wonder what i was thinking about?

[cynter]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=135630

 

[HomerPindar]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=135630

Gee, you have to ask after writing that?

It's very straight forward from what I read, and while one does not doubt (indeed, how could one) the passion infused within your intent, I might point out that it doesn't do much for the outsider. Consider this, "Art is the act of making the usual unusual or the unusual usual." This poem though doesn't really strike me as unusual approach to sex, I mean, being a forum chock full of folks who enjoy sex, what you're saying is straight forward. In fact, most of the erotic poetry is just that, very passionate for the one who wrote it, but for an outside reader, it's very straight forward, and nothing new really. (Sorry to be a sole voice that's kinda shooting you down here) BUT, here in lies the good news, there are literally thousands of words you can use (and reuse) still, so there's still plenty of opertunity to keep at it And, as sex and poetry is a fun combination worth the working, reworking, resting afterwards and doing all over again, feel free to stick around and keep at it



HomerPindar

 

[WickedEve]

Hi cynter. I think Homer gave you a very good response. Poems similar to yours are like fortune cookies. They're entertaining at first and you can't wait to crack one open. But if you're one of those people who gets hungry an hour later, then after awhile "you will have good fortune every Wednesday" gets a bit tedious. Just imagine one that says "your ex will be seriously squeezed by an octopus every hump day." It's just another way to say you're going to have good fortune on Wed.

Anyway, remember to show and not tell. Don't tell me about licking pussy. Let me feel it (well, you know what I mean).

 

[cynter]

not a good submission

one of those things. just a spur of the moment wandering through lit and decided to post something directly into the submit block. should of given it more consideration. but eh...didn't. thank you for advice. my apologies......

 

[HomerPindar]

Re: not a good submission

one of those things. just a spur of the moment wandering through lit and decided to post something directly into the submit block. should of given it more consideration. but eh...didn't. thank you for advice. my apologies......

No no no, no need to apologize. Please, if I had to apologize for all of my attempts I'd have very tired fingers. Rather than feeling defeated, please feel free to come back with a new poem that kicks our sorry arses for ever considering displeasing you in the first place

HomerPindar

 

[cynter]

Re: Re: not a good submission

No no no, no need to apologize. Please, if I had to apologize for all of my attempts I'd have very tired fingers. Rather than feeling defeated, please feel free to come back with a new poem that kicks our sorry arses for ever considering displeasing you in the first place

HomerPindar

deal! *scurries off to write a real erotic poem.* uh..don't hold your breath...this could take a while...sigh.

 

[HomerPindar]

Re: Re: Re: not a good submission

deal! *scurries off to write a real erotic poem.* uh..don't hold your breath...this could take a while...sigh.

As all good things erotic and sex related should, so please, take your time...

...and a little to the left there, yes...



HomerPindar