What do y'all think of my first submission??

[Bootylicious babe]

Hey guys!!
I recently submitted my first story......"The girl in the black dress" and I was just wondering what you thought.
Please let me know!!!

 

[rambling man]

had a lot of good description in it, especially of the woman's body while she was aroused. I personally, though, like to see some twists and turns, although you can go overboard with plot, too. Good first story, though...made me hard!

 

[Bootylicious babe]

Thanx Rambling man!!!!!

 

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