LongDraw
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Hello and thank you so much for reading this.
You can refer to me as LongDraw until I settle on a pen name.
The name of my story is VY, as in VYrus.
VY Introduction - Chapter 03 - Published
VY Chapter 04 - Chapter 07 - Published
VY Chapter 08 - Chapter 11 - Submitted
VY Chapter 12 - Chapter 15 - To Be Linked When Ready
VY Chapter 16 - Chapter 19 - To Be Linked When Ready
VY Chapter 20 - Chapter 24 - To Be Linked When Ready
This is a story of Loving Wives.
I started writing back this story back in September of 2018. Obviously, none of us had any idea that a real-world pandemic would hit just over a year later, but it spurred me on to complete this novel. I would like to give many thanks to Volunteer Editors Phil Anderer and WishLove for their immense amount of help in fixing multiple aspects of the narrative writing.
All persons discussed and described in any forms of sexual and or intimate terms are and were of legal consenting age. No underage sex occurs at all.
While there is a point in the story where incest and inbreeding become a primary focus as a driver for the story, I want to state that I do not condone this dangerous practice in real life. As this is a work of fiction, I also implore all my readers to recognize scenes that are fictional and not intended to be reenacted in real life.
I hope you enjoy my story. Please keep in mind that elements in the story are being reworked to get as close to non-fiction while still having a fictional story. I understand that my English writing skills are not that of a university English professor, but I have written policy and procedure documents that are actually utilized regularly in 80% of the U.S. medical industry. What I am asking for here is the thoughts of other authors here about the story overall, more so chapter by chapter or scene by scene.
Questions for my fellow authors
I am seeking your feedback on what you think after reading the story. If you feel so inclined to provide a more in-depth review, Please keep it restrained to per chapter to keep the feedback scene-centric. In particular, I would like to know specifically what the female authors think of the story overall, as well as lesbian scenes that already are included or where you feel it is needed to balance out the masculinity. I'm aiming for a broad audience with this novel.
I can take criticism, just please leave feedback that I can realistically act on. Telling me the story sucks or that I need to learn how to write won't benefit anyone, whereas if you want to tell me that the story is for example "boring because there is too much of blank type of scene".
Thank you in advance for your feedback everyone.
*Note to moderator* This story is actually primarily focused on the Loving Wives aspect, that part of the story coming more into play in VY Ch 04 - Ch 07.
*Note to readers* As of this thread being posted 2/10/2022, the story is about 53k words, VY Ch 00 - Ch 03 being about 10k of that.
You can refer to me as LongDraw until I settle on a pen name.
The name of my story is VY, as in VYrus.
VY Introduction - Chapter 03 - Published
VY Chapter 04 - Chapter 07 - Published
VY Chapter 08 - Chapter 11 - Submitted
VY Chapter 12 - Chapter 15 - To Be Linked When Ready
VY Chapter 16 - Chapter 19 - To Be Linked When Ready
VY Chapter 20 - Chapter 24 - To Be Linked When Ready
This is a story of Loving Wives.
I started writing back this story back in September of 2018. Obviously, none of us had any idea that a real-world pandemic would hit just over a year later, but it spurred me on to complete this novel. I would like to give many thanks to Volunteer Editors Phil Anderer and WishLove for their immense amount of help in fixing multiple aspects of the narrative writing.
All persons discussed and described in any forms of sexual and or intimate terms are and were of legal consenting age. No underage sex occurs at all.
While there is a point in the story where incest and inbreeding become a primary focus as a driver for the story, I want to state that I do not condone this dangerous practice in real life. As this is a work of fiction, I also implore all my readers to recognize scenes that are fictional and not intended to be reenacted in real life.
I hope you enjoy my story. Please keep in mind that elements in the story are being reworked to get as close to non-fiction while still having a fictional story. I understand that my English writing skills are not that of a university English professor, but I have written policy and procedure documents that are actually utilized regularly in 80% of the U.S. medical industry. What I am asking for here is the thoughts of other authors here about the story overall, more so chapter by chapter or scene by scene.
Questions for my fellow authors
I am seeking your feedback on what you think after reading the story. If you feel so inclined to provide a more in-depth review, Please keep it restrained to per chapter to keep the feedback scene-centric. In particular, I would like to know specifically what the female authors think of the story overall, as well as lesbian scenes that already are included or where you feel it is needed to balance out the masculinity. I'm aiming for a broad audience with this novel.
I can take criticism, just please leave feedback that I can realistically act on. Telling me the story sucks or that I need to learn how to write won't benefit anyone, whereas if you want to tell me that the story is for example "boring because there is too much of blank type of scene".
Thank you in advance for your feedback everyone.
*Note to moderator* This story is actually primarily focused on the Loving Wives aspect, that part of the story coming more into play in VY Ch 04 - Ch 07.
*Note to readers* As of this thread being posted 2/10/2022, the story is about 53k words, VY Ch 00 - Ch 03 being about 10k of that.
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