Yes, I'm an Idiot. The Passive Voice, anyone?

[Seamus123]

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[Sapphire_O]

Passive voice is when you have the action (verb) before the actor (noun). Or you have an action taking place with no mention of the person or thing doing the action.

Examples:

Passive:

The cheese was sliced by Julie.

Active:
Julie sliced the cheese.

Passive:
Decorations appeared throughout the house during Xmas.

Active:
The family hung decorations throughout the house for Xmas.

 

[Seamus123]

You're a genius.

Thank you!

 

[Sapphire_O]

Aw, shucks.

Good luck with the magazine.

 

[Seamus123]

I think i'm getting it.

Warhawk's unveiling showcased the Sixaxis and PS3's rendering of hundreds of aircraft in 2005; now, it's an almost unrecognisable Battlefield: Modern Combat tribute. Whereas it's development has been baffling, conceptually, it couldn't be simpler – a sign-on, blast-off massively multi-player online wargame. And it could be the multi-player sleeper hit of PS3's troubled infancy.

The game initially feels geared towards air combat – although a different experience to it's debut, when manoeuvrable planes screamed through the air, assaulting enormous behemoths, reminiscent of Independence Day. However, the combat's now less epic, but vastly expanded in terms of depth.

For example, while the 'Warhawk' planes – a futuristic Harrier – remain crucial, they're now equipped with 'hover' (ideal for ground attacks) and 'jet' (perfect for evasive manoeuvres) modes. On the ground, nippy 4x4's and ponderous, powerful tanks are available. Jeeps accommodate three players: a driver, passenger, and one lucky cadet who arms a machine gun in return for being exposed to attack. Tanks have only two occupants, but when they're operating the cannon and protruding from the turret with a hefty rocket launcher, it's certainly intimidating.

Someone check that.

please.

 

[wishfulthinking]

Passive: the above was gobblygook to wishful.
Active: wishful found the above gobblygook.



Goodluck

 

[Sapphire_O]

Your passive voice seems to be taken care of, but imho your sentences are a bit cluttered for a magazine. I did a quick edit, feel free to ignore my changes. I just have the editor's compulsion

Warhawk's unveiling showcased the Sixaxis and PS3's rendering of hundreds of aircraft in 2005; now, it's an almost unrecognisable Battlefield: Modern Combat tribute. Although its development was baffling, it couldn't be simpler conceptually. It’s a sign-on, blast-off, massive multi-player online wargame. And it could be the multi-player sleeper hit of PS3's troubled infancy.

The game initially feels geared towards air combat. This combat has significantly changed from its debut, when manoeuvrable planes screamed through the air and assaulted enormous behemoths, reminiscent of Independence Day. It's now less epic, but vastly expanded in terms of depth. [expanded?or is superior a better word?]For example, while the 'Warhawk' planes – a futuristic Harrier – remain crucial, they're now equipped with 'hover' (ideal for ground attacks) and 'jet' (perfect for evasive manoeuvres) modes.

[Could use a transition here like “The game also offers excellent land combat options” or “But the ground combat is equally expansive.”]
On the ground, nippy 4x4's and ponderous, powerful tanks are available. Jeeps accommodate three players: a driver, passenger, and one lucky cadet who arms a machine gun in return for being exposed to attack. Tanks have only two occupants, but when they're operating the cannon and protruding from the turret with a hefty rocket launcher, it's certainly intimidating.

 

[starrkers]

The passive voice is sorted, but in the second par you have this

although a different experience to it's debut,

should be its not it's

 

[Sapphire_O]

The passive voice is sorted, but in the second par you have this



should be its not it's

hee, hee... I'm perfect what are you talking about? *edit edit* It's late. Good catch.

 

[Roxanne Appleby]

Politician passive: Mistakes were made.
Politician active: I did it (but she swore she was 19).

 

[galaxygoddess]

Politician passive: Mistakes were made.
Politician active: I did it (but she swore she was 19).

I lol'd.