First Lit Story, feedback request! I/T category.

[GeTee]

Hello,

I recently published my first story. It is about 3 1/2 Lit pages long.

Content warning: This features brother/sister I/T and has panty fetish-esque parts and so if that is not something you wish to read, it is perfectly ok to skip.

Panties, Siblings, and Comic Books

I was trying to get feedback on what you think, when I published it a couple weeks ago, I was a little too nervous to ask for feedback because I was afraid of harsh criticism, but after having it out a little bit I feel a little more comfortable with getting feedback.

I do know if about 4 grammatical issues and plan to do a revision at some point to correct a few things, but wanted to make sure I had everything to avoid needing multiple revisions so was giving it a little extra time.

Thank you!

 

[StillStunned]

I don't have time to go through a 12k word story, but here's a couple of general tips:

First, don't bother fixing typos and grammar issues. You might want it to be perfect, but you'll always miss something. It can take up to four weeks for edits to be processed, and in the meantime Lit's readership has moved on. I'm a professional editor and proofreader, and even I will generally miss a few mistakes. Four mistakes in 12k words? Honestly, that puts your story in the "just about as perfect as it gets" category here.

Second, only ask for feedback if you're prepared to be ripped to shreds. Words of encouragement are fine, but presumably you're already happy with your story and you want to discover your shortcomings. You want people to expose your weaknesses. Almost by definition that will come as a shock, because you're not aware of what they are.

That said, if you do ask for feedback, be confident about your writing. Consider every comment on its merits, but only as a suggestion. It's your story, after all. Take the feedback on board, use what's useful and file the rest away in case it becomes useful down the road.

Also, everyone here is an amateur. We might have insights based on experience, but nobody here is a Nobel or Booker Prize winner. Nobody is Judy-Lynn or Lester del Rey, or Stephen King, or JK Rowling. Everything we say is just opinion, and no more valid than your own opinions on writing.

Keep writing, and keep enjoying what you write.

 

[AlinaX]

The great thing about Lit is how many readers there are. The attention is great, almost a drug.

Getting any written feedback is hard, though, and more often than not the comments will be vague encouragement or wholly inappropriate ranting.

It can be tempting to ask here in the Forum for feedback, but here it's mainly authors rather than readers.

 

[GeTee]

I don't have time to go through a 12k word story, but here's a couple of general tips:

First, don't bother fixing typos and grammar issues. You might want it to be perfect, but you'll always miss something. It can take up to four weeks for edits to be processed, and in the meantime Lit's readership has moved on. I'm a professional editor and proofreader, and even I will generally miss a few mistakes. Four mistakes in 12k words? Honestly, that puts your story in the "just about as perfect as it gets" category here.

Second, only ask for feedback if you're prepared to be ripped to shreds. Words of encouragement are fine, but presumably you're already happy with your story and you want to discover your shortcomings. You want people to expose your weaknesses. Almost by definition that will come as a shock, because you're not aware of what they are.

That said, if you do ask for feedback, be confident about your writing. Consider every comment on its merits, but only as a suggestion. It's your story, after all. Take the feedback on board, use what's useful and file the rest away in case it becomes useful down the road.

Also, everyone here is an amateur. We might have insights based on experience, but nobody here is a Nobel or Booker Prize winner. Nobody is Judy-Lynn or Lester del Rey, or Stephen King, or JK Rowling. Everything we say is just opinion, and no more valid than your own opinions on writing.

Keep writing, and keep enjoying what you write.

Thank you for the reply. I agree about the feedback. That's why it took a little bit to feel comfortable before being ready to hear it, and I am ready now.

 

[GeTee]

The great thing about Lit is how many readers there are. The attention is great, almost a drug.

Getting any written feedback is hard, though, and more often than not the comments will be vague encouragement or wholly inappropriate ranting.

It can be tempting to ask here in the Forum for feedback, but here it's mainly authors rather than readers.

That is a good point, I didn't really do anything with the forums until I got interested in trying to write myself.

 

[LittleTitLover]

Hello,

I recently published my first story. It is about 3 1/2 Lit pages long.

Content warning: This features brother/sister I/T and has panty fetish-esque parts and so if that is not something you wish to read, it is perfectly ok to skip.

Panties, Siblings, and Comic Books

I was trying to get feedback on what you think, when I published it a couple weeks ago, I was a little too nervous to ask for feedback because I was afraid of harsh criticism, but after having it out a little bit I feel a little more comfortable with getting feedback.

I do know if about 4 grammatical issues and plan to do a revision at some point to correct a few things, but wanted to make sure I had everything to avoid needing multiple revisions so was giving it a little extra time.

Thank you!

I read it. I liked it.

 

[GeTee]

I read it. I liked it.

Awesome, thank you for reading!

 

[LittleTitLover]

Awesome, thank you for reading!

Of course. Feel free to reciprocate

 

[GeTee]

Of course. Feel free to reciprocate

I actually already read the KitKat one before from her post in the forums. very nice indeed!

 

[LittleTitLover]

I actually already read the KitKat one before from her post in the forums. very nice indeed!

Thank you. Working on the sequel. Please rate if you enjoyed

 

[lovecraft68]

This hit some spots for me. Sibcest is my thing and older sister with inexperienced brother an added bonus.

I also owned a comic shop and have been collecting since the late seventies and buying and selling since the early nineties.

Hulk 181 clocks in at 12k in the newest Overstreet, non CGC of course and never get me started on CGC....

In general, its a fun story that certainly enters I/T absurdity early on, but doesn't seem to take itself too seriously so I can roll with it. One line however was kind of a speed bump "Her crusted juices" that just sounded....gross. IDK, maybe people with a panty fetish might like that description, but it doesn't seem sexy in the least. You also said "almost sexy' regarding her smile. 'Almost' is a weak word that I fell into a lot early on. It was a sexy smile or it wasn't.

I can tell you wanted to really geek out on the comic aspects, the shop, the book value, the con, and that's fine, but I think it did take away from what most people are there to read about. But it was different for that reason.

Overall, it was a fun piece, and I think you did a good job with it.

 

[GeTee]

This hit some spots for me. Sibcest is my thing and older sister with inexperienced brother an added bonus.

I also owned a comic shop and have been collecting since the late seventies and buying and selling since the early nineties.

Hulk 181 clocks in at 12k in the newest Overstreet, non CGC of course and never get me started on CGC....

In general, its a fun story that certainly enters I/T absurdity early on, but doesn't seem to take itself too seriously so I can roll with it. One line however was kind of a speed bump "Her crusted juices" that just sounded....gross. IDK, maybe people with a panty fetish might like that description, but it doesn't seem sexy in the least. You also said "almost sexy' regarding her smile. 'Almost' is a weak word that I fell into a lot early on. It was a sexy smile or it wasn't.

I can tell you wanted to really geek out on the comic aspects, the shop, the book value, the con, and that's fine, but I think it did take away from what most people are there to read about. But it was different for that reason.

Overall, it was a fun piece, and I think you did a good job with it.

Thank you, that means a lot that you read it, the model sister is probably my favorite story on here.

I'm a genuine comic geek so that probably did come through and take some of the center stage. There also is a half comic shop / half chiropractor near me that I just always thought was a funny mix, I'll be in there looking at comics and he will have to stop and go do chiropractic stuff for someone lol.