zell19861986
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i'm thinking of throwing a poem i've started away. i'm not really liking what i'm doing with it. do you think i should or should i stick with it?
what should i do?
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zell19861986
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all i have of it so far is
She walks down the side
Men buy her every night
She knows only one way to live
To support herself
Nothing gets to her
She's been beating within an inch
She never knew the word love
All she knows is the street
She walks down the side
Men buy her every night
She knows only one way to live
To support herself
Nothing gets to her
She's been beating within an inch
She never knew the word love
All she knows is the street
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Rybka
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Keep everything!
Zell, Never throw anything away. Just put it aside and go on to something else for now. You can always come back to it sometime later if/when the muse strikes. - I have a drawer full (OK, a disk full) of things I have never finished writing.
Re what you posted: Do you mean "beating with in" or "beaten within"?
Zell, Never throw anything away. Just put it aside and go on to something else for now. You can always come back to it sometime later if/when the muse strikes. - I have a drawer full (OK, a disk full) of things I have never finished writing.
Re what you posted: Do you mean "beating with in" or "beaten within"?
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zell19861986
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lol oops "within"
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yah yah
I agree, don't ever throw anything out...if thoughts come, whether they make much sense once on paper, or rhyme, keep them still. I have a habit of writing down tidbits, and then not 'liking' how they sound once they can actually be seen, so I do throw things out, or at least put them aside. Normally, a strong thought, a burning reaction hits, and I write it...and it's never great to begin with, it takes time. lol, then again, I also tend to just submit what comes out without editing it first, because if it's that fierce and fiery to ME, then I'm done. I selfishly expect people to GET me, without knowing me, and I offer no explanation.
I contradict myself, and so this little blurb probly won't be very helpful, but hey. *shrugs*
If you don't let some things outta your head, they'll burn you up.
Good luck with your poem.
I agree, don't ever throw anything out...if thoughts come, whether they make much sense once on paper, or rhyme, keep them still. I have a habit of writing down tidbits, and then not 'liking' how they sound once they can actually be seen, so I do throw things out, or at least put them aside. Normally, a strong thought, a burning reaction hits, and I write it...and it's never great to begin with, it takes time. lol, then again, I also tend to just submit what comes out without editing it first, because if it's that fierce and fiery to ME, then I'm done. I selfishly expect people to GET me, without knowing me, and I offer no explanation.
I contradict myself, and so this little blurb probly won't be very helpful, but hey. *shrugs*
If you don't let some things outta your head, they'll burn you up.Good luck with your poem.
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make a folder on your desktop called "possibilities" and put it in there. when you are having a dry spell, you can go back.
not everything you write has to become a poem, sometimes it is the experience of writing that poem that will lead to another.
don't throw anything away, you never know what it might spark later. It is not a good idea to work on a poem that you are sick of.
good luck!
anna
not everything you write has to become a poem, sometimes it is the experience of writing that poem that will lead to another.
don't throw anything away, you never know what it might spark later. It is not a good idea to work on a poem that you are sick of.
good luck!
anna
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Work it
You haven't put any soul in this. Let's see....put on something like
"She Works Hard For the Money" by Donna S. Then finish at night
when the time is right. If your aren't sure about it then just
send it out in the new poems. Someone will tell you something.
I want to see some heat in it.
You haven't put any soul in this. Let's see....put on something like
"She Works Hard For the Money" by Donna S. Then finish at night
when the time is right. If your aren't sure about it then just
send it out in the new poems. Someone will tell you something.
I want to see some heat in it.
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we all have something as such...I have a epic in the files for a year now..I look at it want to throw it away ...but, I know its just not the time for it to flourish...so my advi ce is to file it and go back in future and in time the rest will follow.
zell19861986 said:
we all have something as such...I have a epic in the files for a year now..I look at it want to throw it away ...but, I know its just not the time for it to flourish...so my advi ce is to file it and go back in future and in time the rest will follow.
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zell19861986 said:
darn, i really want to see how this turns out, i want to know what she gets up to. don't throw it out! lol
if you're sick of it then let it rest for a while (several days, weeks, whatever it takes) then go back to it.
or if you want to keep working on it now, here's some ideas:
- try using each line you have here, and flesh it out with another three lines - just to see what happens.
- add in information that will fill my senses. you're telling me what she is doing, but i want to feel, smell, hear, taste and see her. what's she wearing? what's the street like that she's walking along? what kind of men are picking her up? you make me ache for more information.
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