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Hello,

I am working on a story and not sure How much of it is ok to share. If it's too long I apologize. Right now, I am trying to decide where to take the story and have several ideas. I'd love constructive feedback. Ohhh, please don't be bothered by the use of the strange upper and lower case, it is something common in online BDSM chat rooms denoting submissive in lower case and Dom/me in Upper case. I am aware it throws those not used to it off sometimes.

Thanks

Savannah

i love Savannah Georgia. It's such a beautiful small southern town, full of charm and things to do. It has bittersweet memories for me as this was where my ex and i came to spend a weekend, and how i knew this was one of my favorite places. It's a 4 hour drive which gives me plenty of time to think of being with my Mistress whom i have spent months with online. W/we know each other so well, love one another, but you know that first real time meeting is a do or die situation. Will things translate in real life as they are online?

We booked the weekend at a beautiful B&B. O/our check-in time is at 7 pm. W/we reserved the private cottage that overlooked the river. It is done up in comfortable furnishings with rich soft leather sofa's, huge king sized canopy bed, has it's own Jacuzzi and fireplace, and a cozy kitchen. It's a long drive, but i was not tired with all the anticipation of meeting Her.

I drove up and checked in to the Alexandria suite. "Enjoy your stay Ms. Brown" the front desk person said. "Thank you, it is lovely here." i replied and headed back to my car. I drove through the pristine grounds, back to the secluded area where O/our cottage was located. The azaleas were in full bloom, and the Dogwoods overlooking the cottage just added to the serenity of the place. Pulling up to the front, not seeing another vehicle, i got out and took my bag inside. The scent of roses filled me, and i inhaled deeply. There were flowers everywhere. I noticed a small round tea table with a vase on it. Setting my bag down, i walked over to it, picked up the vase that had one perfect red rose in it. Noticing the card, i picked it up and read it :

"Tomarrows are never here, and yesterdays are gone, look within My love and Feel where you are in My heart and I in yours, beating as O/one."

Tears welled up inside of me as this is where i needed to be. To feel Her love and know mine was returned likewise. Lost in thought and feeling, i was startled when i felt her behind me, pulling me back into Her. Her left arm went around my waist and her hand was on my hip pulling me back into her firm body. She pulled my head back to the side and tipped it to the right and started kissing down my neck, and flicking Her tongue. Groaning softly, She pulled me in tighter to Her and bit down. my breath sucked in sharply as i felt her biting. My knees were wobbly at this point, as She held me into Her. my mind was spinning. The smell of Her perfume tantalized me and i needed to turn around.

She must have known this and slowly turned me. She was stunning just as i had pictured. Her wavy long dark brown hair cascading over Her shoulders and down Her back. She stared into me with the deepest blue eyes i had ever seen. Just as deep and intense as my own brown eyes. W/we stared at one another for several moments. "So tell me susan, what do you think? Do you want to stay with Me this weekend?" She was very serious and wanted to know immediately if i was still attracted. "Most definately Danielle, most definately!" i smiled and felt the tension break between U/us.

I set the vase down. W/we hugged tightly, holding O/one another. W/we were much more than just a Mistress and Her sub. W/we had become lovers over the months and needed to know..... "Thank you for the rose and card Mistress"

She smiled at me, "you're welcome lil one," She said as She held my hand. Reaching behind me, She grabbed my hair, pulling my head back. my heart started beating faster, i had longed to feel U/us together for so long. She was going to take what was Hers. Kissing me deeply, ravaging my mouth with Hers, i submitted in heart and body. i needed to serve my Mistress, and these first moments would speak volumes. Pulling back from me, but still holding my hair, "Who do you belong to?" She asked. A bit breathless, i replied, "You Mistress, i am Yours." "Yes, you are mine." She said as She pressed me backwards against the bed railing, kissing me and nibbling down my neck. Her hands going up under the back of my blouse and raking Her nails across my back. i knew deep within that i was Hers. i longed for her and could feel Her desire for me pouring out of Her as a volcano about to erupt.

chapter 2

my desire for Her was clear, as my breasts ached and my nipples grew hard. She was everything i had imagined and more. She was wearing a soft black sweater that hugged her figure perfectly. i looked down and up taking all of Her in and devouring Her with my eyes. She knew i wanted Her. Talk about a fast introduction! There was no more of the jitters, W/we knew that W/we were looking into O/our souls mirror.

There was a knock on the door. She looked at me inquisitively, "Why don't you get that pet?" i went to the door and said "Hello?" "It's the porter ma'am, i have a delivery". Opening the door, seeing a young man with dark auburn hair, cut neatly, wearing a white shirt and black pants. He smiled a bit shyly "May I bring in the cart Ma'am?" I was a bit curious what he had, "Sure, come on in umm??" "It's Brandon Ma'am." "Yes, come in Brandon."

He pulled in a cart that had two buckets of Ice, and several bottles of champagne and wine, a fruit basket, and a bowl of whipped cream. Danielle spoke up then, "Ah Brandon, just as I requested, thank you." She tipped him a twenty which he obvoiusly appreciated and blushed a bit saying "Thank you Ma'am, enjoy!" Then he left quietly.

"Would You like some Champagne Mistress?" i asked. "Yes pet, that would be lovely. Pour yourself a glass too," She said as She stretched and looked out the window over the private garden behind O/our cottage.

i opened the bottle of Perrier-Jouët Cuvée Belle Epoque 1996, a very fine bottle of Champagne. It was chilled to perfection and ready to pour. Taking the flutes, i poured two glasses placed them on the tray and carried them to Her. Mistress was still at the window, and turned slowly as i approached. She was watching me closely. Stopping just a a foot before Her, i kneeled and lifted the silver tray up to Her, "Your Champagne Mistress."

i felt so nervous as i had never served in person before, and this was very new to me. Looking down at me, She stroked my hair, reached out and took the flute. "Thank you pet, you did very well. Please stand and join me on the deck." Opening the french doors, She led me down into O/our own private paradise. There was a high wall around the garden to keep out prying eyes. It was beautiful, done in an English garden style with a miriad of flowers and colors. Just the hum of the occaisional bumble bee, and red Cardinal calling to it's mate. i walked over to the edge looking out at the river. She came up behind me and softly put Her arm around my waste gently pulling me back a little. i leaned back and rested against her. Kissing my neck again, Her breath so hot against my skin, i shuddered inside, feeling the electricity flowing through me. Sipping the champagne, i turned to face Her.

"would You like to walk with me by the river Danielle?" i asked and smiled at Her. "That would be nice, love." We finished O/our glasses, set them down on the small table by rose garden, and walked out the back gate and down the winding path of live oaks and dogwoods down to the river. As W/we walked down, She reached out and took my hand. There was such a connection between U/us. W/we walked a little further to a small clearing. Looking at each other, W/we moved at the same time and hugged each other, resting O/our heads on the other's shoulder. "God, it is so good to hold You, Danielle" i said as i stroked Her hair. i could feel Her smile as She said, "Yes, it is good to know there is so much between U/us in person too." We looked at each other, staring deeply, not breaking eye contact then kissed and explored as O/our tongues danced.

my passion was peaking as was Hers. "Let's go back now pet, it's time to enjoy O/ourselves." Danielle said and gave me such a wicked grin.

Chapter 3

We walked back up the trail slowly. Danielle took my hand and held it. There was such energy between U/us. "Are you nervous lil' one?" Danielle asked. i had to think for a moment, and check my feelings. i was so happy to finally be with Her, but i knew there was some nervousness. Would i please Her? Would She find me attractive? Would i be able to obey Her? What would happen? i knew i was very attracted to her, and the yearning i felt cascade through me as W/we kissed or touched was more than evident within me. "i'm hoping that i please You Mistress. i am very happy to be here with You." i said as confidently as i could.

Laughing softly, Danielle replied, "Oh, you do please me susan, and i am happy with you! Your beautiful, and very easy to be with." i felt a bit of relief flow through me. W/we reached the gate and walked into O/our small bit of paradise. i picked up O/our champagne flutes, "Would You care for some more Champagne Mistress?"

"Yes, that would be nice, thank you." She said, watching me go back into the cottage. i poured two more glasses, added a sliced strawberry dipped in sugar to each and returned. Mistress had seated herself in a cozy spot on a comfortable chair on the deck. "Here You are Mistress, is there anything else i can get for You?"

"Drink your champagne and undress for Me." Mistress replied, crossing Her legs and getting comfortable. I felt myself go red, and took half the glass in one drink. "Yes, Mistress." Feeling nervous now, i went ahead and drank the rest of my glass, and noticed Danielle smile. She knew i was on the spot and was enjoying watching my inner turmoil. "NOW, pet would be a good time."

"Ye..Yes Mistress" i said and took a deep breath, mustering my courage. If She wanted to see me, then i was going to put on a show." i unzipped my boots and kicked them off to the side. i created a song in my head and started moving to the seductive music, my hips moving side to side slowly in a casual figure 8, much like a belly dancer does. i locked eyes with Danielle's and slowly turned around as my hands went up my body very slowly, caressing my tummy and breasts, i watched Her, and felt Her desire beginning to peak. As i turned fully around i had undone the first 2 buttons on my blouse, and moved to the third, then fourth. Spreading my blouse open, revealing a lace soft pink bra, then tracing my hands back downwards over my hips as they swayed slowly, tantalizing Her. Licking my lips, a soft smile began, and my eyes simmered, i wanted Her. Undoing the last buttons, i danced closer to Mistress and moved side to side, my head going back and eyes closed as i caressed my skin and let my blouse fall. Arching my back slightly and feeling O/our energy beginning to mix i felt as if She were moving with me, directing me now.

i continued to reveal myself, and my willingness to please Her. Unbuttoning my pants i unzipped them slowly as my hips rotated, and slid them down with each movement, and stepped out of them, revealing a matching soft pink thong. I turned and danced in front of Her, letting Her take in all of Her property. I slowly turned back to my Mistress, who was now standing and looking me dead in the eye. "Very nice pet," She said and licked Her lips. Now undress Me.

Chapter 4

There is nothing quite like being a Mistress, and watching My girl turned me on more than she knew! I had arrived an hour and half earlier than she did, and set things up for the weekend. I parked my corvette out of the way so she would not know I was there and also so I could watch her when she entered.

Leaving strick instructions for Brandon to deliver the items I ordered only after susan arrived, I sat in a corner area not easily seen and waited. Had a few drinks and relaxed a bit. Hearing her drive up set my nerves on edge. What would she be like in person? Would she still like Me and want to stay? No sense in wasting time, I would know very soon!

Just as I planned, she walked in and zeroed in on the vase. Giving her just enough time to read the card, I walked up slowly and pulled her to me. I pulled her back firmly, taking control and tasting her sweet tender skin. Mmmm, licking down her neck to that soft spot just at the curve, she was Mine and knew it as I bit down. I pulled her tighter as her knees got weak and a soft moan came from my pet. she would be pliable in My hands, and that is what I demand. Not to destroy, but mold and smooth rough edges bringing out the truly gorgeous feminine soul within My submissive.

Nothing would be hidden between U/us. Turning her slowly, W/we locked eyes seeing deeply within one another. W/we were both pleased at what was before U/us. There is time to get comfortable, this will not be rushed. I will savour her, use her, and own her before the weekend is through. she will be Mine willingly. O/our dance will flow naturally, and she knows what I expect in many ways already. She is simply beautiful in all ways, some she doesn't even know yet.

The walk down to the river was pleasent, and a good way to loosen up from the long drive. I wanted her from the moment I saw her, and once O/our energy was clear, it was time to go back to the cottage.

Taking a sip of the champagne, very nice not too dry, "Undress pet" I ordered. Knowing this would stir her up, I will watch her process My order, and decide what to do, she will reveal more than her body. Sitting back, I see the action is about to begin. Hmmm, she will put on a show for Me. Her movements draw me in, as she touches her body, and rotates her hips seductively, mmmmm what a slut I have, very nice. she is not going to rush this either, I'm not bidding on a piece of meat, no, this is time to savour what is already MINE. As her blouse comes off, I see a soft body, and breasts covered by a lovely pink bra. She is soft but strong. She moves with grace portraying her desire and submission, but with control.

Then as she slides down her pants, revealing muscular legs and an ass that is begging to be touched, moving closer to me, teasing me, I wait. That soft white skin will have plenty of My marks before the night is through. I stand, looking into her eyes, "Very nice pet, now undress Me," I order.

"Start with my top slut" I said as I stared into her eyes. Moving closer to me, she reached for my sweater hem and slipped her hands under the edge, moving them around My waist, her breath was shallow and softly a pant escaped from her lovely mouth. Pulling her into Me as she started to raise the sweater, I claimed her mouth, grasped a handful of her golden hair. I explored her mouth, flicking My tongue over hers, feeling her entire mouth, and pulled her hard, taking her breath and possessed her, bending her back, owning, using and taking what I wanted. My pet gave willingly, softly and hungrily. Releasing her mouth, "Lift my blouse pet," you may touch Me.

Left breathless, i was dazed, and lost in Mistess' touch, control and desire. i pulled upward and lifted Her blouse off, making sure not to drag it over Her face. i couldn't help but let a small moan escape as i saw Her beauty. She was not wearing a bra. She had a perfect set of 38 C breasts. Cupping them softly, i caressed around them, dragging my palms over Her chest, and down her tummy, Mistress moaned and put Her hands around my shoulders, played with my hair. i pressed in softly feeling O/our connection. The heat building up between U/us set off a fire inside of me, radiating down my chest and into my clit. i was quivering with desire. i wanted Her, felt an insatiable need to feed and taste on this bounty before me.

Mistress smiled at me, showing such an openess to Her core. Eyes are the mirror to the soul, and O/ours were open, feeling the hunger and need like a sweet ache, or when one is parched from crossing the desert and sees water... the craving consumes and nothing else matters. She grabbed my hand, "pet follow Me inside."

Walking inside, i had to let my eyes adjust a moment as it was so bright outside. It was cooler in here, but was about to get very hot. "Light the four candles on the table next to the bed pet," Mistress said.

"Yes, Mistress" i said as i went over to the table and saw the six inch tall pillar candles. They were about 2 inches wide and appeared to be the kind you can only buy from BDSM stores. They don't burn as hot, or are designed to burn at various heats. i lit the candles and turned to face Danielle.

She was gorgeous. "Take off your bra and thong," she said in a commanding tone. Her energy had shifted and She was in full Domme mode. i reached behind me and undid the clasp and slid the bra off. my breasts ached with desire and my nipples were hard. i wanted to touch them, but dared not do anything other than i was told. Sliding my fingers into the front of my thong, i slid them slowly around to the side, enjoying the feeling and watching Mistress' focus. Her blue eyes sparkled and burned with desire as i slid the thong down and took it off.

Mistress was standing near the fireplace about 10 feet from me. "Come here pet," She ordered. i walked over and just as i got about 3 feet from Her, She said, "Stop, and kneel before Me."

i kneeled down on the oriental rug, thankful it was soft. Bending down to me, She held my face, looked into my eyes and moved in slowly. i felt Her breath on my ear and Her lips barely touching me as they traced over my neck and jaw. Her hands moving slowly in my hair so seductively, holding me there. Then tracing Her fingers over my jaw and lips, sighing softly my lips parted slightly. Her lips touched mine as She watched me, and pressed increasingly harder, pulling me upwards slightly as Her tongue barely touched my lips, teasing me. Pulling me suddenly to Her, She took my mouth with such intensity. Sliding Her tongue in claiming my mouth as Her own, ravaging it, then sucking and biting my lip. Arching my back, moaning and needing Her, the pain was a sweet agony.

"What are you, susan" She asked. "i am Your pet and slut Mistress, Your property." i said and felt it in the deepest part of my soul. "Yes, you are Mine, and I am yours as well." "Hold out your wrist, slut," She demanded. i held out my wrist, and looked into Her eyes. She took a leather cuff from the table and strapped it to my wrist, buckled it down so that it was very snug. "Now, the other," She demanded. Again, She bound my wrist in a leather cuff very snuggly. "Mistress is very pleased with Her slut," She said to me and smiled. The kind of smile that says "I'm pleased, and I'm going to devour you."

The cuffs felt like i was being held, controlled even though they were not attached to anything. Danielle, reading my thoughts, "Oh, you are Mine susan, and will be for a long time!" Those words went through me as if She had grabbed my heart and slid downward teasing and taking me. The ache within was growing. The sheer need to be with this woman, my Mistress.

Mistress watched me closely, then slowly unbuttoned Her tight jeans, and unzipped them. Sliding them down Her body and stepping out, revealing a black thong. Still on my knees, i just looked up at Her, not daring to move. She slid Her fingers into the thong and rubbed Her clit, watching me as She continued to pleasure Herself, knowing it was driving me crazy. Groaning, and filled with lust, all i could do was watch. Sliding in and out slowly, i could only think of that parched desert traveller, wanting to drink, and drink my fill. Smiling, Mistress removed her hand and licked Her fingers slowly.

"Remove My thong with your mouth slut," She commanded. Crawling the few feet to Her, i moved up Her legs, my mouth almost touching Her. Pressing my breasts into Her thighs as i leaned into Her, and used my tongue at the top of the thong to get a good grasp with my teeth. Grabbing it in the middle, i pulled downward and moved my face side to side nuzzling into Her pelvis. She spread Her legs as i moved down. Her scent was driving me wild!

i groaned as i reached Her mound and moved my chin back and forth. i felt Her heat and wetness as i pressed in and moved downward. Gathering more of the thong i pulled downward and moved to the left and right equally down Her legs. Mistress placed Her hands on my shoulders and stepped out of the thong, and i layed it to the side.

My pet is a very able seductrice herself, and I enjoyed watching her work My thong. Having her remove it with her mouth, drove My hunger, and I knew I would use her for My pleasure immensely! I grabbed her, "Serve me well, slut," I said and pulled her into My cunt. She braced her hands on the sides of My thighs as I held her face to me. Spreading My legs, I rode her mouth hard, as her tongue slid up and down the full length of Me. "Mmmmmm, Yesssssss slut, harder" I said and felt her tongue sliding in and out as I moved over her face, riding and using her. I reached with one hand and dug My nails up her back, scratching until I could feel her crying into Me from the pain, she ate me harder and took My clit into her mouth, flicking it with her tongue.

Knowing I had a very obedient slut, I knew she would not take liberties but only do as commanded, "you may use your hands slut." At that pronouncement, I heard a delicious groan come from her and her fingers spread My lips and slid into Me.

To finally be touching Mistress opened a floodgate of desire in me, as She pulled me into Her. i was barely staying in control of my passion as i licked Her beautiful cunt. Letting my tongue feel all of Her folds and tasting, i could feel the energy increasing between U/us. Holding me to Her drove me to the edge as i slipped my tongue in and out and sucked on Her clit, while She gyrated Her hips and rode me hard. Panting, i sucked and pulled on Her hood as Her nectar flowed over my face, like a hungry animal i could not get enough! i cried out into Her as She dug Her nails into me. The pain driving me harder, to feed from Her and take what She was offering to me. Finally hearing i could use my hands set a new level of excitement as i spread Her lips and slid two fingers up inside of Her stroking Her spot. Her velvet folds squeezed my fingers as i slid them in and out, pumping and serving Her. Mistress' breathing and panting came quicker as She started to moan. i focused on Her clit and pumping my fingers in and out harder and harder, needing to feel Her cumming. "Yesssssssssssssss," She cried out and started to cum, pulling me into Her with both hands as She flowed over me. my tongue lapping at Her lips as She covered me; i drank all She gave.

She pulled away from me, and looked into my eyes. She was definately not finished by a long shot. "Get my strap on slut and put it on Me," She commanded and i held it for Her to step into. Still on my knees, i slid it up and fastened it tightly. Grabbing my cuffs, She took me to the bed, "Put your hands around the post," She commanded. i obeyed and She fastened them together by their "D" rings.

Grabbing my long blonde hair, She pulled me back until i was arching and kissed me. The kiss deepened as O/our tongues moved together while She played with my breasts, rubbing them back and forth, pinching the nipples. Her mouth over mine, taking my breath and cries of pain and pleasure. "What are you?" She asked.

"i am Your property Mistress, Your slut and lover," i replied. She pinched my nipple harder and stared into my eyes, listening to my moans, as Her other hand stroked up my thigh and ass. Teasing me and seeing that glazed look of passion and lust. She kissed down my neck as She continued to tease me, dragging Her nails over my ass and sliding Her fingers between my legs, grazing my pussy back and forth. She licked my neck and continued touching me, hearing my wimpers of desire, "Yes, you are Mine susan," She said as pulled my hair, exposing my neck and bit into me. That oh so sensual spot that nearly drives me to my knees.

Without my knowing or being prepared, She had taken a flogger and as She was biting me, began to strike my thighs with the flogger. It was a soft deer skin flogger, but don't let the "soft" fool you. The sting was very real. Each strike felt like 15 electric shocks going through me. i flinched at the first strike and felt the heat go through me. Holding my hair still, She watched me as She continued to strike, changing the timing so i could not prepare myself.

"Face the post slut," She commanded and moved into a stronger position and struck me quickly. "What do you say to Mistress, slut?" She asked. "Thank You Mistress," WHACK, WHACK, WHACK against my legs making me spread them farther, "Thank YOU MISTRESS" i cried out. my ass was burning, WHACK.... the sting flooding me as She moved it up higher, "THANK YOU MISTRESS," panting and getting lost in the sensations, i cried out. She got behind me and pushed into me, pressing Her breasts into me as She moved behind me. Her hands caressing my breasts and sliding down my sides pulling me hard back to Her as She continued to grind and lick up my back, stopping just at my tattoo that is over my heart chakkra.

"OOOOHHHH GODDESSSSSSSSS, MISTRESSSSSS," i moaned as She continued to assault me with Her mouth and tongue. Standing back up, i suddenly felt more and more lashes of the flogger, until i lost myself in the pain and ecstasy of Her touches. Arching my back quickly as i felt the heat change, the intensity of which i had never experienced as hot wax flowed over my burning ass and down my thighs. Spreading my cheeks a little, She grabbed another candle and let it flow all down me as it flowed over my lips the heat was sublime. She layered it on over the other wax, and as i was clean shaven, had not difficulty clearing any She wanted to remove.

i held onto the post, and let myself go to my Mistress. The hidden layers were falling away, emotional walls that were there were missing now, as She took me deeper in the sensations. Then i felt Her hands on my hips, and the strap on sliding back and forth along my pussy. "Spread your legs bitch, NOW," She commanded and i obeyed. She teased my hot pussy with the tip of the huge strap She had chosen. It was about 8 inches long and 3 inches around, and i was keenly aware of it as She pushed back and forth, letting about two inches slide in then pulling back out. Slapping my ass hard, "Spread your legs slut! NOW" She commanded and i spread them more. "I want to have a very good look as this monster goes in and out of you," She said with a tone of both amusement and pleasure. "Yes, Mistress...." i said and then She pushed all the way in, pulling me back by my hair as Her hips moved back and forth. She pushed my head lower, and wrapped Her other arm around me, fucking me while teasing my nipples. Moans were coming from me unchecked at this point, "Mmmmm, Yes pet, I want to hear you beg me. You will beg me to let you cum and then you will beg me to stop making you cum," She laughed and bit my shoulder as She continued to tease me, moving down to my clit and stroking me, sliding along the edge of my clit back and forth, faster and faster. "Ooooooh Goddddddd MISTRESSSSSS" i cried out as my panting became harder and harder.

She back from me and held my hips and drove into me harder and harder, pulling me back, as i moved freely with Her. i held onto the post and arched my back, "PLEASE MISTRESS," I CRIED. "Please what slut," She asked. "PLEASE LET YOUR SLUT CUM MISTRESS," i begged. "Oh, not yet slut, not yet," She said and laughed, letting me know what a ride this would be. "Not until I say so, susan."

i groaned deeply and my moans became more gutteral as She continued to fuck me harder and harder. "Whose are you susan?" Mistress asked. "i am Yours Mistress," i replied quickly. my pussy quivered and started spasming as i felt an orgasm about to hit me...."Ooohhhhhh GODDDDDDD.... MISTRESSSSSSS !!!!!! PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEE," i cried out, and She slammed into me harder and harder, "NOOOO, slut, don't you dare cum yet," Mistress replied. She pulled out and stopped. i was barely able to control myself. Panting hard, my body elecrified from deep within, knowing i was Hers.

Mistress unclasped my wrists. "Get on the bed pet," She said as She removed the strap-on. "Spread your legs for me, NOW," She commanded. i obeyed and O/our eyes locked. Sliding up over me, Her leg between mine, She looked down, "Put your hands up against the rail pet," She commanded. I put my hands up there, and She clasped the "D" rings to a hook She had already fixed there. She pulled out pair of clamps. These are the kind that dial down and have a chain between them. She smiled and took one of my hard nipples and closed a clamp over it, turning the screw tighter and tighter, listening to my moans and finally "aaaaaahh, GODDESSS..." i cried out. "That's it, that is the perfect tightness,"She replied and put on the other clamp. She pulled the chain up, "Open your mouth slut," She said. She put the chain in my mouth, "Now hold it there, and be careful how much you move or it will hurt!"

My tits were hurting, but that soon changed to intense ecstacy as Mistress started to grind Her mound into mine. Arching Her back, Her long brown hair falling to the side and over me as W/we moved together. Soft moans joined together as W/we lost O/ourselves in this dance. i arched my back in ecstacy and felt the sharp pain flood through me from the clamps, "AAAAHHH, MMMMMMM" bringing my head down a little, but needing the intensity again, i arched and didn't care about the pulling. "Mmmmm, My pet likes the pain," Mistress said as She smiled down at me. i held the chain in my teeth and moved with Her. i was peaking again, and wanted to cum. "Not yet pet," She said and drove into me harder, shifting to the side a little and sliding her fingers into me, driving me harder and harder. my groans were louder and i could not stop. "Ride My hand slut, you want this so badly now," She commanded and my hips bucked and moved hard against Her."

"Yessss, pet," She said as She slid her whole hand up and fisted me!" Ohhh god i love fisting, and She did it very well, pulling her hand almost all the way out and sliding it back in, over and over, then pumping harder and harder. i was pulling at the cuffs, and arching my back..."Now slut, cum NOW !" She commanded and fucked me harder as i rode faster, the orgasm hit me and i pulled so hard biting down that the clamps ripped off my nipples sending pain searing through me, the ecstacy was more than I had ever felt!

Mistress continued to fuck me, using two fingers now and reached over and grabbed another candle and poured the wax over my chest and nipples. The heat was wonderful and quickly changed the intense pain from the clips to a warm soothing heat. She continued to slide in and out of me. "Pull your legs up slut!" She commanded. "More, keep them out of My way," She demanded as She positioned herself between my legs and had a two way strapless dildo in Her. She pushed in hard, bracing Herself over me. "Ohhhh, Yessssss, fuckkkkkkkk.... " i cried out and pulled on the cuffs. She pumped back and forth, looking me in the eyes the whole time. W/we were panting together, going deeply within one another. i felt Her energy flowing and knew She was about to cum. "aaaahhh, AHH.... AAAHHH" i was panting and moaning in a higher pitch, needing to release. "Yes pet, cum with Me Now, " She told me, and looking into each other eyes W/we joined and melded into O/one spirit, a Mistress and Her submissive. W/we both started cumming together and focused deeply within O/one another until the ecstacy took U/us higher and higher as O/our back arched and W/we howled and moved in primal instincts. Grinding harder against each other, equals, moving together and needing that oneness... W/we came again and again, until we had fed from one another and were spent.

Mistress undid my clasp and cuffs. She then took lotion and rubbed it on my nipples so gently. Caring for me and making sure i was ok. The pain had dissipated, but the effects within are lasting. i was in a state of bliss, as She lay down and pulled me to her. W/we rested in complete peace the rest of the night, as She held me close and caressed me. i had never known such peace.



i slept blissfully next to my Mistress. At some point though i heard a sound, low and muffled. Normally a heavy sleeper, i opened my eyes and listened. Mistress had Her arm over my tummy, so i lay there and just listened. It sounded like a girl whispering. The hair on the back of my neck stood up, i knew this feeling. W/we were not alone, and now i had to decide if i really wanted to investigate.

Taking a deep breath, calming myself, i knew i could not let this go, for we scorpios are just way to curious. So, i gently slid out of bed. The room was dark except for the full moonlight coming in through the french doors and cascading over near the fireplace and mirror in the corner.

my eye caught something, a glimmer or maybe a shadow. i felt myself pulled to that area of the room, and as i moved, my legs felt like they were pulling through tar, a very dense energy, slightly cold, was in here. It was then i saw her in the mirror starring back at me. My own reflection on the left of the tall full length mirror and hers on the right, in a white nightgown. She looked to be in her mid-thirties, as her hair cascaded down her back, a long rich red mane, and deep green eyes.

It was like two guests surprised the other noticed them starring, jaws gaping open, "hello" i said, and watched her expression change into amazement. "Oh my god, you can see me! YOU CAN SEE ME!!!" She exclaimed. i nodded, "Well, quite frankly, you woke me up with all your whispering and such, so yeh, i can see you," i said with a slight mischevious grin. i knew she must be reeling at being noticed and have so much to say, they always do.

"What's your name?" i asked.

Standing there, still amazed, her eyes looked upward to her left, like she was trying to remember or think of a response, "I'm... I'm Jessica,"she replied, and looked at me inquisitively like i were some exotic creature. "Well, nice to meet you, Jessica, i'm susan," i replied.

Mistress turned in Her warm covers, and continued to sleep while i stood in the corner whispering to a mirror. God, She is going to think i have lost what little mind i have if She wakes up and sees this! "So, have you been here long Jessica?" i asked, wondering what all she was privy to seeing. "Ohhhh, you mean did i see you two going at it?" was her reply. "Yeh, i guess if you want to cut to the chase i wanted to know that." was my retort. But based on her answer i knew she had and enjoyed the show!

"Umm, why are you in a mirror Jessica?" i asked as most ghosts tend to just appear to me, and only a few, usually very very lost or evil spirits hung out in mirrors. i have an uncanny sensitivity to mirrors, and tend to not enjoy one's that are "portals" for spirits, unless i am calling them.

"Susan, i don't know why but i travelled here somehow and just found myself in this mirror. I was pulled here earlier today, by some unknown force, and have been quietly watching all day." she said and slowly smiled a bit of a mischevious grin herself.

"i see," i said, and didn't let on, but the hairs on my body were standing straight up as if something more were laying in wait. i hate that feeling! It's like i want to be armed like Rambo for when all hell breaks loose and i am standing stark naked instead. Something about the woman seemed so compelling to me, but i just didnt know what it was. i didnt even know what time period she was from. But, i was incredibly drawn to her, and felt i knew her inside and out.

"i don't know what to say, Jessica, but if there is anything i can do to help you, i will try. i have helped many cross over before," i said and she cut me off,"NO, I am not going anywhere!" Her eyes grew darker and her aura burned brighter as if a switch had been turned on somewhere. "Ok, ok Jessica, i was just saying that i have, and if that is what you need i would try to help. Sometimes there is something else though that keeps someone locked in between worlds."

Her expression grew very stern, "I don't know why I came here, I was just drawn today, as I said. And no one has ever talked to me as you are, well those in your realm anyway." I nodded as this was not uncommon for ghosts to be competely unaware of people around them still in the physical world. There was an undeniable attraction i felt towards her and it was disturbing me. Thinking to myself, "What the hell is going on here? Goddess, please let me be dreaming."

The bed was so cozy and warm, my sleep so deep that when i awoke to Mistress' touch, and and my moaning deeply, i could feel Her all through me. Kissing up my stomach, She settled between my legs and covered me with Her body. "Mmmmmm, good morning pet,"She said and smiled down at me. Rocking her body over mine, i felt her pushing into me, feeling my need and hunger. "Oh God baby, I want you now," She said, and moved to Her knees, spreading my legs further. It was then, that i noticed i was cuffed again, my arms above my head. Pulling on the locked cuffs, i groaned, knowing She would have me any way She chose, and this in turn caused my pussy to quiver. "Mmmmmmm, Yes pet, you are securely held, you are Mine!" and She thrust Her very wet hand deep into me, causing me to gasp and cry out. Her breasts moved beautifully with each thrust. i was climbing higher and higher, needing Her, needing U/us. "Ohh Goddddd Mistress" i gasped and pleaded with Her. She reached over next to me and grabbed a large dildo, removing her hand, she coated it with my juices and slid it into me slowly, making me feel every inch of it. "Mmmmm, now you will service Me, and you will not cum until I say so pet, understood?" She smiled at me, and waited for my acknowledgement. "Yes Mistress, i got out in a half groan and half whimper."

Turning with Her back to me, She positioned Herself over my face. She pushed the dildo deep in me and as i gasped, and lowered Herself down to my face and rode my mouth. Mistress groaned and growled at me, taking me and using me for Her pleasure. "OHHHHH God," i felt so consumed as i sucked and lapped at Her swollen clit, pleasuring Her, needing to serve her. She slammed the dildo in back and forth knowing She was driving me hard, as my hips bucked and i moaned into Her, my arms stretched above my head, bound by Her, and feeling each gasp, She knew She owned me, with each cry i expressed, She possessed me a little more. "AAAahhhhh, Yesssss, She arched and rode me harder, leaving the buzzing vibe deep in me and pushed against my clit, "Squeeze your legs slut, dont let that vibe slip, and She rode my face, hearing my moans and labored breaths.... "Ohhh GODDDDDDDD, NOW SLUT, CUM FOR ME NOW!" and as She said this, i bit down on Her clit, sucking and pulling hearing Her howl in delirious pleasure as a wave of passion, lust and true submission flowed through me and i exploded in orgasm with Her. Arching my back, unable to stop, She continued to ride me but bent down and thrust the dildo in deeper and W/we moved together riding the waves and going higher and higher. Both of U/us cried out in one final climax of surrender to one anothers needs.

A scent of Roses filled the room for a moment, and i inhaled deeply. i thought the door to the patio was open and maybe a breeze had carried it in, but it hadn't. Mistress and i lay there together for a while. W/we eventually got up, must have been around noon by then. "Let's go down to the shops for a walk hun," Mistress said. "Ok, sounds good to me," and i got out of bed and showered. i had this uneasy feeling of not being alone, but didn't think too much of it. The dream from the night before was lost in the mornings lovemaking.
 
Dear Tempsbrat,

On the Story Dicsussion Forum (this forum), there is a give-before-you-get system and a queue. That is, before your story is reviewed, you must first comment upon the works of two other posted authors. After that, you post to the "Feedback and review of stories" sticky thread (top thread on this forum) to take your place in line to be reviewed. ScarlettWings is the next author up for review; if you'd like to be reviewed yourself, you might comment on ScarlettWings' piece and one other, then post on the sticky to reserve a place for your story.

If you'd prefer not to review and wait for a turn, you can also use the Story Feedback Forum. There, you can do precisely what you've done here - post immediately and hope for response.

Shanglan
 
Thanks Shanglan,

I will most certainly do that. I didn't mean to cut in line. I just saw other's post their stories. I can remove mine if I should. I will comment on 2 others happily.
 
I'm sure no one will hold a little slip like that against you - not when you've been so charming and swift in correcting it :).

Shanglan
 
Thanks for the understanding Shanglan. I reposted my story to the other board, but don't see how to delete it here. I'd love some critique, but not at another authors expense.

Ravenmoon
 
BlackShanglan said:
I'm sure no one will hold a little slip like that against you - not when you've been so charming and swift in correcting it :).

Shanglan

Speak for yourself. You aren't the one she cut in front of.

::hee hee:: :nana:

Just kidding.

I'm assuming Sunday is the day?
 
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