New Poetry Recommendations

• I've never had the least bit of luck in trying to do an illustrated poem, but Neonurotic not only has the luck, he has the talent to work this idiosyncratic form really well. Neo has three illustrated poems today: Amelia, down, and Heart In Hand. The three are quite different, other than all being well-executed. Amelia is a sweet paean to the wonder that is one's child--a tender poem with an equally tender illustration. In down, the illustration has the interesting effect of placing the reader in the poem as an object at the bottom of a pool or stream, enhancing the overall impact of the poem. Heart In Hand is a short love poem on a more abstract background.
  
  Illustrated poetry is an art form of its own and Neo is good at it. T-zed recommends y'all check these out.

• Tara_Neale also posts an illustrated poem today with the great title of Mister Men Have a Party. While the words of the poem didn't do much for me, it has a kind of funky, retro illustration that made me think of Colorforms in a whole different context (though apparently the title refers to a UK series of children's books). Kind of weirdly amusing.

• Deep and Dark by DGWolf describes the beginnings of a relationship in occasionally overblown terms (For eons we stood / Staring at one another / Listening to the far reaches of reality), but the poem is more than the thoughtless dreck we often read here, so you might want to give it a try.

• New poet MagnusBurton's first offering, Like a Rose would be the kind of dully rhymed piece I would find overly simplistic except that the complete lack of line breaks gives it a mantra-like quality, as if it was the type of thing one would chant while meditating. I'm not that makes it interesting as a poem, but it is a sort of interesting effect.

• Cold tendrils. (sic) is a poem about the dead that has a distinctly nineteeth-century feel to it, which is probably appropriate for a poet named newoldcentury. Interesting, though it seems to me the first two lines are a bit off metrically. (That may be intentional on the poet's part, of course). Worth a look.

• Finally, needtoexpress gives us The Search which seems to me to be closer to a snippet from a BDSM relationship column than a poem, but perhaps I'm tired from reading and typing.

• New Lit poet KatOstara contrasts how men and women view sexuality in Sexes Unite. She hardly sees the topic through a haze of romanticism: Do you jack off to thoughts of me / Am I the glove you wear. Bonus points for spelling "superseded" correctly.

• Another new poet, Shotgun59 has three new poems today. A Night with You is a series of rhymed couplets in which the narrator describes, as you might well guess, a night with a lady friend. The rhymed couplets in Bottoms are all in praise of female rears. In The Fiddlers Romance he tells a little ironic tale in sonnet form. All three have a little awkwardness about the lines (Your hands touch me so tenderly soft, / That my skin puckers and feels embossed.), but have a kind of cheerful enthusiasm.

• Your Effects by MydNyteDreamer is a short list of how the narrator's lover affects her.

• DGWolf talks a lot about bridges (and a relationship) in Burn Your Bridge. I found this kind of funny, though I doubt that was the emotion DG was trying to convey. But the escalating repetitions on the bridge metaphor strike me a little like Wile E. Coyote in a Roadrunner cartoon. Sorry.

• FluteMaster also is writing about a bummer relationship in Ending.

• I didn't quite follow the theme of No Words by sammyjmm, perhaps because I pretty much lost interest in it early on, but I did like that it begins There are no words that can explain the finality I feel and then proceeds to add almost 300 more words to end the poem.

• The prolific Ashesh9 uses one hell of a lot of exclamation points in The Irony of Sex ! (twenty, actually), and introduces the neologism sqeezasm. Read the poem for definition by context.

• Finally, Jack_Love gives us three self-descriptive offerings: Haiku Porn Ch. 02, Haiku Porn Ch. 03, and Haiku Porn Ch. 04. As I said--self-descriptive.

PandoraGlitters said:

Bunch of New Poems this Saturday. None I would recommend, but there were a lot of odes to the booty there so if you're into cabooses there're plenty to choose from!

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• New Lit poet Pultoy is rhymin' about what sounds to me suspiciously like some kind of planned revenge in The Coming Storm. Perhaps this is a "Loving Wives" kind of thing. Not my thing, but may be yours.

• Another poet new to Lit, Cinner, posts three poems. In Pleasure, In Pain consists of some fleeting impressions from the consciousness of a submissive during a discipline session. Images of Submission is similar, but (at least to me) more interesting, both in writing and in form. Worth a look. Finally, New Love presents a more vanilla cuddliness.

• Ashesh9 continues his love affair with the exclamation point in Hands cuffed behind Back !! which is about pretty much what you'd think, given the title.

• New poet(s?) fuivaalcyone drop six poems like a little bouquet of flowers on us: Her Birds Flew, I Drink Him In, I Want You, Is There Good in This?, Moments of Him, and The Mark. All have a kind of dreamy quality that is something like the poetry equivalent of a soft-focus light erotic movie--sort of David Hamilton's Bilitis writ out in words. Some interesting moments and at least one unintentional clunker of a line. Worth a look.

• My pick of the day, though, is Koba's Grounded, a rather rueful musing on human aspirations and limitations. Recommended.

1. 1. Can someone please look at my new poem and tell me what they think or direct me to where I need to post the question? {LINK BELOW}
2. 2. I need to find an editor so I do not make mistakes like [lion] for [loin] as I did in one of my poems, so if anyone knows someone?
3. 3. Does anyone else get excited just waking up too see how many people have read what you have written?

withlovel said:

I enjoy honesty and really want to become a better writer.

1. 1. Can someone please look at my new poem and tell me what they think or direct me to where I need to post the question? {LINK BELOW}
2. 2. I need to find an editor so I do not make mistakes like [lion] for [loin] as I did in one of my poems, so if anyone knows someone?
3. 3. Does anyone else get excited just waking up too see how many people have read what you have written?

Thank you all for your time,
Respecfully,
Liberator

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• Cinner contrasts the ideal childhood with a rather more disturbing alternative in Birthday.

• speaking to myself by seannelson. I do not comment on this poet's work, but he probably would appreciate it if you did.

• Poet aTasteofHoney really takes it to some guy in The Astounding Sound of a Idiot. Important safety tip--do not piss off a poet.

• While I loved the line my torchered soul in Master! by Amy Moore, I'm afraid it's probably simply misspelled. Even tazz seemed a bit bemused by this poem.

• Finally, Jack_Love pretty much says it all for me when he begins Ass Beat-Poetry with the line Perhaps the Most Ridiculous, Exhausting and Profane Conglomeration of Words you Might Ever Read. Inaccurate only in that I was unable to finish reading his offering, which is fairly lengthy.

withlovel said:

I do have a rather simplistic style of writing, maybe a more direct and to the point. Maybe it will change with more experience or it might just be who I am now. For those that are interested this particular poem started with just three lines with the top and bottom two repeating and I just took it from there. In my head I hear them both saying the words simultaneously, with one male and one female voice. I also have read the poem a number of times so the flow seems effortless to me or it could all just be my brain injury and the voices in my head. lol Non-the-less I tried to express an idea and came up short. Without failures, you will never know what success is. Thanks to all who read, voted, enjoyed, commented, and got the word out. As always respectfully yours, L.

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Neonurotic said:

We generally save this thread for poem recommendations and we have, To keep the review thread clean for chatting and such.

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