Your opinion is requested

[crystalhunting]

This poem is by a young girl poet that I know,I believe she is very talented,This is one of the best she has sent me I think,she is fearfull of rejection..but has given me permmision to submit it,provideing That her name isn't told to anyone,any opinions are welcome,thank you for your input.
The Seduction

He pressed his lips to hers while telling of his love, seducing her to what he wants and where he will take her. Touching her face so close to his she can smell his skin as it brings her to her knees, he has captured her in this seduction. The taste of his lips melts her and brings her closer inside of his spell, pressing his body close to hers feeling each breath she takes, as each curve melts into his. His body covers hers, she sees nothing but him and the passion he covers her with. She now speaks only in moans to his touch, words that are not spoken but only movements in the night. His voice speaks so softly reducing her from what she was to who she will become spell bound in his love in the art of his seduction.

 

[KandeeGirl]

I think it's very good, although I guess my opinion doesn't count for much!

 

[Renegade]

This reminded me of an SRP post that you'd read from some of the more talented writers. Which is basicly a good thing when you get down to it. I'm far from being the best person for advice on writing, but in my personel opinion, this was well written overall.

 

[bluntforcemama]

She sounds like she's almost in love! Tell her to join!