Your Feedback is so much appreciated!

[lipdancing]

Thanks so much,

To all you nice folks who have written to me about my first effort, here on Literotica. Your kind words (and juicy suggestions, lol, sometimes) make my day.

Clearly, I have (and will) change just enough details to maintain my, and other people's privacy...but this unfolding effort will, at its core, be based on my actual life (so far!! she added).

With that in mind, though, I would love to hear any ideas you have to enhance your experience with me...my goal is to know that I have helped a few orgasms along out there...

with Love,

June

 

[Susan2002]

your story

I had to dig around to find it.
to save others the trouble...
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=318612

 

[drksideofthemoon]

I had to dig around to find it.
to save others the trouble...
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=318612

Oh, no, no, no, we are much too lazy in here to dig up the links for stories! Didn't you get the memo? You're going about and making the rest of us look bad!

Of course, you know this is all in jest...

 

[_Lynn_]

With that in mind, though, I would love to hear any ideas you have to enhance your experience with me...my goal is to know that I have helped a few orgasms along out there...

If this is all you want from here, you never even came close. I struggled to keep reading through to the end.

The characters never develop. I didn't read anything interesting enough to want to know what happens next.

My opinion only.
ML

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

I read it. I was bored to tears.

I have two suggestions:

1. Don't try writing your autobiography ever again. In fact, don't ever write a "real life" story again.

2. Create you characters. Let them rattle around in you head for a while - not on paper. Talk to them. Find out how they think, how they react and how they speak. Then let them write their own story.

This is fiction. Fiction is imagination. After reading hundreds of "real life" stories, I can tell you than NONE of them were real. Not one was even believable. And nearly all were horrid little tails written while fantasizing (cock/dildo in hand) about the writer's cousin (or insert mother-in-law, father, neighbor, sister, brother, the guy at the grocery store with the big package, etc )

 

[geronimo_appleby]

i dug it.

and began sliding her wet sex, so red and bushy, up and down on mine, with its jet-black fur.

 

[flavortang]

Wow, some harsh critiques here...

 

[geronimo_appleby]

Wow, some harsh critiques here...

loving wives woulda been harsher!

 

[mjl2010]

I have to agree the criticism is harsh. Jenny you meanie, you must be in a bad mood today. Did they glue the locks at Starbucks again?

Honestly I had trouble staying with it as well. Unless there is a really good story to it, I have trouble staying with incest stories. Add in lesbian and you've lost me so don't take my having trouble reading it to heart.

This is really the wrong place to put an autobiography. 97 percent of the people here are stroking with one hand and scrolling with the other.

But hey, not everyone likes my stories either and you have to accept that. It's part of writing. If you want to write about your life's sexual experiences, go ahead, but make the characters real and talk some.

MJL