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In the northern hemisphere, the autumnal equinox occurs on Septermber 23. Your challenge is to write a poem that uses at least one color word and/or which references the autumn/fall season. If any of you are in the southern hemisphere, write a poem that references a color and/or the spring season (for the vernal equinox).

The challenge runs through 2019-09-27 23:59:59 UTC (See https://www.timeanddate.com/worldclock/timezone/utc). The author of the antepenultimate poem in the challenge will choose the next challenge.
 
Autumn

In that dress, her body
is a green young tree,
long and supple and strong,
swaying gently as a breeze
swirls about its lithe trunk,
her arms slim branches
shivering in the crisp air.

I am that air, surrounding
her beauty; I am that earth
she rests upon. I am the sun,
yellow and low to the horizon,

a little weak from age
but still warm with love.
 
OpenField said:
In the northern hemisphere, the autumnal equinox occurs on Septermber 23. Your challenge is to write a poem that uses at least one color word and/or which references the autumn/fall season.
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Pre equinox versification
Celebratory preparation
Dirty ecru cornstalks
Lambent yellow squash at twilight
Cue Guiser's
 
My Sign, Not My Sinew



Autumn equinox?
Your colours fit my socks,
(not that I would wear any),
I hope the red survives,
I hope the blue revives,
(the rest come three a penny).

My colour is pure gold,
but never bought or sold,
(betrays my zodiac sign),
astronomy, you're late,
you can't re-calculate,
or re-define my sine.

(My sign, not my sinew,
what's that, I wish you knew).​
 
not sure which has more paint:

tree roots that snake green
through drifts of sunburnt leaves;
sweet white dog wearing camo
where she sat oh no! no!
on roots damp and sticky -
she's really not picky;
the man with the can and
his paintbrush in hand -
green fingers and brow,
red-faced and bowed down,
prepping yard's hallowe'en
as he dresses the scene
and imagining wee pumpkin fairies :cattail:
 
Leaning on the Porch Rail

Lower drive a foot lit path,
upper draped in fitful shade,
soft as soft can be.
Oh you 'tender hearted weather,
Septober my love, full night,
and if there is a moon hidden in overcast,
beyond umbra of old trees ready to shed
dry brown and sallow yellow leaves unseen;
perhaps it shines for you, but at this moment
nothings better.
 
We've found each other
in the Autumn of our lives,
just before the Winter chills,
filling my life with wondrous
russets and golds sweeping
across my barren landscape,
making the breath catch
in my throat, breathless, from
the utter glory of your love.
 
Autumn’s Palette
As summer ends, fall's panoply unfolds
first frost uncovers autumn’s brilliant tones
of red, yellow, orange and antique gold.

Bright butterflies flit among flowers bold
asters white and yellow by nature sown
as summer ends, fall's panoply unfolds.

From host branches, leaves break at petiole
descending earthward by fickle wind thrown
to wrap the earth in red, yellow and gold.

With days growing short and nights growing cold
bare limbs of aspen and maple bemoan
summer’s end as fall's panoply unfolds.

Gaunt trees line the west ridge as north wind takes hold
sunset silhouettes each standing alone
neath red, yellow, orange and antique gold.

A murder of black crows gathers to scold
grey clouds looming, too soon snow will enthrone
as autumn ends, winter’s beauty unfolds
white snow and shadow conceal autumn’s gold.
 
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Needs more work, in particular I don't like burnished. Suggestion appreciated.
 
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That is a very nice terzanelle, P'tor. If you are using "burnished" to suggest that the gold is not bright and shiny, you could use "muted." Just my two cents. :)
 
Angeline said:
That is a very nice terzanelle, P'tor. If you are using "burnished" to suggest that the gold is not bright and shiny, you could use "muted." Just my two cents. :)
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Tarnished might work as I like the t better than b also the connotation, agree it's lovely.
 
HarryHill said:
Leaning on the Porch Rail

Lower drive a foot lit path,
upper draped in fitful shade,
soft as soft can be.
Oh you 'tender hearted weather,
Septober my love, full night,
and if there is a moon hidden in overcast,
beyond umbra of old trees ready to shed
dry brown and sallow yellow leaves unseen;
perhaps it shines for you, but at this moment
nothings better.
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Keep coming back to your Septober and umbra, Harry, love them. Need an apostrophe in 'nothing's'.
 
Angeline said:
That is a very nice terzanelle, P'tor. If you are using "burnished" to suggest that the gold is not bright and shiny, you could use "muted." Just my two cents. :)
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HarryHill said:
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Tarnished might work as I like the t better than b also the connotation, agree it's lovely.
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Thanks Angie and Harry, I've changed it to antique and think it works a bit better.

And if I'm not mistaken it's a villanelle not a tezanelle - similar structures but slightly different rhyme schemes.
 
I'll wait for you where the sunrise whispers
over the top of each mountain,
or the sun rays filter through autumn leaves
garnishing each tip with golden memories.
I'll linger upon crystal snowflakes sparkling
from your window on Christmas morn.
Waiting across the centuries until strong of limb
I find you again, safe in the sunshine of our love.
 
Piscator said:
Thanks Angie and Harry, I've changed it to antique and think it works a bit better.

And if I'm not mistaken it's a villanelle not a tezanelle - similar structures but slightly different rhyme schemes.
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Sounds good. And my mistake. My copy of Turco is packed and I didn't look it up to check. :rose:
 
No antepenultimate git yet?
If the wind blew there'd be a fall
of desiccated grey leaves, no rain
so curious as that of arboreal dander.
At least evergreens keep the faith,
sneeze in the spring, endure the heat.
Sheltering companions if the snow falls,
maybe this year. Maybe not.
If the wind blew there'd be a fall
and some antepenultimate git will dance under them.
 
Hmmm is appears I'm the antepenultimate, possibly set up by HH, but I'm off on a canoe trip to enjoy those fall colours next week. I'll open a new challenge before I go.
 
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