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Its been a while since I read, “Where’s Woldo” by Slickman, I wasn’t going to make any comments on it but two interesting things happened that prompted me to write this. So while I am at it I will add a critique. A short simple one that is.
Anyway, not a bad story and with an interesting and orginal primise. I read just the the first and last page, for various reasons I don’t feel like reading the two middle pages. However they seemed to be well aritten. One thing I did wonder about was that it was supposed to be a secret from what I understood but the Main Character ends up revealing a bunch of people who are in it.
Second I think it took his wife too long to figure out he was in it. I realize that was what the writter wanted but it for me it was a bit too long. I was disappointed that she hadn’t nominted him as I thought she had. I was able to almost immediantly figure out she was in it already but I believe that was what the writer wanted. As he wanted the MC to not figure out his wife was in it, till it was time for him to.
I think this should have a ssequel or two or three. It seems like that type of story. I thought of something humoourios that could be included in a sequel. Have a husband amd wife figure out at the same time the other in a member. Could be they were both asked to join at the same time and after two or three public sex acts, prehaps becuase of lack of protisapents they have to do each other. They go to the right spot and no one has the right outfit on. They sneakly look and look, then at the same moment they look at what the other is wearing. She may have on a scarf or some such and he maybe a hat or shirt even. They stare at each other. Its like they both know but niether wants to admit it. Finally the husband goes over to hsi wife and askes “Where’s?”
She says Waldo and they both get indicnet with the other. You mean you joined an orgainzation that has public sex???!! next they realize how that looks and begin to laugh, finally they have forgotten who was supposed to do who so they do each other.
Something along those lines anyway.
But now to the interesting details. About a week ago I saw a young woman wearing a Waldo shirt. She was on a street corner and I was turning. Actuallly the red was more a bragndy which went with her hair, yes she had almost bragandy colored hair. I think I smiled with humour. If I had been standing next to her I might have left out a bark of laughter and I would have thought seriously of asking “Where’s?” I would not have, for one thing she looked like she would have gotten rather angery thinking I was making fun of her.
The next event was tiny bit more serious,
My wife came home with a waldo top. Some color as the girl’s. I swear my first thought was something along the lines of opps but then I smiled like the last time, even if it was a mental smile. My wife wouldn’t know what was homurous. But for those smart alecks out there I do not beleive my wife has started recieving a series of Personal letters, esp. since the top did not fit right and she gave that top to my underage daughter to wear around the house. And no I am not looking for my personal letter. However I wrote this last night and I just found out my wife bought herself a larger size. Oh well.
Just thought this would be interesting to share. For here and to the writer.
Its been a while since I read, “Where’s Woldo” by Slickman, I wasn’t going to make any comments on it but two interesting things happened that prompted me to write this. So while I am at it I will add a critique. A short simple one that is.
Anyway, not a bad story and with an interesting and orginal primise. I read just the the first and last page, for various reasons I don’t feel like reading the two middle pages. However they seemed to be well aritten. One thing I did wonder about was that it was supposed to be a secret from what I understood but the Main Character ends up revealing a bunch of people who are in it.
Second I think it took his wife too long to figure out he was in it. I realize that was what the writter wanted but it for me it was a bit too long. I was disappointed that she hadn’t nominted him as I thought she had. I was able to almost immediantly figure out she was in it already but I believe that was what the writer wanted. As he wanted the MC to not figure out his wife was in it, till it was time for him to.
I think this should have a ssequel or two or three. It seems like that type of story. I thought of something humoourios that could be included in a sequel. Have a husband amd wife figure out at the same time the other in a member. Could be they were both asked to join at the same time and after two or three public sex acts, prehaps becuase of lack of protisapents they have to do each other. They go to the right spot and no one has the right outfit on. They sneakly look and look, then at the same moment they look at what the other is wearing. She may have on a scarf or some such and he maybe a hat or shirt even. They stare at each other. Its like they both know but niether wants to admit it. Finally the husband goes over to hsi wife and askes “Where’s?”
She says Waldo and they both get indicnet with the other. You mean you joined an orgainzation that has public sex???!! next they realize how that looks and begin to laugh, finally they have forgotten who was supposed to do who so they do each other.
Something along those lines anyway.
But now to the interesting details. About a week ago I saw a young woman wearing a Waldo shirt. She was on a street corner and I was turning. Actuallly the red was more a bragndy which went with her hair, yes she had almost bragandy colored hair. I think I smiled with humour. If I had been standing next to her I might have left out a bark of laughter and I would have thought seriously of asking “Where’s?” I would not have, for one thing she looked like she would have gotten rather angery thinking I was making fun of her.
The next event was tiny bit more serious,
My wife came home with a waldo top. Some color as the girl’s. I swear my first thought was something along the lines of opps but then I smiled like the last time, even if it was a mental smile. My wife wouldn’t know what was homurous. But for those smart alecks out there I do not beleive my wife has started recieving a series of Personal letters, esp. since the top did not fit right and she gave that top to my underage daughter to wear around the house. And no I am not looking for my personal letter. However I wrote this last night and I just found out my wife bought herself a larger size. Oh well.
Just thought this would be interesting to share.
For here and to the writer. 
