barrymanilow
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Submitted first ever story (incest), really want feedback/comments
Hello,
I recently completed my first story series - it's three chapters but each of them are short. I used to work as a sports writer but I've never written any type of fiction story before, much less erotic, so I'm really looking for feedback.
It's in the incest/taboo category, and the name (Aaron's New Stepsister) makes the initial premise pretty obvious.
I'll admit the first chapter isn't the greatest when taken on its own, and is a pretty standard story - but its mostly the set up for the next two parts which I think include a lot more plot turns and character development.
Link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1444774&page=submissions
For some reason the first part got a decent amount of views and comments; the second got a lot less, and the third and final chapter unfortunately got very few. I was debating putting the story altogether as one big entry but wanted it to be more manageable.
In any case I am really hoping for feedback and comments about the story as a whole - like I said it was my first time writing anything so I'd really like to hear what people liked and what I could have improved on. Feel free to be as critical as you want to be, I want to learn and improve.
I have a couple much more ambitious story idea in my head right now that I want to start working on and would really like to improve as a writer to make them work well.![Smile :) :)](data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7)
Thanks much!
Hello,
I recently completed my first story series - it's three chapters but each of them are short. I used to work as a sports writer but I've never written any type of fiction story before, much less erotic, so I'm really looking for feedback.
It's in the incest/taboo category, and the name (Aaron's New Stepsister) makes the initial premise pretty obvious.
I'll admit the first chapter isn't the greatest when taken on its own, and is a pretty standard story - but its mostly the set up for the next two parts which I think include a lot more plot turns and character development.
Link:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1444774&page=submissions
For some reason the first part got a decent amount of views and comments; the second got a lot less, and the third and final chapter unfortunately got very few. I was debating putting the story altogether as one big entry but wanted it to be more manageable.
In any case I am really hoping for feedback and comments about the story as a whole - like I said it was my first time writing anything so I'd really like to hear what people liked and what I could have improved on. Feel free to be as critical as you want to be, I want to learn and improve.
I have a couple much more ambitious story idea in my head right now that I want to start working on and would really like to improve as a writer to make them work well.
Thanks much!
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