Writing an orgasm

[dirk2024]

Here is an issue I am struggling with.

How to write an orgasm.

I've read a bunch of stories here and I've seen all sorts of variations on this. Some authors simply don't, meaning that the orgasms aren't written out at all. Some authors simply write the physical impact of the Big O on the particular character. (white flashes, thrusting/jerking hips, fluid expulsion)

Others attempt something and I've seen variations of:

AHHHHH
Ohhhhhh
HYNG
HNNG
and many other letter combinations.

...and the ever popular Oh My God!

How do you write your characters orgasms?

 

[StillStunned]

I don't just write orgasms, I write about writing orgasms: WIWAW: Orgasms, Bang or Whimper.

I'm in the "white flashes and jerking hips" camp. But then you also have to describe how the orgasm ends: it's not just a bang, it's also the whimper at the end. This one is from one of my most recent stories:

Still, I needed her tongue, needed it to form a hard tip and flick at my clit, fast and regular, while my climax formed inside me. I needed it to guide me to the finish, to stoke the white fire and direct it to the point of no return, while I fuelled it from my excitement and anger and hatred and the sense of power, and half a lifetime of frustration, and Jessica was screaming, sobbing inside me, and my hands were in Tammy's hair, pulling her against me, ignoring her muffled protests and the delicious pain in my arse from her clawing fingers as I rode her face until the walls couldn't hold back the fire anymore and it burst free in a million explosions that shot through my body, along my arms and legs, up my spine and into my head, behind my eyes, out through my mouth in a choking, grunting scream that continued while the energy seeped out of me, melting away, sinking down lower and lower and further down, until I could breathe again and open my eyes, and I saw Tammy still looking up at me, face red and tears in her eyes.

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

I have 'em tense up and pass out for a few minutes.

 

[UncleJunior]

I mostly run through what's physically happening while my point of view character reacts, responds to, or comments on it.

Sometimes the point of view character is the wet spot, but the structure is pretty much the same every time.

 

[stickygirl]

Hopefully we've all experienced orgasms, so we know about explosions and fire and flashes. Use metaphors instead - be inventive. Catch our imagination, don't churn out what you think we expect.

 

[lovecraft68]

Women only have orgasms in most stories written by here by men to show how amazing the male lover is.

 

[stickygirl]

Women only have orgasms in most stories written by here by men to show how amazing the male lover is.

Papercut from hell

 

[TheGreatOz]

A couple of mine I quite liked:

Giving: the first time "Monkey" goes down on her blonde roommate "Goddess"

And then she is there and I am right there riding her waves with her and she is thrashing and jerking and holding me tightly to her red hot cunt and there is nothing in the world but me and her and her taste and her smell and her juices... and I wish this moment, this perfect moment, would never end... and her thighs are tight around my face and she is moaning and the spasms are racing through her and she is babbling... then...

and then she is going again... climbing again... cumming again, foul mouthed again and moaning about the slutty Chinese whore still slurping on her clit... and I am lost, hopelessly lost in cunt and happiness... and I am sucking her clit hard and working a third finger up her drooling fuckhole... and I lick and slurp and nuzzle while she jerks about and moans, with waves of pleasure that I gave her surging through her... and please there is nothing I wouldn't give to be trapped in this moment forever in perfect communion with my Goddess... trapped in joy knowing that Goddesses are real and Paradise is real and that this monkey's gone to Heaven and that nothing in my life has ever meant more to me than this...

The last spasms end... I feel all the tension drain from her body.. she is like a limp doll now, thighs relaxed, her cunt no longer tightly pulsing around my fingers. Her hand rests lightly on my head, she strokes my hair gently now. Her breathing slows, eases.

"Oh my God, that was huge."

Receiving: Pervert son and Christian mother:

My balls are tightening, I am shaking…

I am holding Mom's head.

Oh Jesus that feels so good… oh God, those soft lips…

I'm climbing… climbing… climbing…

… and then the shock wave hits me. I am blinded by the light. It feels like my entire soul is being sucked right out of my body and pumped out through my cock in a mighty surge of cum, a flood, and there ain't no orgasm like this, and I am just wrecked by the sheer intensity of it and I know I'm crying out loud… oh fuck, Jesus fuck, oh fuck Mom… oh fuck and I'm pumping jet after jet of cum… and I'm moaning and holding her head so tightly… and I’m vaguely aware that far away I hear gagging and spluttering but I'm coming and coming and oh fucking God there's just so much cum…and all the pent up longing and perverted hunger… all the guilt and the shame and the wrongness of it has magnified this and amplified it and I'm fucking exploding and my sperm is pumping so hard it really does hurt… and spasms are shaking me… jet after jet… then that last one, then it’s just that final dribble… and I’m done..

 

[Roleplay_Hugo_UK]

My top tip would be that the writers I enjoy choose good details and from noticing the details, we might infer the emotions or the excitement.

If I were trying to write about a handjob perhaps she’s wearing a friendship bracelet that is blue, sun bleached and frayed and tickles my balls. The ceiling has watermarks that look like clouds.

 

[Cagivagurl]

How to write an orgasm.
The answer is in the question...

 

[FrancesScott]

I think it’s best to write about the feelings experienced at orgasm. And - as mentioned above - a metaphorical approach (fires, fireworks, being bowled over by a wave) works in conjunction with reference to physical elements like muscles tensing and eyes being screwed closed. It’s about painting a picture for the reader. And it’s about something they have experienced themselves, or an analogous experience if they are not the same gender as the protagonist.

 

[AchtungNight]

Note emotions building, body movements and temperature, tension and release, fluids ejaculating, or just say they came and leave it at that.

 

[Djmac1031]

There are of course a million ways to write them, and you'll probably get a million examples here.

Ill provide one. For this one I went for less graphic, more flowery language:

With her free hand, Emily found her aching sex. Warm embers soon became a raging fire as she stoked the flames of her desire, the nerve endings of her swollen nub lit up with need like a billion candles burning.

Emily desperately tried not to rattle the bed as her fingers danced along her velvet folds, but as her passion built, that became more difficult. Her body trembled with pleasure, legs shaking, toes curled tight.

Emily buried her face in her pillow as her orgasm gripped her, trying to stifle her cries.

She sighed softly as the final waves subsided, her body now relaxed and still as she caught her breath.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Women only have orgasms in most stories written by here by men to show how amazing the male lover is.

This is exceedingly prevalent, yes.

1 ~ Hot babe Girl sees guy.
2 ~ Guy does nothing.
3 ~ Girl mounts onto guy.
4 ~ Guy provides large penis.
5 ~ Girl rides guy.
6 ~ Guy does nothing.
7 ~ Girl feeds her big tiddies to guy.
8 ~ Guy gives them a suck.
9 ~ Girl cums everywhere soaking the sheets (proving that Guy is the world's greatest lay).
10 ~ Guy cums simultaneously (because there's no way in Hades that he'd ever cum before she does, guy has perfect timing).

The guy readers all give this a 5 for its realism and hotness, but the girl readers (the real ones) back out the moment that they realize that Guy is nothing but a goddamn dildo that requires food and water. : /

Hey guys! Give us some better men, will ya?

 

[SimonDoom]

I don't think there's a trick or one particular technique for this. Bring all the senses into play. Communicate the sense of release and the sense of satisfaction that follows. Narrate all the emotions that accompany the act of making love.

 

[HordHolm]

I concur with a lot of what people are saying here, but I would also add some things to think about:

1. Environment - is there a reason to try to be quiet? Is there a reason to be noisy (e.g. my wife has a mischievous streak, and will sometimes let it all out just for the sheer fun of it)?
2. Personal factors - the same person can experience an orgasm in different ways at different times for any number of reasons, including but not limited to alcohol intake, other stimulants, having orgasmed recently, where they are on the menstrual cycle, tiredness or lack thereof, personal kinks, ongoing medical issues, and there are many, many more.
3. Who else is involved, and how people are having sex - I think most of the previous posters are (reasonably) looking at this question from a one-on-one emotional relationship perspective. And this is the predominant kind of relationship. But it isn't the only kind, and I have quite a lot of experience with situations in which some who is restrained or controlled (not in a BDSM sense) will let themselves go and, seemingly, have far stronger experiences.

These factors don't discount what people have already mentioned, but you might want to use such factors (or others I haven't thought about) to modify someone's experiences, and thus how an author might want to describe it.

 

[Dnthmn_19]

I think "OMG!" during an orgasm is BS. Personally, when I come the last person I'm thinking about is God.

 

[HordHolm]

I think "OMG!" during an orgasm is BS. Personally, when I come the last person I'm thinking about is God.

It's just an ejaculation () though, isn't it? I mean, I haven't set foot religiously in a church since I was a kid fifty years ago, but I still shout, "fookin' Jaysus H!!" if I smack a hammer on to my thumb.

 

[Djmac1031]

I think "OMG!" during an orgasm is BS. Personally, when I come the last person I'm thinking about is God.

I think "Oh my god!" is a perfectly acceptable thing to shout when something unbelievable happens.

And there's certainly plenty of unbelievable orgasms in most LE stories

 

[yowser]

His expression was similar to the ones I saw on posters of saints' faces in the window of the local Catholic bookstore.

 

[iwatchus]

I think "OMG!" during an orgasm is BS. Personally, when I come the last person I'm thinking about is God.

I think the only time I have had a character say Oh my god during orgasm, she made a crack about her catholic upbringing making a surprise reappearance shortly after.

 

[Djmac1031]

I think the only time I have had a character say Oh my god during orgasm, she made a crack about her catholic upbringing making a surprise reappearance shortly after.

from The Jenna Arrangement Pt. 22, the MMC Tom is experiencing his first double blowjob:

Both Tom and Jenna watched as Trish once again engulfed his manhood, sliding the full length up and down, base to tip, a dozen times in a row before releasing it with a trail of spit dangling from her lips.

"Jesus, Mary, Mother of God!" Tommy groaned.

Jenna laughed. "I thought you were an atheist!"

"Not tonight, darlin'. Not tonight."

 

[Husky_Embrace]

Personally I write orgasms like any other part of the story. Physical actions call emotional or mental dialogue, and emotional or mental dialogue create physical actions.

There's readers that are satisfied with just the physical actions. Describing emotional content should not distract for them. Emotion can be small.

For example, I'm currently writing a story where the protagonist hasn't has vaginal sex in a while, his current FWB not comfortable with it. They just do hand and mouth stuff.

Now he gets the chance to have vaginal sex thanks to the plot bunny. I do not just describe him going in, ramming his heart out and coating her insides with the white paint of life. The feeling means something to him (and incidentally her).

Sometimes the physical action and the emotion can be together, like "The wet embrace of her pussy was like home." (I'm just writing something fir demonstration. It's corny.) We know the physical state, he's inside her, as well as his thoughts about it, he missed it and is glad to have it back (or whatever people feel with home).

We can also separate it. "He entered her slowly, the wet embrace of her pussy tight on his cock. How he missed that feeling." Action and emotion. It has impact, allowing the reader to feel what they feel. After a long hiatus, he's finally inside a woman again. (Yes womenfolk, we're that simple in our desires.)

An orgasm isn't much different, except we're writing about something that differs from person to person. I like writing separate orgasms first if all. There's a lot happening with each orgasm and each has a different impact. Pride, disgust, love, anger... There's so much to choose from. Not to mention the physical difference in orgasms. You can make something tailored to the situation. Loud moaning orgasms, silent breath holding shaking orgasms, or maybe starting silent before they find their voice again.

All the time the process of physical and emotions. What does the orgasm mean to the person? If it's your first time lover the orgasm can represent the ultimate trust between you two, sealing it with an explosion of pleasure. Maybe they're blackmailed into it, so they might be surprised at their own orgasm, signalling how much they like it (debatable at times, but we'll go for the positive message).

I devote a paragraph or two to it. Though orgasms are not the final act of sex, especially for women, it is still a big event for most. It is the end of a build up, marking a new emotional state to which er had been building. A final release. From the orgasm we'll start towards the end of the sex, if not cut it short like so many Hollywood movies of today where X happens and everything is suddenly resolved and we'll just have a quick word or two before the final scroll.

It is weird how Hollywood even approaches the end of movies like a male fantasy. A big climax, minimal talk if at all, then sleep. I personally have had great fun with staying up and going again, so the cuddling and talking is not a bad thing to me. Give it a slow burning end, that might turn into a bonfire under the correct circumstances.

 

[Dnthmn_19]

Sometimes I like to eliminate punctuation when describing an orgasm because I think that reflects the one-after-another series of thoughts and images that I, for one, experience when coming. For example, refer to my story "My Name is Chantal." More often, though, I think it's nicer to describe the event of an orgasm without going into details like "pissing my liquid fire" or some shit like that.

 

[M_K_Babalon]

Women only have orgasms in most stories written by here by men to show how amazing the male lover is.

Ain't that kinda the point?