LupusDei
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Okay, this is kinda iterative on the "cute girl forced upon a farm boy disregarding if either wants it or not" general theme I have already explored on this forum repeatedly.
So.
There's a rich married pair and either he or her or both are in some super deep shit and need to dissapear. Permanently. Right now. However, in order to successfully do so, they first must hide away their young adult daughter, who ideally should know nothing about it all, for her own safety. Roughly two weeks before the deadline when the shit hits the fan in a major way, they visit an obscure old-time friend in his farmhouse. He happens to have a son the girl's age.
The boy knows nothing about it. All he sees is that a girl he scarcely knew as a child has blossomed to be super hot, and is on the premises of his farmhouse for a day. His hormones boil over, he outright forgets he have a girlfriend at school (but they sort of split for the summer with no promises, so perhaps he's not that much of an asshole about it) and makes a move. The girl responds kindly, even if she perhaps doesn't think much about him, but it's good fun, and she believes they're there for a day, no more. Anyway, by the nightfall they ended up in, say, sauna together.
It's after that they discover her parents have left, leaving her behind. She's a bit surprised, but not too angry. The boy had been doing great, and she may as well spend the weekend if her folks are such fools to let her. That the boy's mom doesn't object upon them retreating to his bed together still feels slightly surreal though.
Her parents have either planned for it, or jumped the opportunity. Either way, guy's dad knows minimum he must, and mom even less but the very idea that the girl stays. It is telephone conversations with girl's mother when it gets real weird for the boy. He is begged to invite the girl to stay, first for the next week, then he learns the thing is intended to become permanent. Lacking better idea how to do it without revealing the setup to the girl, he proposes her, and to his surprise gets a yes. The hastily set up home ceremony is attended by her parents, for a couple of hours. In with they reveal to her it the last she sees of them. And nothing more.
She is devastated, and trapped, penniless and homeless, although loved by her new family. But then his girlfriend shows up. Confused, she forbids him to break up with the girlfriend over her.
He manages, but then FBI witnesses protection contacts him, claiming they found him by the money girl's father had given him. He had no idea he had it (dad to blame), but doesn't say so. They show him a gravestone with his wife's maiden's name on it, dating death few days before they met. She needs a new, made up past, but everyone insists she should know nothing. Only our guy is sick by keeping secrets.
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1. Neither our boy nor the reader may ever learn the substance of it, but what the fuck the girl's parents are fallen into? Any ideas that doesn't sound too cheesy?
2. Why it's so important to hide the girl? Well, of course threatening her is a fine blackmail, but it seems there's probably more. Again, we may as well never know.
3. How I see the story right now, it's not publishable here because of age of the main pair. Any ideas how to make it work with them being actually legal adults?
Any other comments? I may as well to try to write this, so any assistance is appreciated.
So.
There's a rich married pair and either he or her or both are in some super deep shit and need to dissapear. Permanently. Right now. However, in order to successfully do so, they first must hide away their young adult daughter, who ideally should know nothing about it all, for her own safety. Roughly two weeks before the deadline when the shit hits the fan in a major way, they visit an obscure old-time friend in his farmhouse. He happens to have a son the girl's age.
The boy knows nothing about it. All he sees is that a girl he scarcely knew as a child has blossomed to be super hot, and is on the premises of his farmhouse for a day. His hormones boil over, he outright forgets he have a girlfriend at school (but they sort of split for the summer with no promises, so perhaps he's not that much of an asshole about it) and makes a move. The girl responds kindly, even if she perhaps doesn't think much about him, but it's good fun, and she believes they're there for a day, no more. Anyway, by the nightfall they ended up in, say, sauna together.
It's after that they discover her parents have left, leaving her behind. She's a bit surprised, but not too angry. The boy had been doing great, and she may as well spend the weekend if her folks are such fools to let her. That the boy's mom doesn't object upon them retreating to his bed together still feels slightly surreal though.
Her parents have either planned for it, or jumped the opportunity. Either way, guy's dad knows minimum he must, and mom even less but the very idea that the girl stays. It is telephone conversations with girl's mother when it gets real weird for the boy. He is begged to invite the girl to stay, first for the next week, then he learns the thing is intended to become permanent. Lacking better idea how to do it without revealing the setup to the girl, he proposes her, and to his surprise gets a yes. The hastily set up home ceremony is attended by her parents, for a couple of hours. In with they reveal to her it the last she sees of them. And nothing more.
She is devastated, and trapped, penniless and homeless, although loved by her new family. But then his girlfriend shows up. Confused, she forbids him to break up with the girlfriend over her.
He manages, but then FBI witnesses protection contacts him, claiming they found him by the money girl's father had given him. He had no idea he had it (dad to blame), but doesn't say so. They show him a gravestone with his wife's maiden's name on it, dating death few days before they met. She needs a new, made up past, but everyone insists she should know nothing. Only our guy is sick by keeping secrets.
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1. Neither our boy nor the reader may ever learn the substance of it, but what the fuck the girl's parents are fallen into? Any ideas that doesn't sound too cheesy?
2. Why it's so important to hide the girl? Well, of course threatening her is a fine blackmail, but it seems there's probably more. Again, we may as well never know.
3. How I see the story right now, it's not publishable here because of age of the main pair. Any ideas how to make it work with them being actually legal adults?
Any other comments? I may as well to try to write this, so any assistance is appreciated.
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