IsabellaEmily
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I'm writing a body swap story, which I've enjoyed immensely because it's given me a lot of challenges to work through with the plotting, structure, and so on.
However I have a serious question about how my fellow authors would refer to the characters.
Let me set up the question a bit.
It's written in a first person structure.
My main character is named Emily, and she's the narrator, and one of the four primary characters.
Emily is married to Xander.
They encounter and sexually swap partners with John and Jane.
While Xander is paired off with Jane, Emily is paired off with John.
John and Emily swap bodies.
In dialogue that occurs after the swap the four of them are talking.
Emily is in a male body.
John is in HER body.
How would you refer to John in a way that reminds readers that even though it's JOHN, he's in Emily's body?
I've been using something like this:
"Let's go to the movies." I said, still getting used to hearing the deep male voice come out of my mouth. "I want to see the new Star Wars movie."
"Sounds good to me!" said John-in-my-body. "I love science fiction."
Is John-in-my-body workable? Or too confusing?
What are my other options? Johninmybody? (looks jumbled and messy to me....like it's a typo)
Mybody? (Since I'm writing in first person there will be plenty of 'I said' moments in the conversations....is 'I said' and 'My body said' in the same conversation too confusing? Especially if Jane and Xander are also in the conversation?)
John/Me? SwappedEmily?
The plot/dialogue will not be confusing.....unless I don't use the least confusing way I can come up with to convey who is who during the conversations.
And this will be a science fiction type body swap. No amnesia or hypnosis making a character think they're someone else. They will literally be in each others bodies.
However I have a serious question about how my fellow authors would refer to the characters.
Let me set up the question a bit.
It's written in a first person structure.
My main character is named Emily, and she's the narrator, and one of the four primary characters.
Emily is married to Xander.
They encounter and sexually swap partners with John and Jane.
While Xander is paired off with Jane, Emily is paired off with John.
John and Emily swap bodies.
In dialogue that occurs after the swap the four of them are talking.
Emily is in a male body.
John is in HER body.
How would you refer to John in a way that reminds readers that even though it's JOHN, he's in Emily's body?
I've been using something like this:
"Let's go to the movies." I said, still getting used to hearing the deep male voice come out of my mouth. "I want to see the new Star Wars movie."
"Sounds good to me!" said John-in-my-body. "I love science fiction."
Is John-in-my-body workable? Or too confusing?
What are my other options? Johninmybody? (looks jumbled and messy to me....like it's a typo)
Mybody? (Since I'm writing in first person there will be plenty of 'I said' moments in the conversations....is 'I said' and 'My body said' in the same conversation too confusing? Especially if Jane and Xander are also in the conversation?)
John/Me? SwappedEmily?
The plot/dialogue will not be confusing.....unless I don't use the least confusing way I can come up with to convey who is who during the conversations.
And this will be a science fiction type body swap. No amnesia or hypnosis making a character think they're someone else. They will literally be in each others bodies.