When the Moon Rises

[friazz88]

For when the moon rises
and the sun melts away,
And the wind becomes lost
in the trees;
The solemn expression of hope
thereafter will be
Verdantly planted as seeds.

When the winter wind breathes,
And the summer birds die,
Those seeds that eventuate will...

...Banter the odor of the winter wind's breath,
And the songs the birds play remain still.

Comments please. Constructive criticism

 

[Trumpet39]

I like it!

 

[flyguy69]

I don't get it.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

poem is fine but

enjoyed the poem but the word "and" being repeated three times did irratate me. Not that I haven't made the mistake in the past. I try now to avoid this word but sometimes that is not possible. Keep writing and await more poetry from you
ADELE