Would like some feedback on the new chapter of my story!

[floralovelace]

If you havent read the first chapter you dont need to. Basically it’s a lesbian relationship with a d/s dynamic. I’d like to know peoples thoughts as well as suggestions for the next installment.

Also you might have noticed I’m very slow at updating this- any tips for writing erotica in general would be great! I find I have trouble getting “in the zone” for it and end up writing very rarely.

Here’s the story

 

[Nellymcboatface]

I read them both.
Nice coffee time reads, nice and short, to the point..
I had no issues with them...

Part 1 - she gave her belts, then spread her legs wide - but no description of what she did with the belts or how they constricted her or widened her legs ? Threw them out the window ?.. Then post sex, no description of untying / releasing her bonds..

Part 2 - I've scrabbled under desks sorting cables out and there aint the room for a women pussy licking AND a pair of knees / chair... (Maybe I've just not tried hard enough !)
None of the cubby's I've worked in have walls, just partitions to thrust her against and then everyone else in the office would notice...

I did like them both enough for 4's..

Nelly