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I'm taking a chance here with this but I've developed the bad habit of abandoning stories before I finish them. I'm not sure what happens. I lose interest. I start something then look at it next day and decide it's not as good as I'd hoped. Something like that.
So I thought for once I'd put one up here. This is all I've written so far. Not sure exactly where it's going. I tend to make it up as I go along. I'd just like to know if it's the kind of thing anyone here would like to read? (Assuming I ever finish it). Is it interesting? Does it suck? Too long, not long enough? Boring? I don't know. Whatever. I'd appreciate your thoughts.
Thanks, in advance,
Adam.
1
"Dad, have you seen my black mini? The stretchy one?"
Gary Westmore was out of work. He was making himself useful, trying to keep busy.
"Mom said you'd been doing the laundry," Annette explained.
He was loading the dish washer as his nineteen year old daughter came sleepily into the kitchen. It struck him as funny the way she came to him now whenever she'd mislaid something. A month ago, before he'd been laid off, it was his wife, Louise, who knew where everything was. Had he been promoted or demoted? He wasn't sure.
"Have you tried your bedroom floor?" he said. It was kind of a running joke. Like a lot of young women Annette had a tendency to leave her clothes scattered all over the floor of her bedroom. It wasn't something he approved of and he'd spoken to her about it a couple of times. For a few days there would be an improvement and she'd make an effort to pick up after herself but it never lasted.
"Already looked there," she said.
Annette was just out of bed even though it was almost midday. Gary had been up for hours. Old habits died hard. He was used to getting up at 5am for work. Even without setting the alarm he still awoke early.
"Your mother hasn't borrowed it?" he said. It wasn't until he'd started taking charge of the laundry that he'd realised just how often they wore each others clothes.
Annette yawned and shook her head. Her long dark hair was still messy from sleep. She was wearing an oversize T-shirt.
"Well, there's some washing the in drier," he said. He was going to add that it might be in there but Annette was already turning away.
"Okay. If you find it, can you let me know?" she said, stifling another yawn. "I think I'll go back to bed."
Gary stared after her retreating, shapely figure with an expression of disbelief and amusement. Sure, he thought, it's all of ten steps to the drier but you go ahead. Get some sleep. He could have said something but he didn't. Since he'd been out of work he'd noticed that the more you did for people the more they took advantage. Louise was getting the same way. When he'd first been laid off she'd continued to cook the meals and take care of the grocery shopping but since he'd taken it on himself to help out around the house she seemed more than willing to let him do it.
There's something wrong with this picture he thought. But five minutes later, after he'd loaded the dishwasher, he opened the drier and started tugging the clothes out. What else was he going to do? He had to do something to pass the time.
2
The next day was Saturday and as usual Gary rose early. He shaved and showered. He ate breakfast. He lit a cigarette.
As he looked out of the kitchen window he thought about the shame of being out of work. It happened all the time and he wasn't the only one by far but that didn't make it any easier to accept. In the past he'd always looked forward to the weekends but now all the days seemed the same. It felt as if something had been taken from him. Instead of being out on the road all week he stayed at home, he cleaned the house, he washed clothes. He'd heard about house-husbands, those guys who stayed home permanently. It wasn't for him. No way. It already felt as if he was losing his identity. He had a niggling fear at the back of his mind that his wife and daughter no longer respected him. Not that he was big on respect, he didn't dominate them the way some guys did. It was just a guy needed to know where he stood, he had to have some pride, and women needed to know who wore the trousers.
He put out his cigarette and looked at the sky. It was clear and blue, not a cloud in sight. A good day for drying the washing outside, he thought. And then he caught himself mid-thought, already planning how he'd spend his day. More laundry, more cleaning.
"Shit," he whispered, then he smiled ruefully to himself. Something had to change. He couldn't go on like this.
"Hey honey," Louise said. She came into the kitchen wearing her dressing gown. Her feet were bare. "Is the coffee ready?"
Outside the washing was already half dry on the clothes line. Gary watched her but she didn't notice. She's getting lazy, he thought. She knows I'll take care of it so she doesn't give it a thought any more.
"I need to get a job," he said, when they were sitting at the table.
"You and a couple of million others," she told him. "I wouldn't hold your breath if I were you."
She took a deep breath and sighed as he watched her light a cigarette. She hadn't brushed her hair. Sometimes the just-out-of-bed look turned him on, but not today. It was mid-morning and she was only just getting up. She couldn't even brush her hair before she came down? Her dressing gown gaped at the front exposing fully half of one large, pale breast but she didn't even notice.
Gary wondered when she'd started getting so slovenly about her appearance.
"I'm serious," he told her.
"We're getting by."
"That's not the point."
She looked at him thoughtfully then turned her head aside to direct a stream of cigarette smoke towards the open door. For a moment he thought she was going to say something intelligent, something reassuring. Tell him not to worry, he'd find something. In the meantime she wanted him to know how much she appreciated his help around the house, the way he pitched in and took care of everything.
He waited. They'd been married for twenty three years. She had to see he wasn't happy. He wasn't cut out for this kind of life. It was what he needed to hear. But when she did speak it wasn't to say anything like that.
"Before I forget, did you fill the car yesterday?" she asked. "Annette and I are going to the mall this afternoon. Retail therapy. Do you want to come?"
3
By three o'clock that afternoon he was alone in the house. No, he'd told Louise, he absolutely did not want to go the mall.
"I'd rather stick needles in my eyes," he told the empty kitchen.
It was strange, he thought, how your feelings for a person could change over a comparatively short space of time. He loved his wife, he loved his daughter. Always had. But lately they annoyed him more and more.
He smoked a cigarette he didn't want. That was another thing, the more time he spent at home, the more cigarettes he smoked. He sat at the kitchen table, restless, irritated by the way things had turned out. It wasn't his fault. It wasn't anyone's fault. Shit happened. But that didn't make him feel any better.
Later, he moved aimlessly through the silent house, in and out of sunlit rooms, looking for something to do. Sometimes it was good to be alone, to have time to think, but it wasn't so good if all your thoughts were negative and self-defeating. He climbed the stairs and without thinking picked up a blouse that Louise or Annette had dropped on the landing. They were both as bad as each other when it came to picking up after themselves. It was something he'd never noticed before.
He paused outside Annette's bedroom. The door was ajar and the curtains were still closed and gave her bedroom a secret air. Did he really want to go in there? It was chock full of her things. He'd been in there before but it always made him feel uneasy to see her clothes and underwear lying around. Made him feel like some kind of voyeur. He could never understand why anyone would step out of their dirty panties then leave them lying on the floor. What was that all about? How difficult was it to pick them up and toss them in the laundry hamper?
He'd been embarassed to handle Annette's underwear when he'd first started taking over the chores. He'd tried not to look too closely at the stains in the crotch. He knew some guys got off on that kind of thing but he never had. A guy who'd sniff his daughter's dirty underwear had to be kind of sick, he'd always thought.
It might have been the silent house, the fact that he was alone there, or the way he was feeling just now about his wife and daughter that made him go into her bedroom. The door swung closed behind him and he stood in the half light by her unmade bed. He didn't see how anyone could sleep in a room like this, how did she expect to find anything? Discarded clothes hung from the furniture. The dressing table drawers were open. He could smell her perfume in the still air. As his eyes became more accustomed to the poor light he saw discarded items of underwear lying on the floor. Panties and bras that shone palely in the shadows beside her bed.
This isn't me, he thought, but he picked up one of her bras and admired the intricate lace pattern of the cups. I'm only doing this because I'm bored he told himself, discarding the bra and choosing a pair of skimpy white panties. He held them up to the faint light that fell through the curtains. There was nothing to them. They were just a scrap of material. He turned them inside out and studied the crotch. Handling them wasn't making him hard. He wasn't surprised or disappointed. He hadn't expected to be aroused. He sniffed the crotch tentatively, feeling a mixture of shame and guilt, feeling slightly ridiculous. A little ashamed. It was just an experiment, he told himself. He inhaled deeply, his senses alert, but all he detected was a faint, lingering hint of a slightly acrid smell.
Nothing, he thought. He wasn't aroused. He was about to drop the panties on the floor where he'd found them when he paused. He'd just had an idea. There was no one home. No one would ever know.
Still standing, with the door still closed, he opened his jeans and took out his cock. Watching his reflection in the dusty mirror over the dressing table he wrapped Annette's panties round his quickly growing erection. His masturbated mechanically, without thinking about anything. The mirror showed his reflection from the waist down. A guy beating off with his daughter's white panties glimmering faintly in the gloom of her bedroom. The power of his ejaculation took him by surprise. He caught it in her panties but some of it was on his fingers. Breathing hard his movements slowed and he looked down at the mess he'd made.
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So I thought for once I'd put one up here. This is all I've written so far. Not sure exactly where it's going. I tend to make it up as I go along. I'd just like to know if it's the kind of thing anyone here would like to read? (Assuming I ever finish it). Is it interesting? Does it suck? Too long, not long enough? Boring? I don't know. Whatever. I'd appreciate your thoughts.
Thanks, in advance,
Adam.
1
"Dad, have you seen my black mini? The stretchy one?"
Gary Westmore was out of work. He was making himself useful, trying to keep busy.
"Mom said you'd been doing the laundry," Annette explained.
He was loading the dish washer as his nineteen year old daughter came sleepily into the kitchen. It struck him as funny the way she came to him now whenever she'd mislaid something. A month ago, before he'd been laid off, it was his wife, Louise, who knew where everything was. Had he been promoted or demoted? He wasn't sure.
"Have you tried your bedroom floor?" he said. It was kind of a running joke. Like a lot of young women Annette had a tendency to leave her clothes scattered all over the floor of her bedroom. It wasn't something he approved of and he'd spoken to her about it a couple of times. For a few days there would be an improvement and she'd make an effort to pick up after herself but it never lasted.
"Already looked there," she said.
Annette was just out of bed even though it was almost midday. Gary had been up for hours. Old habits died hard. He was used to getting up at 5am for work. Even without setting the alarm he still awoke early.
"Your mother hasn't borrowed it?" he said. It wasn't until he'd started taking charge of the laundry that he'd realised just how often they wore each others clothes.
Annette yawned and shook her head. Her long dark hair was still messy from sleep. She was wearing an oversize T-shirt.
"Well, there's some washing the in drier," he said. He was going to add that it might be in there but Annette was already turning away.
"Okay. If you find it, can you let me know?" she said, stifling another yawn. "I think I'll go back to bed."
Gary stared after her retreating, shapely figure with an expression of disbelief and amusement. Sure, he thought, it's all of ten steps to the drier but you go ahead. Get some sleep. He could have said something but he didn't. Since he'd been out of work he'd noticed that the more you did for people the more they took advantage. Louise was getting the same way. When he'd first been laid off she'd continued to cook the meals and take care of the grocery shopping but since he'd taken it on himself to help out around the house she seemed more than willing to let him do it.
There's something wrong with this picture he thought. But five minutes later, after he'd loaded the dishwasher, he opened the drier and started tugging the clothes out. What else was he going to do? He had to do something to pass the time.
2
The next day was Saturday and as usual Gary rose early. He shaved and showered. He ate breakfast. He lit a cigarette.
As he looked out of the kitchen window he thought about the shame of being out of work. It happened all the time and he wasn't the only one by far but that didn't make it any easier to accept. In the past he'd always looked forward to the weekends but now all the days seemed the same. It felt as if something had been taken from him. Instead of being out on the road all week he stayed at home, he cleaned the house, he washed clothes. He'd heard about house-husbands, those guys who stayed home permanently. It wasn't for him. No way. It already felt as if he was losing his identity. He had a niggling fear at the back of his mind that his wife and daughter no longer respected him. Not that he was big on respect, he didn't dominate them the way some guys did. It was just a guy needed to know where he stood, he had to have some pride, and women needed to know who wore the trousers.
He put out his cigarette and looked at the sky. It was clear and blue, not a cloud in sight. A good day for drying the washing outside, he thought. And then he caught himself mid-thought, already planning how he'd spend his day. More laundry, more cleaning.
"Shit," he whispered, then he smiled ruefully to himself. Something had to change. He couldn't go on like this.
"Hey honey," Louise said. She came into the kitchen wearing her dressing gown. Her feet were bare. "Is the coffee ready?"
Outside the washing was already half dry on the clothes line. Gary watched her but she didn't notice. She's getting lazy, he thought. She knows I'll take care of it so she doesn't give it a thought any more.
"I need to get a job," he said, when they were sitting at the table.
"You and a couple of million others," she told him. "I wouldn't hold your breath if I were you."
She took a deep breath and sighed as he watched her light a cigarette. She hadn't brushed her hair. Sometimes the just-out-of-bed look turned him on, but not today. It was mid-morning and she was only just getting up. She couldn't even brush her hair before she came down? Her dressing gown gaped at the front exposing fully half of one large, pale breast but she didn't even notice.
Gary wondered when she'd started getting so slovenly about her appearance.
"I'm serious," he told her.
"We're getting by."
"That's not the point."
She looked at him thoughtfully then turned her head aside to direct a stream of cigarette smoke towards the open door. For a moment he thought she was going to say something intelligent, something reassuring. Tell him not to worry, he'd find something. In the meantime she wanted him to know how much she appreciated his help around the house, the way he pitched in and took care of everything.
He waited. They'd been married for twenty three years. She had to see he wasn't happy. He wasn't cut out for this kind of life. It was what he needed to hear. But when she did speak it wasn't to say anything like that.
"Before I forget, did you fill the car yesterday?" she asked. "Annette and I are going to the mall this afternoon. Retail therapy. Do you want to come?"
3
By three o'clock that afternoon he was alone in the house. No, he'd told Louise, he absolutely did not want to go the mall.
"I'd rather stick needles in my eyes," he told the empty kitchen.
It was strange, he thought, how your feelings for a person could change over a comparatively short space of time. He loved his wife, he loved his daughter. Always had. But lately they annoyed him more and more.
He smoked a cigarette he didn't want. That was another thing, the more time he spent at home, the more cigarettes he smoked. He sat at the kitchen table, restless, irritated by the way things had turned out. It wasn't his fault. It wasn't anyone's fault. Shit happened. But that didn't make him feel any better.
Later, he moved aimlessly through the silent house, in and out of sunlit rooms, looking for something to do. Sometimes it was good to be alone, to have time to think, but it wasn't so good if all your thoughts were negative and self-defeating. He climbed the stairs and without thinking picked up a blouse that Louise or Annette had dropped on the landing. They were both as bad as each other when it came to picking up after themselves. It was something he'd never noticed before.
He paused outside Annette's bedroom. The door was ajar and the curtains were still closed and gave her bedroom a secret air. Did he really want to go in there? It was chock full of her things. He'd been in there before but it always made him feel uneasy to see her clothes and underwear lying around. Made him feel like some kind of voyeur. He could never understand why anyone would step out of their dirty panties then leave them lying on the floor. What was that all about? How difficult was it to pick them up and toss them in the laundry hamper?
He'd been embarassed to handle Annette's underwear when he'd first started taking over the chores. He'd tried not to look too closely at the stains in the crotch. He knew some guys got off on that kind of thing but he never had. A guy who'd sniff his daughter's dirty underwear had to be kind of sick, he'd always thought.
It might have been the silent house, the fact that he was alone there, or the way he was feeling just now about his wife and daughter that made him go into her bedroom. The door swung closed behind him and he stood in the half light by her unmade bed. He didn't see how anyone could sleep in a room like this, how did she expect to find anything? Discarded clothes hung from the furniture. The dressing table drawers were open. He could smell her perfume in the still air. As his eyes became more accustomed to the poor light he saw discarded items of underwear lying on the floor. Panties and bras that shone palely in the shadows beside her bed.
This isn't me, he thought, but he picked up one of her bras and admired the intricate lace pattern of the cups. I'm only doing this because I'm bored he told himself, discarding the bra and choosing a pair of skimpy white panties. He held them up to the faint light that fell through the curtains. There was nothing to them. They were just a scrap of material. He turned them inside out and studied the crotch. Handling them wasn't making him hard. He wasn't surprised or disappointed. He hadn't expected to be aroused. He sniffed the crotch tentatively, feeling a mixture of shame and guilt, feeling slightly ridiculous. A little ashamed. It was just an experiment, he told himself. He inhaled deeply, his senses alert, but all he detected was a faint, lingering hint of a slightly acrid smell.
Nothing, he thought. He wasn't aroused. He was about to drop the panties on the floor where he'd found them when he paused. He'd just had an idea. There was no one home. No one would ever know.
Still standing, with the door still closed, he opened his jeans and took out his cock. Watching his reflection in the dusty mirror over the dressing table he wrapped Annette's panties round his quickly growing erection. His masturbated mechanically, without thinking about anything. The mirror showed his reflection from the waist down. A guy beating off with his daughter's white panties glimmering faintly in the gloom of her bedroom. The power of his ejaculation took him by surprise. He caught it in her panties but some of it was on his fingers. Breathing hard his movements slowed and he looked down at the mess he'd made.
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