Would love some feedback on my first story
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dr_mabeuse
seduce the mind
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Okay smy3th, since you learned your lesson on giving feedback...
I'm really not into humiliation, male or female, but even so I thought your story was terrific fun and very well written. I mean, you could tell that John just loved every humiliating and embarrassing detail of his treatment, and it's impossible not to respond when you see someone enjoying themselves so much, no matter what their particular kink is.
The writing was very good, and I think the overall tone of the piece was just perfect: very proper and a little prissy, just like John. Plus, I could tell you had a lot of fun writing this and imagining every detail. It was very well thought out, and it moved along at just the right speed.
As I said, humiliation isn't my thing, but I still enjoyed it, so that's saying a lot. It was really delightful.
Keep it up.
---dr.M.
I'm really not into humiliation, male or female, but even so I thought your story was terrific fun and very well written. I mean, you could tell that John just loved every humiliating and embarrassing detail of his treatment, and it's impossible not to respond when you see someone enjoying themselves so much, no matter what their particular kink is.
The writing was very good, and I think the overall tone of the piece was just perfect: very proper and a little prissy, just like John. Plus, I could tell you had a lot of fun writing this and imagining every detail. It was very well thought out, and it moved along at just the right speed.
As I said, humiliation isn't my thing, but I still enjoyed it, so that's saying a lot. It was really delightful.
Keep it up.
---dr.M.
dr_mabeuse
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One or two votes per thousand views is about the average here on Literotica.
Remember that a view is not the same as a read either. Any time someone clicks on your story that counts as a view, whether they read it or not.
---dr.M.
Remember that a view is not the same as a read either. Any time someone clicks on your story that counts as a view, whether they read it or not.
---dr.M.
NoJo
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dr_mabeuse said:
Thanks for reminding us about feedbacking, Dr. I forget too, except when I have a new story up myself
As to Smy3th's story, http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=185445, I agree it was fun, but it reminded me of the stories that accompany Eric Stanton's stuff. I kept wishing there were some of his great illustrations to go along with it. The story was exactly the same mood as his illustrated story, but it was better written.
rabbitclit
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It was a good story, but I don't get into humulitating people, least of all myself. I do enjoy reading stories on this site, but I tend forget to vote on it.
blackpenblueink
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Read your story and while it's well written, it's just not my cup of tea. Thought I would respond with something positive for you though.
I am trying to get my first story on Lit, and I'm reading others to see why mine may have been rejected.
I am trying to get my first story on Lit, and I'm reading others to see why mine may have been rejected.
