This is the first story I've submitted to Literotica. I would appreciate any feedback.
http://www.literotica.com/s/a-taste-for-asian-pussy
http://www.literotica.com/s/a-taste-for-asian-pussy
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IMO This should fused into two sentences. The perfume sentence would go in the next paragraph or preempted with a sentence saying something like how their bodies were so close he could smell her.She began grinding her crotch against mine. I felt my errection grow even harder. I reached up and grabbed her ass. It felt firm and tight, not like my wife's saggy bottom. Her perfume was light and floral, I inhaled it deeply.
Remember that even though you may be able to see, tastes, and feel whats happening we can't. Unless you share it with us.
It is all in the details.
It is all in how the experience is expressed*
Please don't write a "this happened and that happened" story.
It is all in how the experience is expressed*
Please don't write a "this happened and that happened" story.
In other words "Show don't tell"
In other words "Show don't tell"
does that really help anyone?
These people are adults and all. But, If I asked everyone under the age of 25 to state a thesis. Most of them couldn't do it. Half of you reading this later will google it. And still get it wrong. It isn't an intelligence thing. And that isn't meant as an insult.
It's literally the understanding of an idea. And solidifying it with substantiating evidence.
That is all a story is. An idea. What makes it feel real are all of the little details that go along with it.
All I can do is shake my head.