Writing erotica is very new to me. In my signature is my first story accepted to Literotica. It doesn't make much sense by itself but I got a few good reviews so far.
I should explain a bit more about it. This is only an excerpt out of a much larger work. The novel is in dual first person narrative, based on an eighteen year old's view of sex. So naturally the narrative is very halted, frank, and brutal. I'm usually a much more graceful writer, but this time I'm trying to stay in character. It makes the reading slightly less accessable to the everyday reader, but I think it achieves a much greater effect. It's only first draft and I only write it on my off hours. My real current novel is about an eight year old dying of cancer.
The novel is South Beach, a dark erotic fantasy about the swingers on Miami, Florida. It follows two storylines of two eighteen year old lovers. It starts out with a bang, with the male, Michael, first going to his girlfriend's best friend to learn about sex. Angel, the girlfriend, turns out to be a nympomaniac. If you were a guy with a girl as beautiful as Angel, you'd think you'd hit the jackpot. But unforgunately, Angel's obsession is on a debilitating level. The novel quickly descends into madness, with Angel obsessed with sex and Micheal desperately trying to hold her together while trying to make a living. She becomes a porn star, stripper, and escot and does very well at all of them. Michael lets her feed her own addiction while he tends to his own problems and they find themselves falling out of love with each other. In the final climax Angel tries to commit suicide, with Michael plucking her from death at the last moment.
I think that gives some perspective on my story. What do you think? Should I finish this novel? I'm a hundred thirty pages through already.
http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/memberpage.php?uid=741874&page=submissions
I should explain a bit more about it. This is only an excerpt out of a much larger work. The novel is in dual first person narrative, based on an eighteen year old's view of sex. So naturally the narrative is very halted, frank, and brutal. I'm usually a much more graceful writer, but this time I'm trying to stay in character. It makes the reading slightly less accessable to the everyday reader, but I think it achieves a much greater effect. It's only first draft and I only write it on my off hours. My real current novel is about an eight year old dying of cancer.
The novel is South Beach, a dark erotic fantasy about the swingers on Miami, Florida. It follows two storylines of two eighteen year old lovers. It starts out with a bang, with the male, Michael, first going to his girlfriend's best friend to learn about sex. Angel, the girlfriend, turns out to be a nympomaniac. If you were a guy with a girl as beautiful as Angel, you'd think you'd hit the jackpot. But unforgunately, Angel's obsession is on a debilitating level. The novel quickly descends into madness, with Angel obsessed with sex and Micheal desperately trying to hold her together while trying to make a living. She becomes a porn star, stripper, and escot and does very well at all of them. Michael lets her feed her own addiction while he tends to his own problems and they find themselves falling out of love with each other. In the final climax Angel tries to commit suicide, with Michael plucking her from death at the last moment.
I think that gives some perspective on my story. What do you think? Should I finish this novel? I'm a hundred thirty pages through already.
http://english.literotica.com:81/stories/memberpage.php?uid=741874&page=submissions
