MarshAlien
Marshini, anyone? Hic!
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I just posted this on the "Best 'Worst Public Feedback'" thread (feel free to ignore the banter between me and Jim - he's such a card), and it seemed to me that perhaps it should have an audience of its own. One thread has gone missing; another has moved. Maybe we have a moderator now!
Lost your thread? Bummer. You still have Gabby's thread, though, right? Only the first one's gone missing. Actually, the thread you quoted my post from has also disappeared from the Story Feedback Forum and moved to the General Board (http://forum.literotica.com/showthr...12#post24372112) (where Jenny_Jackson's last post was followed by this question from Luxey313: "Who the fuck are you people?" To which kotori responded, "I'm thinking there are a bunch of people on some other forum saying, 'Where the fuck did that thread go?'").
Too funny, huh? Maybe we have a moderator after all. How odd. Have you tried looking elsewhere for yours? If I run across it, I'll let you know.
As for Ralph, perhaps I was too mean. I'm not sure that Ralph (pseudonym = mensasiantravel) was a real serious author seeking feedback, though (which may explain why his thread was deleted). His first post (this was his third) was on the "Sexual Word Association" thread on the general board, where, after "squeezing," "grabbing," holding," and "claimping," he posted "Sexual Pleasure - I am addicted to sex and associate it with pleasure." Then he submitted the post to which I responded:
Although I do appreciate your praise of the "lightness," "deft hand," and "humor" that I am stunned to learn I am "so famous for." You really think they could help me get chicks?
ETA: Turns out the scouries thread has been moved to the General Board as well. Curiouser and curiouser.
scouries said:TODAYS WORST COMMENT
The following wasn’t a comment on a story but was instead a comment on a post someone made about his blog.
What caught my eye was that there is a meanness to the comment that seems way out of proportion to the original post. I mean who cares if this guy has written a blog where he describes his sexual adventures. And includes pictures. In this day and age it’s par for the course!
Where is the lightness, the deft hand, the humor that our AHland court jester is so famous for?
Could it be that this crude pummeling is more about impressing Tinkerbell and the other fawning sweetie than it is about making any valid point?
C’mon Marshman!, this is way below your normal standard, you can do so much better. There is absolutely no need for you to act macho to get laid.
***Awesome, dude! You are obviously quite a wild and crazy guy! I see from your very first post that you love sex and "associate it with pleasure." What a refreshing change of pace! Most of us here at Lit associate it with sitting in an empty baseball stadium drinking warm soda. Having you around will certainly enhance our experience. As for your suspicion that you may be verbose and boring, you may be right. Having scanned your post using the tools we authors employ here at Lit (imagery, plot, dialogue, structure, etc.), I have identified 247 words that could be excised in order to make your submission better. Unfortunately, that leaves you with "Ralph," which, as you suggest, is a little on the boring side.
Best of luck with your next work!
****ALERT***ALERT*** Somebody stole my thread, has anybody seen it? Poor Gabby is pissing her pants…
Lost your thread? Bummer. You still have Gabby's thread, though, right? Only the first one's gone missing. Actually, the thread you quoted my post from has also disappeared from the Story Feedback Forum and moved to the General Board (http://forum.literotica.com/showthr...12#post24372112) (where Jenny_Jackson's last post was followed by this question from Luxey313: "Who the fuck are you people?" To which kotori responded, "I'm thinking there are a bunch of people on some other forum saying, 'Where the fuck did that thread go?'").
Too funny, huh? Maybe we have a moderator after all. How odd. Have you tried looking elsewhere for yours? If I run across it, I'll let you know.
As for Ralph, perhaps I was too mean. I'm not sure that Ralph (pseudonym = mensasiantravel) was a real serious author seeking feedback, though (which may explain why his thread was deleted). His first post (this was his third) was on the "Sexual Word Association" thread on the general board, where, after "squeezing," "grabbing," holding," and "claimping," he posted "Sexual Pleasure - I am addicted to sex and associate it with pleasure." Then he submitted the post to which I responded:
mensasiantravel said:I am a single guy living in Asia and I love sex and love the local women. For a long time I exchanged information and stories with others about my exploits. Last year I decided to create a personal blog to record my sexual adventures on a daily basis.
I include the mundane along with the downright bad experiences so it a very factual account of living here in Asia. I know it’s a personal ego trip but I would like to improve the readability of the blog. I suspect I am too verbose and boring.
I do not claim to be a great writer. I am very open to criticism about the writing but I advise all that I am immune to any moral or personal criticisms of my life style. It will be like water off a ducks back but I know there will be some that will just not be able to hold back. Go for it but don’t expect me to waste anytime defending my lifestyle. You will not be able to convert or convince me any more than I could you so from my perspective it’s a waste of time.
Warning the blog includes very explicit pictures. These are my own. They are not bullshit from porn sites and you will not find any paysite links (just links to other similar sites and some link exchanges).
Having said all that you are welcome to check out my sex blog in my signature.
Ralph
Although I do appreciate your praise of the "lightness," "deft hand," and "humor" that I am stunned to learn I am "so famous for." You really think they could help me get chicks?
ETA: Turns out the scouries thread has been moved to the General Board as well. Curiouser and curiouser.
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