what form of poem is this?

[echoes_s]

Long ago there was a challenge placed here and I started this poem...just now finishing it. Yeah! I can write again.

Hush he said with a whispered hand
petals pulled gently from my heart
then calm he puckered every strand

with love he tendered tears apart
countered shadows to embered grace
petals pulled gently from my heart

words sooth a quiet ravaged face
dusted clouds bared trembling cries
countered shadows to embered grace

cast hearts to bleary eyes arise
what sleeping creature beauty plays
dusted clouds bared trembling cries

tears of joy rejoice wanton displays
your love a flame at modest tend
what sleeping creature beauty plays

we folded time with sunset blend
hush he said with a whispered hand
your love a flame at modest tend
then calm he puckered every strand

would really appreciate help here, I think it was Angelina who started the challenge and thought it to be an interlocked bob...but not really. Does this ring any memories?

 

[champagne1982]

It's so good to have your poems again.

This isn't an example of IcingSugar's Bob form. What you have here is the villanelle. Yours is a lovely example.

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

Dante!
Terza rima
He usually finished with a rhyming couplet.

Well done!

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

Whoops, I see it too, it is a Villanelle stucture, not sure it follows it.

What the hell is an interlocked bob?

It's nice, whatever it is.

 

[champagne1982]

Whoops, I see it too, it is a Villanelle stucture, not sure it follows it.

What the hell is an interlocked bob?

It's nice, whatever it is.

Well, this one, Weave is an interlocked bob. I'll see if I can find the thread in which the bob was born.

 

[champagne1982]

I may be mistaken. Maybe echoes_s has written a terzanelle

 

[champagne1982]

And here we go.

The Birth of a Bob.​

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

And here we go.

The Birth of a Bob.​

name sucks,
but I like it

 

[MyNecroticSnail]

Well, this one, Weave is an interlocked bob. I'll see if I can find the thread in which the bob was born.

A rather simpleminded WOW. The words fit the form so well, Should I go on?

 

[echoes_s]

you are right Carrie, it is a terzanelle. I searched through other forms last night or early this morning...as it was almost 5 AM before finishing this and the closest I could find was a Villanelle also...but yet knew I had followed a specific structure and there was another name.

Thank you for bringing up the Interlocked Bob thread as this has stayed in my mind also.

I suppose I am too late for the darn contest now eh?

It is so good to be writing again and not stumbling, halting and fighting every step...although last night I was more frustrated with this....growling at the paper, yet like the poem, holding some form of control and focus, so darned determined I was going to finish it this time!

It is like waking up out of some deep slumber...anywhoo...

How is everyone, who is still here/new here? How can I stir up trouble? errr help

Mynecroticsnail...hmm a terza rima, interesting indeed...and Bob is beautiful because of the person who named it so....gasp! Mind your tongue or it will find a clothespin on it

 

[champagne1982]

A rather simpleminded WOW. The words fit the form so well, Should I go on?

Please do. I'd appreciate a new set of eyes peering into this.

edited to add: I've offered my poem, Weave, to the PDC. I'd appreciate if, any comments were posted to its thread if Eve or Lauren open it to discussion.