6: surprise Feedback

[Nightscream89]

6th chapter of my story is out,
https://www.literotica.com/s/gc-ch-06-surprise

If anyone has feedback for me, I am very open to it.
It's my first erotica story, so no doubt I still have a lot to improve on.

Also one major question I have, I might want to include a bit of kinkier stuff in later chapter, for example Watersports.
Do you guys think it's alright to insert that into the story now? Or will that put the readers off since I haven't included it earlier?

 

[ElectricBlue]

6th chapter of my story is out,
https://www.literotica.com/s/gc-ch-06-surprise

If anyone has feedback for me, I am very open to it.
It's my first erotica story, so no doubt I still have a lot to improve on.

Also one major question I have, I might want to include a bit of kinkier stuff in later chapter, for example Watersports.
Do you guys think it's alright to insert that into the story now? Or will that put the readers off since I haven't included it earlier?

You're already category hopping, so stick the next chapter in Fetish, and pee on all you like.