Words that Don't Belong on Lit

dr_mabeuse

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chuckle

Right down there with Wake up, sleepy-head!

Nothing breaks the mood of an erotic story like reading about someone chuckling. I don't even care if it's an obscene or lewd chuckle, it just doesn't belong. Anyhow, does anyone really chuckle anymore? (he asks with a chuckle)

Laugh, snort, grimace...okay. Maybe even chortle. But please, no more fucking chuckling.

---dr.M.
 
I hear Grimace and I think big, purple thing...

No chuckling? Damn. As it were, my characters chuckle an awful lot. Not during sex, mind you, but rather when they're conversing. I just can't come up with a better word to quickly describe when someone vocally acknowledges something as funny, quirky or clever. Like when you keep your mouth closed but make a muffled, but quick, laugh. Kind of like chortling, but sedated and not carried out.

You can only smile at something so many times before you become suspect.

I nominate 'poo'. Scat, shit, feces, crud, dung and dump are all better and more striking. I don't much care for scat as it were, but I imagine "... she wiped her shit all over my face..." has a better effect than "... she wiped her poo all over my face...".

:eek:
 
"chortle" was coined by Lewis Carroll. It was one of his "portmanteau" words -- a munging together of two ordinary words. He descibed "chortle" as a cross between "chuckle" and "snort".
 
"Smirk" blows a scene for me, too. It seems too high-handed and arrogant. For someone to smirk at a person they're trying to seduce or considering as a potential sex partner...it tells me that that someone has far too high a regard for self and too low esteem for the intended.
 
P.S. "Chuckle" can be nice in an avuncular way :) I mean, if that's the sex scene you're trying to write.
 
I got completely trolled for using the word "condom" in what I think is one of my best stories.

It brought out a Pavlovian reaction in the Pro-Lifers.
 
Sub Joe said:
I got completely trolled for using the word "condom" in what I think is one of my best stories.

It brought out a Pavlovian reaction in the Pro-Lifers.

What did those pro-lifers have against condoms?
 
well, Mercy, I kept one of the email threads for a while. I tried to enter a correspondence with one of those people, to understand him.

His first feedback email simply said "Use a rubber, get a 1 vote". But he did leave an email addy, so I replied, genuinely puzzled (I forget how varied the readership of Lit is, culturally and politically).

By the third email he was talking about the Old Testament and Original Sin. He also objected to anal sex, becuase you couldn't make babies that way.

The basic idea is that sex is about procreation, which God doesn't want you to mess with. Spilling seed, ass fucking, using rubbers are like murder. I'll let you decide if these people are crazy or not.
 
"Giggle"
This word just rubs me the wrong way. There is a big-time writer on other forums whose name sounds something like Frank Downey. All of his characters 'giggle'.

I've never giggled. I would be embarrassed to giggle. I don't have any acquaintances that giggle. If somebody giggled at me, I would send them back to 2nd grade.

In the 1930's screwball comedies there was usually an obligatory middle-aged rich woman who displayed her vacuousness by giggling.

I am so adamant about this that in one of my stories I said of the female leads "she never giggles". Perhaps I have an anti-giggle fetish.


Stories by thebullet where the characters don't giggle
 
Personally, I don't care what words bust your buisquets. Characters are portraying people, and people do all kinds of things including, giggling, chuckling, snickering, burping, or whatever. We are wordsmiths here, and we use the words that best help develope our characters in the eyes of the readers who read our stories. I've known sofisticated, highly intelligent ladies who giggle their asses off if the occassion requires it of them. And that's in real life. And I know way too many men who still chuckle, snicker, grin, and even spit. If we owe anything to the reader it's that we make the characters in our stories real to them. Whether or not we distain the use of certain words.

As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man
 
Hmph. I have characters that chuckle and giggle all the time, when I actually realise that's not exactly what I want them to do, only something similar, and that the words carry silly stereotypes with them. The problem is that I dson't know how to expand my vocabulaty to include good words for the kind of laughter I'm after.

What should I do, record sound samples and post them here, so that you good folks can identify them for me? "Oh yes, that's a chortle fer sure, kiddo."

But really, what's the fuss? If used right, there should be no problem with giggle. If the character is Little Miss Infatile Bimbo Girl, let her giggle fer chrissake. :)

/Ice
 
thebullet said:
"Giggle"
This word just rubs me the wrong way.

My biggest grump about "giggle" and"giggling" is tht it's far too often used when "Jiggle" and "jiggling" is meant.

I can deal with characters who giggle, but Idraw the lines at "giggling" breasts and buns.:p
 
Weird Harold said:
My biggest grump about "giggle" and"giggling" is tht it's far too often used when "Jiggle" and "jiggling" is meant.

I can deal with characters who giggle, but Idraw the lines at "giggling" breasts and buns.:p
...unless the story is placed in the Non-Human category.

...or we're dealing with one helluva ventriloquist.

/Ice
 
Sub Joe said:
The basic idea is that sex is about procreation, which God doesn't want you to mess with. Spilling seed, ass fucking, using rubbers are like murder. I'll let you decide if these people are crazy or not.


Religious extremists are trying to remove safe sex from pornography?

God is chuckling.

My head hurts.
 
Dirt Man said:
Personally, I don't care what words bust your buisquets. Characters are portraying people, and people do all kinds of things including, giggling, chuckling, snickering, burping, or whatever. We are wordsmiths here, and we use the words that best help develope our characters in the eyes of the readers who read our stories. I've known sofisticated, highly intelligent ladies who giggle their asses off if the occassion requires it of them. And that's in real life. And I know way too many men who still chuckle, snicker, grin, and even spit. If we owe anything to the reader it's that we make the characters in our stories real to them. Whether or not we distain the use of certain words.

As Always
I Am the
Dirt Man

Amen to that! :rose:

- Mindy
 
Personally, I don't care what words bust your buisquets. Characters are portraying people, and people do all kinds of things including, giggling, chuckling, snickering, burping, or whatever. We are wordsmiths here, and we use the words that best help develope our characters in the eyes of the readers who read our stories. I've known sofisticated, highly intelligent ladies who giggle their asses off if the occassion requires it of them. And that's in real life. And I know way too many men who still chuckle, snicker, grin, and even spit. If we owe anything to the reader it's that we make the characters in our stories real to them. Whether or not we distain the use of certain words.

Hey man, lighten up! I was just adding a touch of light humor to the debate here. Sorry if I yanked your chain.:rolleyes:
 
thebullet said:
Hey man, lighten up! I was just adding a touch of light humor to the debate here. Sorry if I yanked your chain.:rolleyes:

I could be wrong, bullet, and hope DirtMan corrects me if I am, but I think he was replying to the thread as a whole and not just your post. I didn't read it as a personal response.

:rose:

- Mindy
 
I actually find "pussy", "cock" , "ass" and "tits" all an instant turn-off. I immediately go for the back button whenver I see any of these wrods on lit, or anywhere.

Edited to add: Not really: I love obsene language, when it's done eloquently.
 
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The absolutely worst term I can think of is 'twat'.
That conjures up images of wet cotton balls. Don't know why, but it does.

:D
 
I love twat. It puts me in mind of comfortable cammisole knickers thrown on the floor by healthy hockey playing ladies in the nineteen thirties, just before they jump into a communal shower after a tough winter game.

There. My sad little fetish is out. I'm ashamed, yet somehow, proud.
 
I love twat. It puts me in mind of comfortable cammisole knickers thrown on the floor by healthy hockey playing ladies in the nineteen thirties, just before they jump into a communal shower after a tough winter game.

Wow! You've just gave me a sad little fetish to think about. Thanks, I needed that.
 
I'm with Mab. I can't bear chuckle, just doesn't make sense and I really don't know what a chuckle is. When I was doing SRP w/a real live dom he'd use chuckle and it just seemed so antynomous (just made that up) to the scenes, that my character had to un-sub herself.

I'm with Joe too, I love love love TWAT. It's such a favorite word but my association with it is too personal to reveal. One bloke knows though ;) .

Mr. Bullet, I love screwballs, and your example was keen.

I myself purr when others might chuckle.

Perdita

edited for a comma and a misspell. :rolleyes:
 
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Sub Joe said:
I love twat. It puts me in mind of comfortable cammisole knickers thrown on the floor by healthy hockey playing ladies in the nineteen thirties, just before they jump into a communal shower after a tough winter game.

There. My sad little fetish is out. I'm ashamed, yet somehow, proud.

There, there, it's all right dear. Just so long as you can be proud of yourself. If ever you want to talk about it, you're always welcome to a nice cup of tea.

:D
 
How about?

Gusset!

It doesn't matter how delightful a girl's bum is or how skimpy her panties are. That one word 'gusset' would negate all the eroticism that had gone before. Mind you, I haven't actually seen the word on Literotica, but if I had...

Octavian, who would never ever use the word, 'gusset'.

“Encase your majestic tree of manhood in the sublimely soft wondrous wet hallowed depths of my body,” she implored.
“Oh,” he replied, “you mean you wanna fuck!”


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