Writing Challenge ~ July 2011 ~ Reviews and Comments

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ JULY 2011​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 11th – 31st July 2011 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[wideeyedone]

M13

loved the tender and romantic feelings twisted into the Ds subtext and I loved how you took the prompt in a direction I hadn't anticipated at all.

 

[DarkWarrioress]

M13 ~ Loss.

What can I say, M13? Not a damn thing because I am thoroughly choked up. I think this is your best piece I have had the pleasure and honor of reading. I was right there, with her, feeling every single emotion she was feeling, right to end.

Thank you, for sharing your gift so eloquently.

 

[yeishia]

M13 ~ Loss.

I do not have time to write in this thread but I do peruse it from time to time.

M13 I have to say it was as if you pulled the story directly from my own imagination.

I feel uncomfortable critiquing another writers work while mine is still so sadly lacking, however I must say;

A job well done... in more ways than one.

 

[marauder13]

wideeyedone, DarkWarrioress & Yeishia,

Thank you for your feedback. Between the three of you, you managed to make me blush. I am glad that I was able to produce a piece that got such strong reactions from you, all in good ways.

I hope that I am able to generate pieces in the future that are just as good.

 

[Britwitch]

Loss ~ Marauder13

M13, what you produced was gorgeously written, as always. Gut wrencingly sad but realistic, hopeful and beautiful. I loved it

Untitled ~ wideeyedone

I could feel her tension, her panic...it made me feel a little sick as I read towards the end, hoping she would get away. Hoping he didn't come home for some unexpected reason and catch her. Well written and utterly captivating!

Untitled ~ fr33ks33k

I love that you worked both prompts into this. Your writing always enthralls me and this was no exception. Brilliant, just brilliant.

 

[Last_Rider]

Loss - M13

What can I say, this was wonderful. The emotion combined with some of the more restricted elements like the thought/letter she was writing was extremely effective. I felt her pain, but also that she was moving away from grief to fond memories of her loved one.

Untitled - Wideyedone

Very well done, feeling the emotions, the fear, the adrenaline she felt as she was actually escaping. All of it was visceral and effective. Kudos.

Untitled - Fr33k

Thought provoking, your use of metaphor as well as the general theme was very good. Thank you for posting this.

 

[marauder13]

Untitled - Wideyedone

I found this to be a rather good piece. I liked the way you gave depth to her feelings, the immediacy of her actions as well as the fearful knowledge of the price she'd pay if caught. I liked how you stopped it where you did, leaving it open as to how far she managed to go with her new path in life.

Untitled - Fr33k

I loved the way you merged the two prompts together. I was going to try that, but chickened out in the end. But you worked them together very well, and made me grateful that I didn't try it myself.

Bracelets - Last_Rider

Rider... You really managed to meet the psycho within when you wrote that piece. I could easily see and feel where he was coming from, and how it all felt for him as he made his break for freedom. Well done.

 

[fr33ks33k]

Marauder, your piece was very nearly a tear-jerker for me. I enjoyed the imagery and the grave importance imported on the handcuffs. It was nice to see that even in death, she found strength in him.

Wideeyedone, your piece also struck a chord with me. The struggle to get out from under the oppression and the final straw breaking were well portrayed here.

Rider, that was visceral and intense, and I loved every second of it. Perhaps the psycho in me was just smiling at the psycho in your submission, but either way it was a nice interpretation of the prompt.

Thanks everyone for your comments. I am glad that my writing is enjoyable for you all.

 

[Britwitch]

Bracelets ~ Last_Rider

That was a great little piece, loved the direction you took the prompt! Very dramatic but without being over-the-top. Awesome!!