Where's Waldo2

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http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=103826


This is finally the fulfillment of a promise. I said I would read and comment on Where’s Waldo2 when I was finished a certain story I was working on. Than I forgot after I was done. I was reminded recently. I know there's three now but haven't got around to reading it yet.
First I want to say that I would send these directly to slickman but I can’t. That new security number won’t come up for me. Rather that’s because of my server or my computer or even Liteerotcia I don’t know. I have just sent in my second E-mail asking if Literotica could do anything about it but so far no response to either.
Anyway to the comments. This is s fun type story. Very erotic, and mostly well written I believe, even though I am not as picky as some are. This one is more intense than the first one. Not sure if intense is the correct word but with the lez scenes and almost incest, and partially gay sex it is more intense. It has more sex scenes but the sex is more intense. The opening scene with Sally telling her story and later with both in the shower together were very erotic. That was a nice move that now both know about the other being in the club even though it took she should have figured it out earlier. Nice move including Macy at the end and I wonder if there will be more gay sex.
There are a couple negative comments mostly having to do with my tastes. First is how fast Ann got into sex with strangers. Her conservative world exploded pretty easily, almost too fast. She got into it even faster than her husband, he only oral sex at the beginning and even though oral sex is still sex, she got into fucking at the beginning. Second point is a personal observation. Ann let a stranger fuck her anally before her husband, I have read a few stories where that happens and even wrote one, (“Do For Lust Won't do For Luv” and other stories can be found at http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=233490 ) but Ann let it happen without a thought to her husband. In fact by the end of the story had her husband had anal sex with her at all? I didn’t read every word so might have missed something but I don’t think so. If she now likes it and loves her husband shouldn’t she want him to do it some time? And I will say that I was disappointed in that I thought, by the way it began, that Sally was already in on it and had perhaps nominated Ann for the club. I wonder who did nominate each and if more will be revealed at some point.
Nether of these criticisms were bad enough to ruin or destroy the story for me but they still effected my enjoyment of it. But as I also said they are more about my personal tastes than the quality of the writing or of the story.
There might be more comments but I can’t recall them right now but if I do or think of something else I will add a PS.

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[Slickman]

WWII

Thanks for your Feedback TBT. I have only been at this a short time and really learn a lot about what works and what doesn't. The Waldo series was mean as a fun thing but the more I got into it the more erotic I saw things happening.

I've noticed a lot of readers like for things to go slow, do some teasing, some foreplay and then into hard core. Others don't like all the foreplay and teasing and like to get into it quickly.

I like the longer lead ins, the teasing, the decision making process of going over to hard core.

After seeing all the HAT IN THE HAT media lately I was thinking about a similar WW series. But, who would wear the big red and white hat to make a sex match in public? Besides Bill Clinton that is.

I would like to hear some of the rest of the readers comments about what works and what doesn't. I've realized that by making some happy I'm pissing off others. But, you know I'm only doing this for fun. Once it does not become fun anymore I'll quit...thanks to all of you for your support and feedback...Slickman

 

[TabooTeller]

First

First before reading Slickman's response I will add a PS. This may sound like a contradiction to something I have laready said but it could be considered if you're going to do it do it right. But I think this is more than just my taste here
Anyway the first anal experience of the wife. I think it should have been described better. How did she feel as it was going in? How long did it take, a couple seconds, a minute? Again this criitisim is not meant to say it was bad but it would have made a erotic scene even more hot.

There may have been something else but I forget right but in any case this is a good fun story well worth reading. You all should read it.


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[TabooTeller]

Re: WWII

Thanks for your Feedback TBT. I have only been at this a short time and really learn a lot about what works and what doesn't. The Waldo series was mean as a fun thing but the more I got into it the more erotic I saw things happening.

I've noticed a lot of readers like for things to go slow, do some teasing, some foreplay and then into hard core. Others don't like all the foreplay and teasing and like to get into it quickly.

I like the longer lead ins, the teasing, the decision making process of going over to hard core.

After seeing all the HAT IN THE HAT media lately I was thinking about a similar WW series. But, who would wear the big red and white hat to make a sex match in public? Besides Bill Clinton that is.

I would like to hear some of the rest of the readers comments about what works and what doesn't. I've realized that by making some happy I'm pissing off others. But, you know I'm only doing this for fun. Once it does not become fun anymore I'll quit...thanks to all of you for your support and feedback...Slickman

Most of the time I like the slow stuff too even though it can get long but I hope this is fun for a while .


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[Slickman]

True. You need some foreplay but not too much or you will lose the reader. True about the Anal...probably went too far too fast with that one. Thanks.

 

[TabooTeller]

True. You need some foreplay but not too much or you will lose the reader. True about the Anal...probably went too far too fast with that one. Thanks.

Hopefully two posts won't appear here I had to do this twice.

Well, you are not the only one that has done that. I have read stories where the guy postions himelf and a second later he's in. Or the writer says "And they had anal sex".

But with my problem you could always have her remember that she had anals ex with her husband on the honeymoon. It was just the once and she had forgotten but now she will have it with him again. Just a thought.

Got to read part three and see if they have sex with each other, as well as others.


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