Zingiber's updates and story discussion 2004

[Zingiber]

My previous update thread needed a little freshening up, I thought, so I'm starting a new one.

I'm also inviting comments and suggestions on my stories (or my threads on others' stories) per Gystex's suggestion to Forsaken One about productive ways to increase your Literotica thread count (for those desperately seeking avatars):

Originally posted by gystex
A nicely useful way to increase your thread count is to review other people's stories. There is a place on the Literotica forums to do that, or you can seek out the individual author's threads here on CHYOO (probably the easiest way to find them is to sort the threads by author and look for each person's "Official Thread")

I would be encouraged to hear more about what people like in my stories. I occasionally get Chyoo feedback, but it's rare enough that I can wait for months between comments.

For anyone with interest in my stories, I would also appreciate ideas for story directions and hot scenes.

Updates to follow.

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

Continuing AaronWebster's direction of two couples headed for the same first-class washroom, each planning their own meeting of the "Mile High Club", I've added a follow-up.

When Hank Menard's wife Veevee finally gets young brunette Monica's denim shorts down, what is printed on her panties?

FRIDAY FRIDAY FRIDAY

Although as Veevee comments, it's already late Saturday night.

With Monica teetering on the edge of orgasm from Veevee's skilled fingers, can she tear herself away and get her boyfriend Tom back into action? And if not, what do the poor fellows do?

And did the young couple have a good time in Nepal?

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

A new contributor thickens the plot in When The Cat's Away.

Imhotep had left Gary Menard under severe temptation as his sister Lil's distraught former co-worker Colleen tells how Lil's cheating boyfriend fooled her too, polishes off several glasses of Gary's parents' liquor, and gives him a back rub. After Gary gets a massage, and a confession, does Gary cheat on his girlfriend?

Our new contribution says... yes of course

Thanks to backnumber for showing Gary being a thoughtful, polite, sneaky, rotten bad boy!

 

[Zingiber]

In From The Snow

lostandfound(er)'s contributions to In From the Snow have moved me to freshen it up a bit on another track.

For lostandfound(er), start with They decide to stay with the woman..

For my new threads, start with Ooohkitty's thread Keith and Virginia change upstairs and proceed to Anjali's pregnant!

Happy (northern hemisphere) summer!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

Re: When The Cat's Away

backnumber keeps things rolling as Gary and the girls plan their evening. Gary contemplates guilty pleasures and future opportunities, Lil thinks fondly about Alison, and Bernie's thinking about a jazz club.

But with Colleen still in the picture, there are bound to be complications!

Thanks again, backnumber!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

Office Morale

Torg revives Office Morale with a thread in which visiting exec helps the sales team to fulfill top saleswoman Kacey's fantasy -- a gang bang.

How does he help? Why, of course, Rick joins in.

Does Rick have enough stamina to go see the rest of the office in the break room? Give us a thread and let us know!

Thanks for a rousing thread, Torg!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

backnumber shows us Colleen's point of view after her well-intentioned visit to apologize to Lil turns into a sexual encounter with her brother Gary.

Colleen's afternoon has her run into a stranger with a saxophone who seems to know her already. Something about the look on his face gives her second thoughts about seeing Gary again, since he obviously wants to keep screwing Colleen behind his girlfriend's back. Maybe she'll go out by herself and see the saxophonist playing instead.

But then Gary calls to invite her to the jazz club where the saxophonist is playing tonight.

Will she get into an awful mess? Will she see that saxophone player at the club? Were any groceries harmed in the collision?

Thanks to backnumber for keeping the intrigue cooking!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

backnumber follows Colleen to the jazz club where saxophonist Jim Hawkins is playing. She meets up with Gary, Lil, Bernie, and Alison there. Colleen's feeling guilty but excited, and is determined to have fun tonight one way or the other. Will every choice get her in deeper trouble? Find out at the Basement and the following thread.

High marks for plot, sex, and character! Thanks backnumber!

 

[Zingiber]

In From The Snow

jakelyon has stepped up with two threads for In From The Snow

This time, Keith and Ginny rescue some stupid college girls completely unprepared for traveling in the snow, wet and chilled from trying to dig themselves out.

All those wet clothes soon come off!

But what does Ginny tell Keith as he surveys the four bra-and-panty clad college girls in front of the fire? She wants him to cool his jets. But Keith is reluctant to let a perfectly good erection go to waste...

Thanks for some hot stuff in the snow, Jake!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

Get Me To The Church On Time

brevdravis continues the hanky panky in the back room of the men's formal wear shop. After bride-to-be Willow and her friend Jen trip and fall into the curtained fitting alcove where they were spying on best man Cedric and his wife in an enthusiastic act of fellatio, what happens?

Well, Cedric's wife Gloria wants to know what you think you're doing!

Jen explains that at first they thought it was Willow's fiancé Alex on his knees in front of Cedric, since Gloria's wearing a suit.

And it appears that Jen and Cedric may be better acquainted then anyone else thought.

Can bride Willow save the day from turning into a catfight among the wedding party? What would you do in this position? You get a little devious.

And where is Alex anyway? Didn't they follow him into the back room?

Thanks!

 

[Zingiber]

busy busy busy!

Four new threads today, one each from backnumber and jakelyon, and two from lostandfound(er)!

When The Cat's Away
What does an pretty young redhead with a high sex drive do after a careless remark drives her to fleeing her friends in tears? backnumber leaves the evening at the jazz club and shows us whose coffee cup she falls into in Colleen's night. (Don't miss the previous thread for a glimpse of Gary's old girlfriend).

In From The Snow
Sexually frustrated highway rescuer Keith, tall, black, and handsome, is masturbating to relieve the big boner he got from the sight of the damp and mostly-undressed college girls drying off by his fire, not to mention the sexual charge from his unfinished afternoon romp with his blonde wife Ginny. He's interrupted again! But it's not the radiophone. Jakelyon shows us It's Brenda, and he lets her help. What will Ginny have to say?

Get Me to the Church On Time
lostandfound sets the scene at the church, where the wedding caterers meet a hunk of a man looking for his wallet, and both sisters figure Introductions are in order. When they find out he's the pastor, Mandy is ashamed, but Martha is simmering under her skirt. What happens next?

Office Morale
lostandfound takes us to the beginning of junior exec Rick Hart's visit to the branch office, where he excuses his wandering eyes...er, mind, by complaining of jet lag. Branch manager Helen, a three-day fling from Rick's past, offers him A cup of coffee.. And he gets his first glimpse of Helen's productivity and morale policy, which leaves him stunned on the floor. Take a look yourself!

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

backnumber spins the parallel stories of Colleen and Jim, Bernie and Gary, Alison and Lil.

Whilst Colleen's night is going on, the evening finishes up with the lusty couples Gary and Bernie together as well as Alison and Lil, who next morning get together for a hearty breakfast and Sunday morning at the beach. They give Colleen a call, and she seems a bit shaken up.

After Colleen's difficult night, Jim Hawkins tries to be nice to her but Colleen gets angry at Jim. Is he being nice, or condescending?

Will Lil dump Alison for the first likely fellow, or is Lil really soured on men? Will Bernie find out Gary's been cheating on her? Will Colleen figure out what she wants? Wait for the next installment, or contribute one of your own!

A hearty thanks to backnumber for keeping the pot hot and stirring!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

My own recent contributions to When The Cat's Away include a sprinkling of threads to various storylines.

After Gary drops Lil and Bernie off and wanders over to Bernie's house, hoping her mom Joyce will let him hang out at the pool, he catches Joyce giving rather intimate assistance to Bernie's cousin Ben. After he watches Joyce use a dildo on Ben while he masturbates and hears Joyce mention that Bernie has done the same, Gary's caught looking! Joyce invites him in. Can he say no?

In Gary's alternate afternoon, he drops off Lil and Bernie and cruises by the beach. Three cute, bored young women serenade Gary and want a ride to a private beach and coax Gary to scout the nude beach around the point. Gary finds the nude beach too windy, but there's a sheltered hidden beach. Last one's there's a ...

After a shower, Bernie worries to her mom that she looks too fat. After Bernie's mom soothes her with consoling talk and brushing her hair, Bernie starts looking for the vibrator that usually lives in the upstairs linen closet. Her mom catches on and invites her to choose a toy or two and masturbate together. Bernie says "Sure mom!" and picks out a dildo and beads, and Bernie's mom offers to help. But Bernie fantasizes about her cousin Ben, even more than Gary. Will all be well when Gary shows up? Will Joyce insist her daughter needs to attend her Women's Sensuality Circle to improve her self-love?

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

Recent updates by myself to When The Cat's Away:

Continuing the "Hank and Veevee return home" storyline, where they've entered the house, caught the scent of sex, and followed their noses to the master bedroom. When they arrive, they see their daughter and son Lil and Gary each in a threesome on the bed. Veevee is very excited, while Hank worries they'll get caught peeping.

In an alternative to the "too windy" thread with Gary and the girls he drove to the private beach, Gary goes round the point to Pirate's Beach and instead finds nice weather for nude volleyball.

When Lil and Bernie are considering having Tarot cards read for them at the mall, Bernie decides she needs to take
a quick bathroom break to relieve herself of the anxious arousal she picked up at "Hot" when salesclerk Lei measured her. As an alternate to the earlier thread where Bernie goes alone, instead, Lil follows, and it turns out Bernie wasn't the only one who was hot and bothered.

I also started a thread to let contributors start with Gary and Lil's friends or others in town instead, and as a first example, added a starting thread for Alison where Alison drops off her latest fling with her fiancé before getting a phone call. Is it Bernie calling to fix her up with Lil?

P.S.: To the person who sent me unsigned feedback,

Comments: excellent how do you plan to develop from there

Probably get Alison mixed up with Bernie and Lil somehow, since she's named in the second introduction thread as the woman giving Lil a loud orgasm in another room while Gary and Bernie overhear. The thread takes Alison's point of view and fills in one possible background story for her. Follow-ups could be similar (Alison's take on Lil and Bernie?), and/or could be linked with another line of the story that might be Lil's or Gary's or Bernie's. We also don't know what Alison and Bernie's history together are, so flashbacks are possible, even desirable if they connect the characters in interesting ways.

and can i take some threads too?

Yes, certainly. Just ask if you have questions, and sign your comments if you want a direct answer.

Contributions developing Alison's story are certainly welcome.

Also I could imagine parallel threads developing some of Gary and Stuart (Mr. Super Surf Van)'s friendship, and/or the gang of surf boys and surf chicks that hang around him, circling back to a beach party with Gary and/or Lil.

Lil must also have some female friends (hopefully not all away for the summer), so more development would be welcome in that area. By the same token, we haven't heard much about Gary's male friends, and it might be nice to hear more. There aren't enough interesting guys around on the home front yet (other than in backnumber's excellent contributions).

backnumber is doing a super job with Lil's co-worker Colleen, where she's almost stealing the story, so I think she's covered.

Likewise I think Bernie and her mom and her cousin Ben should probably develop from the parts of the story where they've been introduced.

Thank you for taking the time to add comments! I appreciate hearing what's good, or what seems off.

P.S. to people rating my threads: It's a little discouraging to me to get an unexplained rating of 4 on a new thread, as well as confusing. I'm tempted to call out, What? Where did I go wrong? What was I missing?. So please, if you can, say SOMETHING. Maybe Geez, enough with the girls farting! or Liked it but toe sucking is kinda icky, or Hot scene but I don't think she would have said that, she doesn't talk like that or Nice but could you clue us in to how this develops the previous thread?.

 

[Zingiber]

When The Cat's Away

backnumber brings the stories of Gary and his sister and girlfriend's sexual adventures together with a little home truth session, Gary and the girls come clean, in which confession is not only good for the soul, but it leads to further temptations!

Gary's very relieved to be forgiven for catting around on Bernie, but how does he feel about letting her stretch her wings and play around too? And what about Bernie and Lil offering to set up an orgy with Colleen?

Plus we learn more about Laura, who's still prominent in Gary's affections, even if nothing "really" has happened between them yet.

Capital, backnumber!

-Z

 

[Zingiber]

A last hurrah for this thread

Since this discussion thread is labeled with the year 2004, there's little time to add updates. But here are a few bits for When the Cat's Away :

backnumber has been steadily developing Colleen and her relationships with the upright Jim Hawkins and the faithless Gary and his friends. Check out the follow-ups to his previous threads.

Imhotep has been planting well-crafted threads here and there throughout the story that are worthy of follow-up (hint, hint! to prospective writers). Just a few examples:

• On with the shopping! leads Bernie and Lil into a shoe store where Lil has a mysterious encounter with a female television news anchor.
  
• Get something to drink shows Bernie and Lil that quenching their thirst in the food court can lead to complicated and sticky situations. And then someone offers to help. Is it welcome?
  
• After Gary dozes off in the beach parking lot, he's awakened by The Lifeguard complaining he's taken her space. But Julie has a while before her shift, she hasn't been getting any lately, and she think's Gary's cute... can he take advantage? will he?
  
• Or perhaps he's awakened by Tatiana who used to work at Clinique when he was picking up packages for Mrs. Rubin, his summer "employer". Tatiana needs a big favor, but is she flirting too?

TwiztidClown has just contributed an excellent plot-developing thread that concludes with Bernie looking sadly into Gary's eyes, but still holding out hope. It's all a result of Bernie confessing her relationship with Ben. Is Gary mad at Bernie for two-timing him all along? No he is not mad. (All of this follows Gary catching Bernie's mom sunbathing nude)
Bravo, TC!

 

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